Definitely need to try this when I get time! And I'd definitely say I prefer longer characters. Or just broader characters, with more side scenes outside of their main story. Would love to see some more group interactions too.
I hope you'll enjoy! I'm aiming for my new gyaru trio to overtake steph and zoe as overall best girls!
There's chats in the discord about how to use length effectively, so thanks for weighing in in that note as well. Ace's trying to find where to improve, it's tough to quantify writing skills when doing porn.
very interesting proposal and I am very interested in testing the game, I have only three doubts:
1- According to the images, the player can choose whether to be male or female, right?
2- I know you mentioned being sandbox/freeroam, but does the player have some time to finish the game? some games i played said to be freeroam / sandbox but either they had a time to complete the game and if you fail complete till that time it would lead to bad ending or after beating the main quest the game ended.
3- choices can lead to a bad path or bad ending for that character or for the game?
very interesting proposal and I am very interested in testing the game, I have only three doubts:
1- According to the images, the player can choose whether to be male or female, right?
2- I know you mentioned being sandbox/freeroam, but does the player have some time to finish the game? some games i played said to be freeroam / sandbox but either they had a time to complete the game and if you fail complete till that time it would lead to bad ending or after beating the main quest the game ended.
3- choices can lead to a bad path or bad ending for that character or for the game?
1.Not male and female, it's just the player portrait and pronouns you use.
2. Yeah you have as much time as you like, there's no rush. I experimented with a timer for a certain part of the game but it wasn't fun so I dropped the mechanic.
3. Yes, but the game regularly autosaves so you can just refresh the game or load.
I could use some advice with completing Eva. I got the scene where you fuck her and she remembers her last name. I went to talk to Victoria Devon, but all I got was a blank screen that I had to reload. Then I found a book in the library about her family. Now what do I do?
I could use some advice with completing Eva. I got the scene where you fuck her and she remembers her last name. I went to talk to Victoria Devon, but all I got was a blank screen that I had to reload. Then I found a book in the library about her family. Now what do I do?
I'd like your save if you could send it to me, you could post it here or email it to noodlejacuzzi@gmail.com. It'd help in replicating the blank screen glitch.
But as for what to do, after finding the book Eva should appear in the park.
"Ace" sure know his femboys, but by god it went too far,
they all feel at odd with the tone of the game, and overly complicated, "Chloe" is probably the most tolerable-one.
i think the best type of characters are the ones that has nothing to do with the rest of the game or the "main-plot",
Gekka is great, Robbin-Lee is great, the "Delinquent-Trio" is great, Eva and Sadako are both great,
just write interesting side-characters with their own short contained-stories like them,
ironically your characters will stand-out a lot more and will be a lot more fun to read.
"Ace" sure know his femboys, but by god it went too far,
they all feel at odd with the tone of the game, and overly complicated, "Chloe" is probably the most tolerable-one.
i think the best type of characters are the ones that has nothing to do with the rest of the game or the "main-plot",
Gekka is great, Robbin-Lee is great, the "Delinquent-Trio" is great, Eva and Sadako are both great,
just write interesting side-characters with their own short contained-stories like them,
ironically your characters will stand-out a lot more and will be a lot more fun to read.
Hot dang man I wish I could get feedback this detailed on how to improve my own stuff. I appreciate that you liked my things tho. And no need to apologize for a long essay!
I'll pass the feedback along, but I'm curious on two fronts:
1. Characters written by Cryptogreek (Steph, Nikki, Anna & Lena, Reese, Sienna) are substantially longer than mine. Do you feel they are overwritten? If not, how do you feel crypto avoided this? I'm really curious because I do like writing short chars, but I also do want to attempt longer ones in the future, especially because Steph keeps winning popularity polls over my girls and I want that gold medal!
2. You mention that Chloe still feels overwritten. Could you expand on that, since she's nearly a quarter of the size of Aaron and Dan? Is it just the nature of being a side-character instead of feeling like they're trying to take the spotlight? Does she still have that overly long backstory feeling?
Hot dang man I wish I could get feedback this detailed on how to improve my own stuff. I appreciate that you liked my things tho. And no need to apologize for a long essay!
I'll pass the feedback along, but I'm curious on two fronts:
1. Characters written by Cryptogreek (Steph, Nikki, Anna & Lena, Reese, Sienna) are substantially longer than mine. Do you feel they are overwritten? If not, how do you feel crypto avoided this? I'm really curious because I do like writing short chars, but I also do want to attempt longer ones in the future, especially because Steph keeps winning popularity polls over my girls and I want that gold medal!
2. You mention that Chloe still feels overwritten. Could you expand on that, since she's nearly a quarter of the size of Aaron and Dan? Is it just the nature of being a side-character instead of feeling like they're trying to take the spotlight? Does she still have that overly long backstory feeling?
okay, so to begin with, i'll apologize because i didn't make what i meant by "overwritten" clear-enough
when i said "overwritten" it mean two things:
-characters written too complexes for this kind of games
-characters with way too-much text about them
Speaking of Steph,
if you want to beat "Steph" tho', as much as i love them, i don't think the "Delinquent-Trio" will do,
i love them and they're very fun, but that's because they're comical, no-one would choose them seriously.
I think you might want to make a character about "medium-lenght",
not too-short but not too-long, you could very-much also make a "rival" gal, they have a huge appeal,
what you need would be a character with a unique gimmick and personnality that stand-out compared to others.
i was just spitballing there, but you get the idea,
stories with a clear-goal involving characters with two-dimensionnal personnality,
but interesting and unique personality-traits, will always triump over overly-complexe characters with stories that goes nowhere/dosn't have a goal.
Now concerning Chloe,
When i said she's "overwritten" i didn't mean she had too-much text, nah she's fine on that front,
It's just the gap between having "boohoo i'm prostitute, because of my profession i'm unmarriable" and the rest of the game.
I think she would have been fine if in another-game, but she stand-out like a sore-thumb.
which is ironic because prior to that point, when she was just lewd-as-hell she fit well in your game.
