VN Ren'Py I Want to make a game like Summertime saga, please help review my character.

[HotBamboo]

Hi, I'm HotBamboo, and I'm a huge fan of Summertime Saga.
I've created a character for my game.
Could you please help me review it? Is the art not good enough?





I've previously created a game called "Room of Lust: Dirty Conversation with My Mom."
But I'm just not confident with the art I created. Please give me some advice.

 

[HotBamboo]

By the way the title is : Season Of Lust

 

[olaf_yaddax]

I like their bodies, but there's something about their faces that bothers me. I'm not sure what it is.

 

[Doorknob22]

The shading around the breasts in the first image are all wrong IMHO.

 

[HotBamboo]

I like their bodies, but there's something about their faces that bothers me. I'm not sure what it is.

Thank you for your opinion, but please tell me what's missing. Hahaha, I'm really curious.
I really want to improve my art.

 

[HotBamboo]

The shading around the breasts in the first image are all wrong IMHO.

Thanks, I'll do a revision on that. By the way, your game is awesome!!!

 

[olaf_yaddax]

Thank you for your opinion, but please tell me what's missing. Hahaha, I'm really curious.
I really want to improve my art.

I'm not entirely sure. The woman's eyes seem a bit too large compared to the rest of her face. Perhaps reducing them slightly might help. But I'm no art expert, I'm just stating my opinion.

 

[HotBamboo]

I'm not entirely sure. The woman's eyes seem a bit too large compared to the rest of her face. Perhaps reducing them slightly might help. But I'm no art expert, I'm just stating my opinion.

Wow, thanks, now that I've noticed it's true, I'll try to revise it...

 

[Venom995]

Thanks, I'll do a revision on that. By the way, your game is awesome!!!

Link..

 

[entovx15]

mommy material less goooo

 

[eaudecologne]

Let's see her butthole now

 

[Venom995]

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Let's see her butthole now

Bro suggest me some Best NTR female protagonist game

 

[eaudecologne]

Bro suggest me some Best NTR female protagonist game

https://f95zone.to/threads/amys-ecstasy-v1-0-gilgagames.94805/ here bro

 

[CaptainBipto]

Hi, I'm HotBamboo, and I'm a huge fan of Summertime Saga.
I've created a character for my game.
Could you please help me review it? Is the art not good enough?


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I've previously created a game called "Room of Lust: Dirty Conversation with My Mom."
But I'm just not confident with the art I created. Please give me some advice.

Personally, the art looks fine to me. The pictures don't tick off some of my personal preferences, but the art is perfectly fine.

I do like the bigger eyes, it makes their face seem a bit more expressive. The boobs on the first character are a bit too big for my tastes, but some people do love them some huge melons.
The chin on both characters looks too sharp to my tastes. It may be an artistic thing, but I just prefer a slightly more rounded look instead of that more pointed style.

 

[Insomnimaniac Games]

I'm not entirely sure. The woman's eyes seem a bit too large compared to the rest of her face. Perhaps reducing them slightly might help. But I'm no art expert, I'm just stating my opinion.

I don't think it's the size. Looks more like the shape. One eye is more downturned then the other, making them look like two separate shapes on the same face. Edited this one a bit to show what I mean.

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Other than the eyes, I'd say the necks are a bit too wide with chins that sharp, and the mouths could probably be moved up a few pixels.

All in all though, it looks pretty good. Good luck with the game HotBamboo!

 

[HotBamboo]

I'm not entirely sure. The woman's eyes seem a bit too large compared to the rest of her face. Perhaps reducing them slightly might help. But I'm no art expert, I'm just stating my opinion.

Yes sir, I have done some updates, for my character standards, your opinion is very important

 

[HotBamboo]

mommy material less goooo

100% mommy route will there

 

[HotBamboo]

Bro suggest me some Best NTR female protagonist game

Do you like the NTR genre?

You can try my recently released VN games. Here are the titles of my NTR games:

1. Fumiko and the Village of Lust
2. Netorare Wife - Yukiko - 20 Years After Marriage

 

[HotBamboo]

Personally, the art looks fine to me. The pictures don't tick off some of my personal preferences, but the art is perfectly fine.

I do like the bigger eyes, it makes their face seem a bit more expressive. The boobs on the first character are a bit too big for my tastes, but some people do love them some huge melons.
The chin on both characters looks too sharp to my tastes. It may be an artistic thing, but I just prefer a slightly more rounded look instead of that more pointed style.

Thank you for your advice, I really appreciate it. I learned a lot here. I will try to see the comparison after I try the different versions of the chin

 

[HotBamboo]

I don't think it's the size. Looks more like the shape. One eye is more downturned then the other, making them look like two separate shapes on the same face. Edited this one a bit to show what I mean.

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Other than the eyes, I'd say the necks are a bit too wide with chins that sharp, and the mouths could probably be moved up a few pixels.

All in all though, it looks pretty good. Good luck with the game HotBamboo!

Wow, you even edited my art to give me advice, I really appreciate that. I'm really grateful, I hope I can be as great a developer as you.