The author is quite skilled. Their attention to flow and detail is impressive.
Consider the following excerpt:
What I have a problem with is the pacing. Events progress too fast. We need more character development, tension, teasing, internal struggle, fear, curiosity, confusion, make me sweat goddammit!
Well, I have to say, as little as the game offered, it did make me sweat.
If the purpose of this demo was to show the author's skill, passion, and sensitivity in the quickest way possible, then I guess this was the best way to do it, wasn't it?
I hope you'll go back and fill the gaps you skipped, the fun is in the girl's struggle.
This is a gem that is in serious need of polishing.
I give it 5 unpolished stars.
The author should use their time well.
Best of luck,
You just earned a fan.