It's funny and has kept my attention despite deleting it repeatedly.
My only real complaint apart from I don't really care for the sex scenes is that the whole "mind control bullshit and always a bigger previously un-hinted at or unknown fish that ignores previously repeatedly stated rules" recurring subplot wore out its welcome a long, long time ago and went from neat to starting to drain the little patience I had for the kinda obviously not proofread writing.
My only real complaint apart from I don't really care for the sex scenes is that the whole "mind control bullshit and always a bigger previously un-hinted at or unknown fish that ignores previously repeatedly stated rules" recurring subplot wore out its welcome a long, long time ago and went from neat to starting to drain the little patience I had for the kinda obviously not proofread writing.