I wish I could give this a higher rating, but there was more bad than good.
Good:
* Great graphics
Bad:
* Terrible, and poorly written dialog.
* The scenes of intimacy were poorly animated, and just looked awkward.
* Without any sort of deviation in the narrative, you cannot really call this a game. It is basically just a generic, and linear visual novel with no player interaction.
Not to mention, you claim in the descriptor of the game that you're going to deliver content on a weekly, but this first episode was small potatoes compared to the content you would receive in an early Where the Heart is, Adventurous Couple or Good Girl Gone Bad update. Even if you delivered 4 episodes in a month, they wouldn't really even have half the depth of half of one of these games updates.
I hope you don't take any offense when I say this, but you should probably go back to the drawing board and try something else with this first update. Fix the dialog, and add in some player choice.
I really hope to see your game succeed, because you have a great idea on your hands. But without that player choice, it is just a generic VN.
Good:
* Great graphics
Bad:
* Terrible, and poorly written dialog.
* The scenes of intimacy were poorly animated, and just looked awkward.
* Without any sort of deviation in the narrative, you cannot really call this a game. It is basically just a generic, and linear visual novel with no player interaction.
Not to mention, you claim in the descriptor of the game that you're going to deliver content on a weekly, but this first episode was small potatoes compared to the content you would receive in an early Where the Heart is, Adventurous Couple or Good Girl Gone Bad update. Even if you delivered 4 episodes in a month, they wouldn't really even have half the depth of half of one of these games updates.
I hope you don't take any offense when I say this, but you should probably go back to the drawing board and try something else with this first update. Fix the dialog, and add in some player choice.
I really hope to see your game succeed, because you have a great idea on your hands. But without that player choice, it is just a generic VN.
