VN - Others - Long Story Short [v0.10a1] [TTrickGames]

The only good thing about this game are the choices and the UI imo. If you love choices, choices that matter I might add. You may love this game.

There is a lot more to a game than good choices however, for one, the characters look like aliens. Their eyes are way too big for their head. Also, the English is not great but definitely passable. This leads me onto the next issue, the dialogue and story. The dialogue and story are very juvenile and nonsensical.

I hope this game improves since i really do want to enjoy it.

As it stands in v0.5 the game is simply too good to be true..literally. Let me be clear that this game is amazing and one of a kind right now. But I think it will be extremely tough to write a middle and impossible to write an ending to this game, without cutting some of the branches off the tree. Honestly I wouldn't mind if some of them just end in Game Over to simplify. There is a core group of the MC, a male best friend and two women in a love triangle/square, the problem is that the decision are almost TOO impactful..I had a lot of fun getting every possibility but they're so unique in their branching that it will get exponentially tough to detail each branch. If you thought that sounded like a doozy, it appears more characters may be added into the game..my lord.

But let's talk about what's absolutely amazing about v0.5 for now. Your best friend is dating a girl and they're trying to set you up with a shy innocent girl. Sounds generic but it is not and it is all about the execution; you can be best bros with your friend or back stab him and ruin the relationship. You can take his girl or not. You can corrupt the innocent girl, go NTR or not. I haven't even described all the major variables that influence branching now or will have to in the future. All these things are interconnected logically in this story. It's truly amazing. You will play through this multiple times even though it's only v0.5

A couple of notes; the character models are amazing. The environments are OK, but the (female) character models are perfect and I'm A-OK with that tradeoff. There is a feature to look at the social media of the girls and I would encourage more of that because it's excellent for the corruption storylines.

Also game creator if you are reading this thank you (and please allow skipping of unread lines)

SO EPIC that it should be in epic games next to fortnite wow definetly one of my best 3 games i ve ever played in this site, great story, love the cheating sexy bff' s gf and looking for more and honestly great renders this game should be advertised more it s easily one of the best 10 games of all times but though few patreons less then 150 .I hope the dev don't stop with this fine art and I am definetly a patreon after this

Can't recommend enough
This game is very well made. The UI is smooth and beautiful. Even the main menu has multiple themes you can select from the settings. It works well with unity although you don't get the option to rollback like you do in RenPy.

It's a game with many paths. There are a good number of characters for now and more to come later. There is some sharing/ntr that's optional. The girls are pretty hot.

Try it.

Just two words HOT STUFF

You have many options/paths neutral, sharing or harem
It gives the game diversity

Also the scenes are few but hot the tease is immense you cant play this without pause or you will have to fab

Vanessa and Emily are espeically hot I hope the developer will feature more amazing scenes like that its incredible hot I cant wait for more

It has an extremely comfy and accessible plot. Throughout I found myself smiling. The renders are nice. Not the highest quality, but attention was obiously given to the environment. I love the skin textures. I never got uncanny vally feelings from overly smooth, doll-like appearances. Not the greatest sex apeal, but there's some heart in it. Definitely not your average throw-away porn game.
If I were to criticize something, the kissing renders look... off. Also, the story leans into a lot of cliches but in a way that still feels natural. This NEEDS editing though. The english leaves a lot to be desired, leaving the flow of conversations to your imagination.

First game I've bothered to review.

English isn't perfect, but not a real issue.

Biggest compliment is there's not novels of text to read. I'm not reading a shitty story like most games, it's just sentences like a real convo would be.

Choices are interesting, characters interesting (Joe is a bit weird though).

Hopefully more content comes soon.

A welcome surprise of a game. The way the story has progressed thus far suggests several pathways for progression which offers replayability. The renders are good and the character development is trending upward. Lot of hope for this project and look forward to future releases.

Damn this is good this is the first game ive been compelled to make a review on cause DAMN THIS IS GOOD
theres only a few days but already there like 30 paths all of them as fleshed out as teh rest, the art is beautiful, the writing is great and all the characters feel like they could exist, each of the smalles choices you make have a big impact, i cant rrcommend this enough

Long review short


The good

• One of few adult Unity games that run smoothly.
• Decent renders
• Alex & her instagram (the comments are actually funny).
• Good amount of choices / routes
• Clean UI

The improvable

• As a VN Long Story Short would still work better in Ren'Py (rollback, save & load times).
• Many characters are simply not attractive (uncanny / disproportional looks) or likeable - or both.
• Insufferable "don't you envy my new life?" friend (seriously, what's up with all these annoying "best friends" in adult games?)
• The writing (dialogue & story) is often awkward, juvenile or downright nonsensical and made me cringe a lot (for example: The MC and Joe haven't met for a year even though they are neighbours & bffs, "suddenly a sister", etc.).
• Occasional screen flickering when loading save files.
• Low-key Engrish with quite a few grammatical errors and typos.

Overall not a bad VN, but not a great one either.
I wished the dev had put more effort into creating attractive & likeable characters and coherent dialogue & story.
In the end the best thing about Long Story Short is the technical realisation (engine / UI), although Ren'Py would still have been the better choice.

v0.5

+ Interesting and original story developments in spite or the classic settings
+ Great models, specially the blonde and the friend's girlfriend
+ Great H-scenes (situations and well drawn)
+ Interesting choices, i can't say if they're meaningful as i didn't replay to try other options but they may well be

- It's not completed yet ;-)

It's a 5* game if you don't have any problems with the tags.

Long story short: Amazing game!
I don't like visual novels at all. As there is so much to read i loose my interest in the first 5 mins.

Suggestions:
1. Please make that the actual corruption levels are visible. Not like its hidden now.
2. This game has a great opportunity for sandbox/free-play, FROM this point on. Which will make it the best game ever. Once MC starts a job , makes money, tries to maintain his relationships with everyone. (I guess that was the original plan)
3. More cuckold. More bottle spinning. More parties. More high heels. More dynamic dresses. More cheating. More threesomes...

Now: why this game is so great:
1. Smart sentences.
2. Short MC answers.
3. The story is definitely taking your attention
4. Options/answers are given frequently and keeps you intrigued
5. MOST importantly - breathtaking graphics and smart clothing(Actual dresses that fit perfectly well and sexy to the models, not just piece of texture on manually adjusted polygons)

Omg! Omg! Awesome game.Very underrated (unfortunately ) . The protagonist is me, like, 14 years ago.Lots of plot twists, interesting story, dialogues, renders! Beautiful picture in general.Game worth playing.

Really, a nice game, actually. First of all, I know what is your greatest fear going into playing a non-Ren'py VN - crappy interface - but it's not the case. This game has a really nice interface with skip, log, and a convenient save system - almost equivalent to Ren'py.

Now the story. The first thing that I liked is that the characters are not complete morons. The characters are quite believable and have some depth. The story also does well to keep things interesting so it doesn't feel boring. The dialogues are also more or less realistic - they talk in a way you expect adults with fully developed brains to talk. The sexual events are formulated well enough that you can digest them.

I have one complaint though - you see the cute nerd girl on the cover of the game - Ann ? I gave this game a shot just because of her. And in the beginning, I liked her type. I was thinking, yeah, smart and pure girls like Ann are worth 100 Vannessa's (her slutty friend and your friends GF). It made sense since she seemed to be the "focal" girl of this game. But unfortunately, I saw little character buildup (other than sexual progress) on her part compared to Vanessa, who turned out to be a much more interesting character compared to Ann who seemed quite bland. As a self-proclaimed nerd myself (just kidding, I don't need to proclaim it really ), I find that quite offensive. I hope there is more depth to her character that would be revealed in the coming updates, otherwise, I would assume that the writer doesn't know how to write her type. I'm only saying this because he/she wrote Vanessa's character quite well.

Overall, it's a really good game. It's got good replayability with quite a few different branches. It has good attention to detail and maintains quality. I didn't have to think twice to give it a 5/5.

I like the storytelling narrative. Render is top theres a few short animation too. More social media appearence than other games so it was something fresh. Choices seems matters and girls are beauties.

Honestly, I'd have to say this game is one of the best made Unity games. Usually I hate Unity games cause they take a long time and the UI is weird. I don't know how much better this game would've been if it was made on Ren'py but one thing I do like about this game are the little things. First, this game has an "Instagram" where you can post comments on pictures of girls. While they don't matter, I find it funny to post the dumbest stuff possible (like posting a super-long copy pasta). Not only that but the game is essentially a Ren'py game made on Unity which combines the ease of use of Ren'py and the game engine of Unity.

This is one of my favorite games here.

Pros:
* Hot renders
* Enjoyable characters
* Decent dialog
* Choices matter, and there is a good deal of branching of plot

Cons:
* No music
* No gallery to view previous work

Definitely recommend playing this one.

Excelent game with great potential.

The renders are really good and the characters' personalities really show through their appearences.
The strong part of this game though is the story. At first it makes you relate and care about the characters (MC and his friend). Secondly it has a good plot and the interaction with the girls is unique for each one of them. Finally choices really do matter here. I payed this game 3 times each making different choices and i was amazed of how much the story changed each time. It really rewards the player who wants to corrupt the main girl and on the other hand it is perfect for those who wish to just have the perfect romantic relationship with her, both discovering sex step by step.

Overall great game and a nice surprise for someone like me who hadn't tried it till 0.5. I can't wait to see more (especially more of the sister, ugh sorry i meant roomate)!
Also incusion of insta is a fine little extra touch that can play out both ways, good job!

tl;dr: renders look good and story+choices are fine. However, the characters sometimes don't feel real due to the way they talk.

- The story is fine, and the choices actually make a good difference.
- Most of the renders are great.
- The dialogues can feel off. The grammar and spelling are mostly fine, and it read pleasantly. However, the characters sometimes talk unrealistically.
If a character is shy, and doesn't go out often, it's okay to let them say that they don't go out often, or don't drink. But a shy person saying that they don't go out because they're shy feels weird. Also, a barman telling a customer off that they're ordering water, is rude, and weird giving that they're wanting tips.

It's one of the few games, where the use of Unity for a VN is actually okay:
-The developer clearly put some effort in making the game usable. Simple things like having right click immediately go to save, not asking for a confirmation. The interactions are quick.
- There's still improvement possible for the engine. Like allowing enter to progress text, not having to click to confirm your name, etc. Or fixing the weird thing that your saves change order every time that you go back to the game.

Ok so it is one of the best games out there, with non-liner plot and actual characters. Well done, folk. Well done. It is basically made of netori line, where you are trying t get your friend girl, but their relationships is disturbing a fuck, and dinmics becomes more and more fucked up as you go into it.