HTML Love & Vice [R13] [MakinWaves]
Some spelling problems
In the scene where the player proposes his plan to be promoted to manager: "his eyes burry into you" should be bury
Meeting Lydia: "Look if you going to do this at least ask for a spot. Names (player)" -> "Look, if you're going to do this at least ask for a spot."
The last paragraph has a number of small problems.
"No longer feeling up to the rest of your workout, you grab your things and head for the showers. The soothing heat of the water doing wonders to calm. With a clearer head, it’s easier to convince yourself to not take her rudeness personally. It hard to imagine taking the whole thing gracefully if the situation had been reversed. Regardless you try putting her out of mind, believing the chances of that desired introduction are slim now."
"The soothing heat of the water doing wonders to calm." on its own is not grammatically correct. Alternate could be "The soothing heat of the water does wonders to calm you down."
"It hard to imagine" should be "It's hard to imagine."
Maybe should be a comma after "regardless" but I'm not 100% sure.
In the scene where the player proposes his plan to be promoted to manager: "his eyes burry into you" should be bury
Meeting Lydia: "Look if you going to do this at least ask for a spot. Names (player)" -> "Look, if you're going to do this at least ask for a spot."
The last paragraph has a number of small problems.
"No longer feeling up to the rest of your workout, you grab your things and head for the showers. The soothing heat of the water doing wonders to calm. With a clearer head, it’s easier to convince yourself to not take her rudeness personally. It hard to imagine taking the whole thing gracefully if the situation had been reversed. Regardless you try putting her out of mind, believing the chances of that desired introduction are slim now."
"The soothing heat of the water doing wonders to calm." on its own is not grammatically correct. Alternate could be "The soothing heat of the water does wonders to calm you down."
"It hard to imagine" should be "It's hard to imagine."
Maybe should be a comma after "regardless" but I'm not 100% sure.
Thanks for pointing these out! I'll get them fixed for the next release.
It doesn't do anything. I should probably remove it.
What boss? You thinking the MC should buy a mansion and all women in the harem move in there so no more jumping all over the place??? xD "WINK WINK" lmfao
I don't have a solid window to share. Majority of the content is done but I'm trying to get Sins of Night out asap. Couple weeks after that probably.
So the only interaction I've got with her is the "club's future" where you can fuck her after work. If I make the choice with Mel it ends in low favour. Is it already locked in at that point or if I keep repeating that enough will I be able to get the positive end?
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I didn't know you had another game. I just tested it and It was great like this one. I think I will subscribe to your subscribestar
