Ren'Py Lust in Suburbs [v0.11] [eggsov]

[lancekro]

eggsov I've discovered your game today and gave it a try.

I played with the patch and there are a lot of things that are not patched.
A few instances of landlady instead of mom, one or two times tenant instead of son and also MC calls Lena by her name instead of calling her mom.
These errors where mostly in the earlier events, I'm guessing all events prior to the most recent update.
You should replace all the key words with variables and think about things like MC and Lina using the mom/landlady variable instead Lena and other characters should still use Lena's name.

There was one time where I tried to go to the shop when it was evening and the message at the top of the screen was in russian.

The art looks really nice.

The navigation and UI are decent.
But the world feels a bit empty, since the game is still very early in development I can't really complain about that for now.

So far there isn't much of a story so I can't really judge that point.

The english isn't very good, you should find someone that speaks proper english to help with that or at least run the dialogues through AI to improve the grammar.

I also think you should change the font, having all the text in caps is quite painful to read through.

And you should also add the possibility to have transparent textbox and text outlines to make sure it's still readable with the transparent textbox.
I have a personal mod that forces those features and works on 99% of renpy games, if you want I can share it with you so you can take a look at the code.

All in all, this game has some potential but is very bare-bones for now.
I wish you the best and I'll check back on this game when a few more updates come out.

 

[eggsov]

eggsov I've discovered your game today and gave it a try.

I played with the patch and there are a lot of things that are not patched.
A few instances of landlady instead of mom, one or two times tenant instead of son and also MC calls Lena by her name instead of calling her mom.
These errors where mostly in the earlier events, I'm guessing all events prior to the most recent update.
You should replace all the key words with variables and think about things like MC and Lina using the mom/landlady variable instead Lena and other characters should still use Lena's name.

There was one time where I tried to go to the shop when it was evening and the message at the top of the screen was in russian.

The art looks really nice.

The navigation and UI are decent.
But the world feels a bit empty, since the game is still very early in development I can't really complain about that for now.

So far there isn't much of a story so I can't really judge that point.

The english isn't very good, you should find someone that speaks proper english to help with that or at least run the dialogues through AI to improve the grammar.

I also think you should change the font, having all the text in caps is quite painful to read through.

And you should also add the possibility to have transparent textbox and text outlines to make sure it's still readable with the transparent textbox.
I have a personal mod that forces those features and works on 99% of renpy games, if you want I can share it with you so you can take a look at the code.

All in all, this game has some potential but is very bare-bones for now.
I wish you the best and I'll check back on this game when a few more updates come out.

Wow, thank you so much for such a detailed comment. I really appreciate you taking the time to notice all these things and write them out. The game is still very early, so yeah a lot is still rough: the patch isn’t fully done and the English needs work. Your suggestion about variables is a great idea, I’ll definitely fix that.

The font and transparent textbox suggestion is also really cool. If you don’t mind, feel free to share your mod.

I’m really glad you liked the art and navigation, that kind of feedback gives me a lot of motivation to keep going

 

[lancekro]

Wow, thank you so much for such a detailed comment. I really appreciate you taking the time to notice all these things and write them out. The game is still very early, so yeah a lot is still rough: the patch isn’t fully done and the English needs work. Your suggestion about variables is a great idea, I’ll definitely fix that.

The font and transparent textbox suggestion is also really cool. If you don’t mind, feel free to share your mod.

I’m really glad you liked the art and navigation, that kind of feedback gives me a lot of motivation to keep going

So here is my mod for transparent textbox and text outlines.
It forces those features on but if you want to implement it in your game you should probably make it an option in the settings.

For anyone who want to install this mod while waiting for it to be implemented into the game you just need to extract the content of the mod in the game's root folder (same place as .exe) and merge folders when prompted.

 

[xXGojiraXc]

"Sex"

 

[CharleyT]

eggsov I've discovered your game today and gave it a try.

I played with the patch and there are a lot of things that are not patched.
A few instances of landlady instead of mom, one or two times tenant instead of son and also MC calls Lena by her name instead of calling her mom.
These errors where mostly in the earlier events, I'm guessing all events prior to the most recent update.
You should replace all the key words with variables and think about things like MC and Lina using the mom/landlady variable instead Lena and other characters should still use Lena's name.

There was one time where I tried to go to the shop when it was evening and the message at the top of the screen was in russian.

The art looks really nice.

The navigation and UI are decent.
But the world feels a bit empty, since the game is still very early in development I can't really complain about that for now.

So far there isn't much of a story so I can't really judge that point.

The english isn't very good, you should find someone that speaks proper english to help with that or at least run the dialogues through AI to improve the grammar.

I also think you should change the font, having all the text in caps is quite painful to read through.

And you should also add the possibility to have transparent textbox and text outlines to make sure it's still readable with the transparent textbox.
I have a personal mod that forces those features and works on 99% of renpy games, if you want I can share it with you so you can take a look at the code.

All in all, this game has some potential but is very bare-bones for now.
I wish you the best and I'll check back on this game when a few more updates come out.

What patch?

 

[lancekro]

What patch? View attachment 5233494

In the archive with the game files there is another archive called "Mode0.3.rar".
This archive contains the patch and a .txt file with instructions to install it.

PS: I think that screen shot you posted is one of the things that got missed by the patch.

 

[CharleyT]

In the archive with the game files there is another archive called "Mode0.3.rar".
This archive contains the patch and a .txt file with instructions to install it.

PS: I think that screen shot you posted is one of the things that got missed by the patch.

Oh right...I added the mode thing, just thought that was for it to be in English, but cool, thanks.

 

[mdmnsjs1]

how do you apologize to lina when shes never around???? any help would be appreciated thanks

 

[lancekro]

how do you apologize to lina when shes never around???? any help would be appreciated thanks

Did you buy the candies (the first item in the shop)?
For me the event triggered when entering her room in the morning I think, maybe day time.

 

[Speppo82]

This is cool, if you use the mod the game become russian and you cant change language

EDIT:

Use only the first two rpy files and than you got your incest game

 

[IXL]

Game has no issues at all if you start a new game.

There are some language errors for some reason where some scenes show in russian, but thats fixable.

Good work so far...

 

[BiggusDikkus]

So far the dialog is in Russian. I tried changing the language in the options but nothing changed. I did install the Mode file.

 

[lancekro]

So far the dialog is in Russian. I tried changing the language in the options but nothing changed. I did install the Mode file.

I the Mode files there are 4 files, the first 2 are for english and the other 2 are for russian.
If you install them all the russian version is read last by renpy and thus over writes everything to russian.
Just delete the 2 files with ru at the end and it will be back to english.

 

[N3M3S1S69]

for the mod id make two one for english and one for russian or explain that in notes... second only got as far as the living room with lina and already some minor issues since its talking about landlady.. Attention to detain my friend.

 

[N3M3S1S69]

went too outside world bookstore in russian, day four back to landlady, think ill wait a while and check on this game later..

 

[Meloned]

Looks lovely

 

[Cumplings]

Amazing work.

 

[odbpm]

if you use incest mode you cant name mc, if you use custom mode to change mc's name the is no incest

 

[lolcop101]

Great, more character intros instead of developing the central relationship. Like 95% of incest games. Urghh.

 

[theyakuzi]

dat ass tho, peak

maybe add more teasing like zooming in on dat ass , some shaking maybe eventually u get to spread it etc before going all in with the sex scenes