VN - Ren'Py - Mayfly [v0.1 Reset] [JasonTon]

It a good game, with a good story that gives the Dev a lot of potencial to easly produce a 5 stars game. The models are all perfect, the animations could be better, i feel the Dev has a lot of room to improve in the department (animations). I'm eager to see the next updates. Thank you for your game

Great VN and one the most promising honey select VN in the f95 site.
The visuals are extremely good and the story is great so far.
Beautiful Lis and strong MC, Underworld and Vigilantes , Superpowers and Harem, Elfs and cyberpunk tech , it has everything.
Furthermore I liked MC a lot and also all the Lis which i found them very beautiful and unique.
My favorite LI is Nikita (love her so far) but i also liked Emma.
Thankfully the fetishes are avoidable so i want to thank dev for this.
and from what i see in the comments lesbian content isnt gonna be in the harem and personally i loved this fact so thanks again dev.
Nonetheless this VN have potential to be one of the best honey select VN so i hope it continue like this.
Im gonna bookmark it and keep my eye on it for future updates.
I highly recommend it.

Mayfly 0.1 Reset

This game looks nice, has cute girls (though mostly very similar in body type), and decent music/sounds. Otherwise, it's pretty awful. The setting is just a nonsensical mashup of popular genres that all seem out of place together despite attempts to explain portions of the world through really bad exposition dumps. We've already got corpos and augmented people with cyberware, elves, super-powered metahumans and other unknowns all coexisting in a cliche rich city + poor city setup with multiple criminal and law enforcement factions and characters that like to make poorly executed pop culture references from our own world. None of it gels. There's a part that is randomly done in a comic book style and I have no clue why. The writing is a mixture of incredibly tedious/boring and incredibly cringe inducing. None of it flows naturally and it can be hard to tell what's even happening at times since it's so nonsensical and poorly written. The girls outfits make it feel like everyone's in random cosplay a good deal of the time. There aren't many choices and the ones thus far are mostly fake ones that don't really affect anything except in variables/points set with the girls I assume. It's just illusion of choice quite a bit thus far. Perhaps worst of all is the incessant unnecessary use of random transition effects between renders... it's maddening and only delays getting through the story longer.

Wow, I just finished the first chapter, and it was amazing. I'm really looking forward to the second chapter and I hope it will surprise me too. This game has the best graph and render quality I have ever seen. but Some of the part is little bit confused. Very good game made my dick stand up

The reset version really brought me a lot of surprises. Whether it's the story content or character modeling, I feel it's much better than before the reset. The game's scene lighting rendering and background music application are also great

The recent reviews was high rated, so I thought let's give it a try, it have my favourite tag too superpower tag, I played the demo and 0.1 reset both, it's a new game I just found recently, after playing the game, I was proved wrong.

According to preview pictures game looks really interesting, but when I play this game, 1st thing I don't like is MC, he's a total shitass, and cocky as hell, it's ok to be little cocky/arrogant but at least you should have something special, this is our typical game where girls have abnormal strength, power and intelligence, and where MC is a shitass, I'm sorry but I can't control myself using harsh words, you could at least made MC a little better.

About lis can't say anything but one thing is for sure they all look dominant and look more powerful than MC, I think dev forget to add femdom tag.

Story is pretty boring not that much boring but from start it's boring just 10 mins I played I decided to delete the game but I thought let's finished it, still don't know about his purpose what actually his motivation, and what actually he wants despite his harem.

There's nothing much to talk about renders, music, sound effects and animation pretty much around decent, graphics is around average I think.

Well here ends my review, despite everything I said game defienetly worth a shot, but still it's boring for me, if he changed the MC then I might try again for now it's not my cup of tea.

Comprehensive score：9/10
Renders：10/10
Character Modeling：9/10
Music：9/10
STORY：8/10
It's a great game with a lot of potential, especially the renders, it can definitely be in the top 10.
When I play the game, you find yourself in a fantasy world, like in a novel. You get a very intense sense of immersion. Excellent image quality, appropriate music, gives you a very pleasant atmosphere.

This game has the best render among the same category in my opinion. I like the old two versions, but the reset version is even much better, quite impressive. The sex scene of the reset version is complete and with a lot of details and outstanding animations. The story looks grand, and we just discovered very little of it. I hope it won’t be too complex and we can focus more on the main LIs. Best wish.

This game is quite interesting and promising, the renders're also very impressive but I hope that it'll have something like piercing, anal or bdsm. It may make this game reach more people. Good luck to you.

okay so I tried but I couldn't finish it which is a shame because I really liked the graphics and the aesthetic but i'll do my best to explain why. First, the
but that's not where the issues end okay let's move on


I wish it was over but no
idk if it was implemented in future but exposition doesn't just have to be through dialogue. our protag can have thoughts that are just his own and sometime he can narrate things to the player. it's cool. just don't make it during urgent situations like a gd bank heist. also flash backs are just annoying if they add nothing to the overarching plot.

cool i get it, these guys have known each other for a while, i don't need to know unnecessary memories they have together. I'm playing now and I'll learn about the characters now yeah? Maybe that's how others talk but i don't hangout with my friends bringing up & talking about the past over and over again and if someone did that i'd find it annoying. unless it was relevant and added some sort of value to the current situation.

if i played some more i'd probably have more to say but i just couldn't get past everything i wrote above. hope this helps the dev

This is certainly better than average. And yet bad.

The game warns you that you'd have a better experience with the brightness turned up. That's the first game that's told me that. Makes me wonder why this couldn't just be developed with more light. But that's something I probably won't know the answer to.
I think this is the first time I've felt like the graphics are overdone. Some of the story scenes have too much to them, then they get switched out in seconds for another overdone background all while in story. This also doesn't skimp out on story so again, there's a lot going on.
A fuck ton of renders, a maybe above average amount of story. So it seems like extra stuff before the content I came for = extra word and graphic count to less content.
during the story, we get random poses out of the blue. Perhaps to showcase the girls. But we don't do anything with that or about the poses right away. Hell! We didn't do anything with that girl in this reset build.

I'm interested to get to the explanation where the mc's vigilanted group waited for a few guards to be killed, one of the bank teller's eye's to be yanked out. And more as they seemed to be a little more ready/aware than just reactive.

I have not tried this before the reset so no idea how that compares.

In addition, the sex scene came out of the blue. . . . I don't mind the girl. .. but that was quite random after a night of flirting with the elf.

For the record, I can in no ways match something like this with game making, story righting, or more.
But I wouldn't beat around the bush that much. Unless I was getting paid/supported that much over the average market rates for porn game devs and that was what my supporters wanted.

I really like the renders, they're fucking gorgeous. The addition of curated background music is also a great touch, but it is VERY jarring when the background music cuts to silence after the very short animation it was used for.

What is also jarring, is the way the animations end, and it cuts to a black screen at the end instead of transitioning smoothly to the static render. I had very high hopes for this VN looking at the screenshots, but it was tough for me to get very far through, also due to the rough writing.

I think starting off the VN with a Dark Knight reference is...a bit overly ambitious, since even Dark Knight had Batman Begins before it to build off of. There's this weird jumping between exposition that we're supposed to care about and the bank robbery scene . Part of the reason it worked out so beautifully in the movie is because it wasn't interrupted by any other scenes.

This VN has SO much promise, but I feel like it's held back by odd creative choices.

Ouch, this was worse than I expected.

Let's start with first choice of the game:
- Stand up for yourself = game over
OK, off to a great start there.

Moving on, MC is cocky as hell. His social and fighting skills meanwhile...yeah, let's not go there. He's borderline useless, constantly insulted and treated like trash while doing...well, nothing really.

Story COULD be interesting, and edgy MC would be ok for the environment, if he had ANYTHING going for him. But there is 0 investment in MC when he's all talk, no action, no charisma, no backbone, no skill, nothing whatsoever.
If I get out of my chair right now, then walk to some politician and start throwing insults at his bodyguards and him, while acting like they can't touch me, it won't make for a good book or interesting events (unless looking for a good laugh).

Girls are, well, female domination tag is definitely deserved. They all treat MC like hot garbage, and since, like established in previous paragraphs, his intelligence levels are lower than barbarian in D&D, he thinks it's all cool and interesting.

There is another story beat, about missing sister, which starts, develops, something else happens...then it gets forgotten, because landlady needed to throw the trash out of the room. Sorry, she threw MC out of the room, but that's the same thing.

And if you think there are choices to make, think again. It has, what, 3-4 choices total, 1 of which gives game over on selection, 1 is yes or no for sex with prostitute, and 1 is being nice or pointlessly rude to, for a change, innocent girl.
Hey MC, how about an option to tell RUDE ones to fuck off, and not the ones actually treating him like human being.

I do have 2 positives:
- 1: MC looks genericly decent (strange expression). Model is definitely used in other similar games, but I like it here. Looks cool (shame personality doesn't match...)
- 2: Girls are, mostly, really decent looking. Some are not down my alley (huge breasts are not my thing), but there's good selection, even if there aren't really any scenes with them yet.

Overall though, it's a no for me. Reading anything coming out of MCs mouth is painful. Actually, let's extend that to most of the dialogue in this one.
There's an early scene with 2 bandits and a girl. It draaaaaaaaaags for something like 50 lines of text, constantly repeating same thing, over and over. 1 guy asks something, another corrects him and says some fact, 1st says "no way, how can that be true". Repeat for 10 different things.

Dialogue is horrendous.

Rating for v0.1 Reset

This was a big improvement. The story and MC are very different, and in a good way. The first part - almost 30% of what's there - is well written, takes it's time, but isn't wordy. MC is no longer a doormat and can actually stand on his own two feet in this. He's much more likable overall.

Some of the same characters are here, but in a different way. Some are not, and yet to be seen if they will come back.

Music is well done and fits, but the transitions can be a bit overdone and jarring. Nothing to ruin the experience, once you get used to them.

I'm much more interested in where this is going now and look forward to more.

Updated Review for v0.1 Reset (2 stars -> 3 stars)

Now the remake certainly has improved the game when compared to the old version. Where I couldn't make it past 10 minutes before, I managed to reach the end of content this time around. Thing is, this game didn't improve much in the area it truly needed it: the writing. Putting it nicely, it's extremely rough. Part of it is still due to less than ideal translations, but this is one of those times where I think the script itself is just flawed regardless. It's kind of a mess.

I think the main thing is that this lacks a proper intro/setup/prologue/whatever you want to call it that would otherwise be that sort of hook that starts to immerse you into the game and characters. I've had this problem with a few different AVNs, and I usually aliken it loading into someone's mid-game save. I feel like I'm missing context and info that the game just doesn't tell you. Mainly with the MC and love interests shown. I know nothing about our MC and his motivations, nor much about his connection to any of these characters that keep showing up. I shouldn't have to exit the game and read the overview to understand what's happening.

Half of this version is also spent cutting away from the MC to watch token thugs do a heist for a mysterious villain that the game REALLY wants you to be interested in. And man, it did not work for me. It's trying too hard I think. Bloated maybe is the word.

Then we got this bar sequence. On the way there, we are approached by a lady of the night. As she's talking to us, the girl accompanying us just randomly assaults her??? Not in like a comedic way, but more of a "hey what the fuck is wrong with you" type of way. Not sure why a love interest kicking an innocent woman in the head would make me like her? Very odd.

The strangeness keeps going too, but I'd be writing an essay at this point if I started breaking it all down. Some of the humor and the MCs macho man act is also cringe as hell, but that's a lesser issue in comparison.

Good renders just do not make up for bad writing I personally feel. And honestly the dev's shallow use of depth of field for literally everything makes me want to puke. Another reviewer said the renders almost feels overdone and I'm inclined to agree in that way.

This still was a decent improvement when you compare it to the old version, but the game still feels deeply flawed. I'll say I liked the character designs and I think there's some potential way beneath the surface, but I cannot say I'm eager to check this out again if at all. The dev seems invested in their project so hopefully time does this favors.

Oh my god the renders are AMAZING, and I love the setting and the world the game is placed in, it's EXTREMELY pleasing to look at. In fact, from the MC's design to all of the girls (ESPECIALLY NIKITA), they all look beautiful and its definitely something to take notice of.

I also love the animated/moving scenes a lot, it makes the game seem livelier, and especially in the club scene with the camera recording Gigi's dance, which is definitely a breath of fresh air having someone take the time and effort put in some moving things on the screen that are outside of the sex scenes, would love to see animated fight scenes in the future (if possible)!

Translation is a bit of an issue, but I understand that you now have a proofreader from what I've read on other sites, and from what I can tell from just reading in between the lines, the dialogue could be well written and pretty fun to look at as long as there's proper polishing and touching up on.

The only thing, and I really mean ONLY thing preventing me from giving this game 5 stars is that in a lot of what I've seen in chapter 2, the scenes become very disorientating to look at. One such example is when we're at the Stella and Luna parts of the story and coupled with the transitions and the scene changing back and forth, it becomes very dizzying and really easy to lose your place in the story. This could partially be on me for not taking the time to just look back on the previous messages to try and get a better gist of what was going on, but I genuinely felt my head splitting just from seeing the scene change back and forth only after two messages play out.

On another similar note however, while I dislike the way the scenes are constantly reverberating back and forth, the camera PLACEMENT on the scenes is actually really well done especially in chapter 2, and while the switching did throw me off, I was able to appreciate the scenes much more with how intricate the camera placement was, it was as if you really did do your homework on this stuff.

I am VERY excited to see more content from you and I'm looking forward to being an early adopter of this game and see how it turns out. I see a lot of great potential in this game and I'm glad I could be among the earlier players to experience this.

Also, love the Gundam references, glad to see there's another fan.

The graphics are very good, gorgeous renders.

I love the character design, especially Luna and Ling.

I feel invested in the game, and really want it to become amazing.

More than that though I believe the developer can grow to become among the very best.

TLDR: Great graphics, cute characters and a world filled with potential, held back a little by exposition.

Long opinion on writing and worldbuilding:

To me the writing is the weakest aspect right now. And where I hope to see improvement.

It feels like the developer has a lot of good ideas for the universe. The universe is very intruiging, and brimming with potential. However, currently in my opinion we are introduced to the world in a messy way.

There is too much exposition crammed into a fairly short story atm. There are a lot of instances of characters telling you "corporation x is this, but they are really this", "this area of town is this, and that's because of this".

One example being the whole exposition on the concept of the uppercity being rich and lowercity being poor. We didn't need to be told that.

We can experience with the plot and the visuals that when we do stuff in the undercity it looks less nice and we might have to help people who are struggling financially, and crime might be more frequent.

While we can experience that cases are usually more around corruption, or a higher class of criminal in the uppercity.

Currently we get a bit of both, but the exposition is uneccesary.
There are also a few instances of dialogue that feels a bit like fan-fiction. Instances of the MC being overly edgy without the edgyness being a joke.
Other times where characters say profound or overly deep stuff just for the sake of it, often fairly wordy and poetic and not how most people would actually talk.

Also the story feels like it's taking itself very seriously, so then it's a bit jarring when Luna and Stella are just ok with playing strip hand-wrestling right next to eachother without that much reasonable motivation. Feel like they needed a better incentive then just a favor from us. And like the main character should have had to do a bit more smooth convicing especially to keep them playing considering how hard they were losing.

The political stuff also feels a bit too on the nose. It feels like everyone is constantly telling you "we are doing x, but we are also scheming y, and in secret we are doing z for a". Instead of us more over time discovering that they might be doing "y, and eventually z before finally a".

It feels like everything is just thrown out there right away. These people are super-shady and we as the reader have to know that right away, and only the details and motivations are really left to be discovered.

It leads to way too much information in a short amount of time, information overload, and it doesn't come off as very realistic political intrigue.

Hopefully this doesn't come across as too harsh. It's great that there are a lot of characters with their own motives, and a lot of ongoing story-lines, I just think the story needs to focus a bit more on each of them before jumping between them. I hope it will get better over time, and the potential is very big.

In fact I think the story's ambitiousness is probably what has lead to what im talking about, there are so many pieces to set up, that I think the story would be better off waiting a bit to set some of them up.

At the end of the day I am very excited to see where this goes. All the best of luck.

NOTE:
The writing might actually be perfect and the translation is the issue. That the meaning / tone of stuff is translated poorly. Grammar seems okay most of the time, but could be the meaning isn't always translated optimally. Hard to know without playing it in Chinese, which unfortunately I wouldn't understand.

1 star for now, the dialog at the start is very jumbled, hard to understand whats going on, typos/grammar mistakes everywhere. will re-evaluate rating after digging deeper into the game, but first impression is terrible

Good graphics. Fresh storyline. I will follow the development of this game from today onwards

This is a review of version 0.2, in my opinion this is a very good start for the game

Translation is rather wacky but otherwise this is one of the most promising game in this forum. In short there are superpowers and MC has lot to do, renders are good and music is great, and then there is a lot of sex.