VN - Ren'Py - Midnight Terror [v1.2] [VisualNovels]

Finally a normal mommy who looks like a mature, beautiful, well-groomed woman, normal relations between son and mother, which change by chance. The plot is excellent, I really look forward to the continuation.

I need more! cant wait for the next update! fantastic! bravo bravisimo!
looks like its going the right path aswell! hoping for a kind of open world, but its your game, you deside. keep up the good work.

VERSION: V.1.1
SUMMARY: Most unlucky asshole MC on earth...
RATINGS: (out of 5):

1. Models: 3
2. Animations: 3
3. General Visuals: 3
4. Characters: 2
5. Story: 1
6. Writing: 1
7. Pacing: 2
8. Content (amount): 2
9. UI & Sounds: 2
10. Fetish & kinks: 2

Average: X of 50 possible points giving a X% rating i.e. X stars.

PROS:

1. Models are not too bad looking
2. General visuals and renders are also OK...
3. Able to set your relationship and affiliations but we all know its an incest game anyway.
4. Animations are not too bad either.
5. The characters are not totally bad, at leas how they seem to be written, they clearly have some scruples and are forced into something unnatural and bad, so that is at least done semi OK.

CONS:

1. Mothers face looks haggard for a 50yo with a body like hers, makes no sense really and that should get revised a fair amount. She has a 40-45 year old body and a 60 year old face...
2. Writing is just totally horseshit, the plot is so stupid it can only happen in a game, a badly written one.
3. The writing, spelling are bad, many typos.

FINAL THOUGHTS & SUGGESTIONS:

• While I listed some PROS, they are what is "good" about this game, not that they are in themselves good, because its really a low bar.
• The MC and his "mother" are very unlucky indeed or lucky, depending on how you look at it, I mean the MC gets to bang his mom (even if unwilling) and they end up surviving a plane crash right after and are stranded on an island alone, don't need more of a setup eh...they don't build Air Force One like they used to
• Total bullshit and cheap game IMO, skip until the developer rethinks much of it and produces quality work...

Love the game it's different in the very best of ways, the mom actualy looks her age, my only complaint is the mc is a bit of a pussy. but good job dev. and you came out with an update a month later. Thank you most developers only update every 6 mnths to a year.

Not as terrible as the first review would lead you to believe.

Visuals are ok. They've made fairly good attempts with lighting and angles. Should get better with practice. Models aren't great, but also not terrible either. And it's certainly nice to see a model that shows their supposed age in the face, if not the boobs.

Pacing isn't overly fast IMO. If some confirmed nutter breaks into your place with a knife and threatens to kill you, you will probably do as they say. Bloke does get hard a bit fast though, but I'm betting it's hard to 'thumb in a softy' in CG like this, so porn plot rules will take precedence.

Just a shame it ends so abruptly just as things were getting good.

Has potential. Definitely needs a proofreader. But could be a decent game if the dev puts a bit of effort into fixing a few things.

The premise isn't bad but the execution simply isn't there. The boy and woman of the story give in too quickly and too easily.

The writing needs help, a lot of it.

It's very early so it can still be salvaged. If the Dev sees this here is my advise, take it or leave it.

First find someone to assist in the writing. Sentence structure needs help but so does story creation and also creating good characters. The boy starts off as such a douche that you really don't care what happens to him. Also the reasoning this "maniac" targets him is weak, it needs to be more in depth.

The title is Midnight Terror so don't be afraid to make it darker. Show that this maniac is ready and willing to resort to violence. Some smacking around, yanking by the hair and also maybe some forced punishment. Forced deepthroat with gagging, spanking, tie me up, tie me down, etc. You want the boy and woman to feel a sense of hopelessness.

They are supposed to be feeling fear above anything else, you don't want it to seem as though this maniac is simply bringing out their repressed desires and they are feeling horny above anything else. They don't want to have to do what they are being forced to do , so when they give in it's reluctantly and not without a little protest. Maybe have the maniac insist the boy impregnates the woman so they have a lasting memento of a night of humiliation and shame. There are a lot of possibilities.

Good luck Dev.