To the dev. Your English isn't as bad as some I've come across on here. You don't have a lot to worry about there.
PROS
Renders are good
Writing is good
CONS
Story is bland
Choices???
Overall
Yes, I understand that this is just the intro. So for the few choices you're actually given, they don't matter much. Hopefully that will change. It's almost like the MC is going to be forced into things instead of allowing us, the player, to make choices to impact things. I'll check again with the next update to see if things change. Good luck with your VN
PROS
Renders are good
Writing is good
CONS
Story is bland
Choices???
Overall
Yes, I understand that this is just the intro. So for the few choices you're actually given, they don't matter much. Hopefully that will change. It's almost like the MC is going to be forced into things instead of allowing us, the player, to make choices to impact things. I'll check again with the next update to see if things change. Good luck with your VN