VN - Ren'Py - My Dorm [v0.23.1 S3 Ch.3] [Tropecita Games]

There is no real point in having choices in the game since you are being pushed into a not-really-believable fuck-all-that-moves story. The English (even for a non-native speaker such as myself) is in need of proofreading. The animation is alright.

The story in itself is not very original, but with a better build-up and consequential choices I'd rate it a three and with better proofreading a four.

Good stuff
1) There's a good variety of attractive women.

Meh stuff
1) Protag is a short 21 year old that looks and dresses like he's 40. Could be worse... at least he has a good sized cock and doesn't look like a creep or shota.
2) Story ain't too original.

Bad stuff
1) The writing could use some work.... characters are kinda bland and share the same "voice". I wouldn't be able to tell who's speaking if I couldn't see em. There's too much justifying & explaining going on. They don't act & speak like humans.

There's potential here. May adjust rating if game improves.

Just finished the 0.2 release, and I have to say, this one really hit all the right notes for me. Aside from the obvious non-native English (spelling and grammar are great, but the syntax could use some touch ups) this game shines in most of my favorite departments.

The renders are great, the models are adorable and the incest is believable. The girls are hesitant, and not just willing to throw themselves at the MC simply due to his horse cock. They have real doubts and emotions about such a bizarre situation in the eyes of "normals".

Overall I'd say this game has the potential to be on the level of some of my favorite AVNs. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this thread and hoping this story continues to get better.

TL;DR: the story is interesting enough, and with a lot of sexy girls. Good humor. Overall, game quality is not perfect, but decent enough. It's not a game I'd fall in love with, but good to play.

Details [v0.2.0b]:

It's a decent game, with a sexy premise and good humor. It's not extremely original, but with some original details which make the story interesting enough to follow.

Some models are from that "overused standard pool" like in dozens of other VNs, but in general the girls are sexy. Their characters might be not very original (like a shy girl secretly in love with you for years), but still pretty endearing.

There is a good amount of various female options. The lewd scenes and animations are not bad.

The renders might have occasional strange pose or graininess, but in general they are OK.

The grammar might have a few errors, but there are not many of them, so it's alright. The writing is decent. The pacing of the story might seem a bit on a fast side, but not too much.

Conclusion: the game is not that outstanding, but likeable.

A very promising start. The game is filled with likeable characters. The MC is sympathetic but not God level. He has his insecurities, but he shows flashes of competence, proposing open relationships, taking initiative with Norah. Now, to enumerate some things.

1) The renders are top notch, all the girls are beautiful. We have 2 MILFs who I'm actually impressed by. I'm usually not into MILFs, in fact I'm more of a loli fan, but these two, especially Norah, are HOT! 1 red hot ginger who, so far is my favorite. Cute, innocent, and petite. A blonde with a disability (hearing aids) who had a crush on you 3 years ago and still does, she's tied for me with the pseudo sister for second place. A sister who is engaging, loves Pink, and shows flashes of jealousy. Finally the hot Goth who, so far, has the most content. She is the most broken of the group, the most sensitive, and the first to embrace MC (other than Norah, the MILF).

2) The story. It is well paced, has some medium level lewds which is acceptable for a second release, it feels like the pacing is going well for a not TOO slow burn game. Side characters (2 ex GFs) show off the lewds so far (and shower scene with Norah).

All in all, this game shows promise and hits my hot buttons of incest (carefully hidden cause they're clones) and college dorm setting. Well done and I look forward to more.

Basicially a nice game in it's early state.
For sure it needs some more polish and some work, but given the fact it's the first game of this developer, it's pretty ok for my taste.
The renders are decent, not the best, but also by far not the worst - maybe a bit grainy - guess based on hardware issues for now.
The setup of the story is interesting and makes me fell to get to know more about.
The girls are cute and theres one for different tastes aswell.
Overall the game seems to be intersting based on what we know right now in this early state.
Me for my part, I really liked the game, and i am looking forward for future updates.

Reviewing V1.0

Overall, I liked most of what I saw in this release. I'd call it promising, but it's not without its flaws. Here are some of my observations.

What could be improved:
What I liked:
I think this has potential, hopefully they'll get enough support and deliver on that potential.

I would like to say that this games has a lot of potential, however it's held back by a few glaring issues.

Animations 4/5
Story 2/5
Writing 1.5/5
Renders 4/5
Characters 2/5
Music/Sound 1.5/5

I have a few suggestions that may get your game the attention it deserves. The story starts off decently, but the grammar holds it back way to often. I found myself auto-correcting full sentences/dialogue, which is something you do not want from your audience. I suggest finding an English speaker to help you out on this front, along with a proof-reader to make sure everything is ready to go. Your story would stand out much better when written properly.

I know this is a porn game, but events take place way too fast, while also not giving a proper introduction into each character. I understand they all like the MC but a lot of the lead up to certain events seemed out of place just for the sake of having a nude/sex scene. I suggest slowing it down a bit and build up to these things, while showing how each character is developing towards the MC. It gives the reader a since of connection to each character for better or worse(depends on said character's attitude or personality type...some times even their appearance.).

Most of the girls have the same type of personality, so outside of their look, there's really no difference between them. No one has a goal, other than to have sex with the MC.

Music and sound define almost every living creature in the world, it can make us happy, sad, hopeful, laugh, cry and so on. With such a great tool why would you leave this from your game? Sure you have music here and there but a lot of it is out of place or doesn't t fill the mood. Use these things to your advantage such as, rain, swimming sounds, splashing, morning birds, coffee being made in the cafe/customers talking, and so on. Great music and sound can bring a story to life, while bad music/sound can make it worse.

This game could be amazing with the proper care and love, seek out help with the English parts and fill in the music/sound department, and you'll see how much better the story is for both you and the audience. Ill change my review when/if I see any changes for the betterment of this game.

Review at version 2.0

There isn't really much I can add from review of 1.0.
The grammar is still an issue but there is definitely an improvement from 1.0.

Still really enjoying the game and looking forward to the next version (again )


Review from 1.0
Really enjoyable and awaiting the next update!

If there was one thing I'd have to put fault in, it would be the grammar used but as English isn't the primary language of the creator it's completely understandable.

They may want to get someone to proof read but all in all 5/5 and eagerly awaiting the next update.

Really enjoyed it has great models and the story seems pretty interesting so far and can't wait to see how it all turns out also love the mom and aunt and cousins and i cant wait for future updates dont really know why the dad left because the mom is hot as hell haha

1.0
Not bad, basic same old story setup, but the renderings are good, while the English grammar writing is fine, the sentence structure is unnatural as soon as you get past the setup stage, But i'm guessing since Spanish is the main language of the Devs, it's understandable, Only bugs me a little bit, but i see that time and effort has been put into this beginning, allot of people have already pointed stuff out in the form and has been responded to by a Dev so im sure things will get better with new chapters. Good luck with the development.