VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - My Little Katelyn [Ch. 3] [Ellaraia]

The game has very beautiful graphics and many characters are very attractive, the gameplay is easy, it does not make it difficult for players to play with repetitive segments, a game made quite delicate and meticulous, deserving to play and look forward to. Future upgrades, I hope the author will finish the game in the near future

It's the third game i play , or try, from this dev, and suffers the same issue. An example:
A dialogue between mmc and lucy in the locker room where the are at least 3 descriptions of an action like "you grab her crotch" and "your tongues meet" with a single still image where nothing of that happens.

I hope new games of him/them change this pattern. The vigilant mother/landlady can stay, i guess, but why bothering doing another game if its gonna be the same? Unless you want to MyLK your patreons.

After seeing that, at the beggining of chapter 1 you already cuddle with Katelyn, i dont think this score is going to improve. Maybe abandoning its a good choice.

Version Played: Ch. 3

Time to Complete: 1 hour.

[2/5] Story: This game's too short to have a large underlying story, but I don't even see one forming anyways. The dialogue is extremely hasty, sometimes skipping from place to place in time and space. The progression is offputting, basically being "I want this so I get it," and with there being so little dialogue there really isn't any chance to connect with the characters.

[4/5] Renders: The renders are actually good, ignoring the character models (see below). There's clearly been some work done to make them look quite good, even if some renders are really quite shitty.

[2/5] Renders - Characters: Completely opposite the general render quality are the characters. I simply don't like most of them. MC's model isn't great, though that's no surprise, and some of the character models just look fucked up in general.

Review of Chapter 3

A fairly basic and unremarkable kinetic novel. The MC has a foreign exchange student living in his home that provides temptation in the face of a blue-balling, turbo cunt girlfriend and her bitchy bff.

The dialogue is irritating most of the time. There are only a couple of choices so you don't have much control over the game. The girlfriend is so off-putting that the only choice you'll be crying out for is the one in which you can kick her to the curb. Alas, you can't, so you have to sneak around sucking face with the exchange student while avoiding your cock-blocking mom.

The models and renders are pretty much the standard models present in a hundred other games.

The only thing memorable is how much of a bitch the girlfriend is towards the MC, so this game leaves you feeling frustrated and irritated more than anything else. I guess that's meant to make you feel better about cheating on her? Meh.

Not recommended

Review of 0.3

The characters are believable, the setting is good, and the renders are pleasing to look at (though I find Katelyn's eyes a bit freaky).

I enjoyed the dialog the most! Well done in the writing department!

Version reviewed: ch.3

Plot:

The begining idea were good but i it went worse than i expected.
I like that we can see how MC met Lucy but i would like more to see how many time passes between this and Katelyn´s arrival. Not so much i guess if she had other relationships before you and seen she is pretty young.

Renders and animations:

Renders are good but animations are too fast sometimes. Maybe you don´t need to add more frames but to make it play slower like in slower motion.


Characters:

I don´t know how a character will react because sometimes acts like it has various personalities.
Your girlfriend : When you meet her she looks like an innocent girl who interacts with a boy for the first time judjing by the conversation. It´ll be ok in that case because dispite it is so bad we can think it´s because her lack of experience. But suddenly we know she had boyfriends before and she went all the way with them( i thought you abd she say at beggining her sister don´t let any guy to speak or to be with her or near her). And after saying that she became to speak so rude to you like she don´t give a fuck about you dispite when she wants you to lick her pussy.
She stands you up repeteadly and don´t want to give you any excuses. Same thing when you ask about her past and her daily life. How can you trust her if she don´t treat you well, don´t tell you anything and only cares about you to pleasure her?
She even refuse to do a blow jo because her breath will smell bad(It´s like Mc doesn´t take a bath ??). I will say to her that i won´t do oral on her too because of the same thing.
Katelyn: It like the opposite to your Gf.
Some people asked why she has to do laundry or something like this.
OK, she is an exchange student so i guess your mother doesn´t want her to bring boys home something i understand, in addition this may get her pregnant and Mother would had to explain it to her parents or to avoid Kat to spoil your relationship with your GF.
I think she caught her masturbating to a photo of you and punished her to avoid problems. She only do the laundry, it´s harmless i know friends that did it and some more things like make dinner when they were exchange students. And whe she get mad at her after watching a movie i have to say that she was in her panties in your bed so i think it´s ok coming from his mother and knowing her intentions.
- The only thing that bothers me is why she gest so touchy and lay over you when in bed or in the sofa almost not knowing you and given the fact that you have a girlfriend and your mother don´t like her to be between you two.

Gameplay:

Almost no decisions. Only to kiss Kat or not or to warn Lucy when cumming.
I expected more freedom.
Dialogues are so bad written at the begining but it becomes better in advance.



I think the game was a good idea at the begining but so soon becomes very bad.
And judging by what happened to the first game this dev did it can only go worse.
I will keep an eye but now i don´t have any hope because i don´t think dev will change anything he did and he will keep this shit until it is done and begin another game with pretty good ideas but making a mess again.
In the first game he said it was too ambititious but he should have had more patience and complete it for real, it would have been one of the bests games on here. I just hope he just don´t leave this game because he has a great potential and needs to trust more to himself .
Don´t get me wrong i will be very happy to see it being a great game and i wish the dev the best here.

The first act, when you are supposed to introduce the characters and set a ground to create a plot is done so poorly it looks like it was written by a child. The scene starts with a conversation between the MC and his future girlfriend, but at that point the reader has no idea about the level of relationship between them or if they have met before at all, witch makes the whole conversation very awkward with some silly flirts.
The dialog in this game is very unrealistic, tough is seems to me more a translation problem than a writing problem, but is should be fixed regardless. With that said the plot was surprisingly intresting but the amount of choices you have to play the history with your own personality is vey very limited; ex: when the girlfriend ditched him without giving him a explanation and had also very agressive conversations with eachother i wanted to end the relationship there, but no, you are forced to stay and even worse, you are forced to cheat, is very comical that they introduce a history with decision based gameplay and yet you can't change anything about the history.
Rouding up the visual part of the game is good enough and the plot could become very interesting if well written, if they fix the choice and dialog problem this could become a very good game.

The following review is based off my personal experience with playing this Game/Visual Novel... I try to be as brutally honest and detailed as I can, and these are my own opinions and thoughts, from one or more play throughs... The version this review is based on is Chapters 1 to 2...

The visuals of the characters are ones I've seen before in other VN/Games, with not much variation... All the female student characters look younger then the legal age of 18, which was probably on purpose... The backdrops are basic and I've seen some of them before in other VN/Games... The animations are alright, albeit short... The one scene where the protagonist is masturbating to pictures on his cellphone, needs for the arrow to be more obvious... Because at first I didn't realize it was even there, and began to feel like the scene would never end, before realizing there was an arrow on the cell phone to push the scene along...

The script is decent with only a few spelling/grammar errors... The plot, what little there really is, revolves around a male protagonist high-school student who has a visiting exchange student from Canada living with him, his mother and father, and his sister... He has a girlfriend, but it really feels more like a lust interest then a real girlfriend... Every time they are together, the protagonist just talks about having sex with her, and show no other signs that he has any real feelings for her... And it kind of feels the same with her, as she seems to just play along and shows no real interest in him either, outside of quick sexual acts...

Obviously the exchange student is meant to be a love/lust interest for the protagonist, but how this story plays out leaves something to be desired... First it's how she is treated by the rest of the family, like she is some low level human being, sent to their home just to do maid service... The mother is alright with the protagonist having a girl friend, but not her? That makes no sense, since nothing she does seems all that bad... The father character is over the top and acts like a jerk... What little you see of the sister, at least she is believable, so far... The protagonists relationship with his girlfriend feels hollow, and I suspect the girlfriend and her best friend have some secret between them that the protagonist is just oblivious to... The only time I felt the protagonist showed any real human like qualities, was when he interacted with the exchange student, most of the time...

The story telling also moves rather quickly, focusing mostly on the protagonist and his pervy lust, then really anything meaningful or deep... I can even predict where some of the story elements are going, which is not a good sign, as it shouldn't feel that predictable if it had good story telling... There are some choices presented now and then, most of which change nothing... The only choices that may seem to matter, are whether to kiss the primary love/lust interest or not...

Overall, I think the characters all appear younger then they should for being older high-school students, and the story focuses more on the lust bits then anything meaningful or deep... Which in essence makes this feel more like a porn fest, with tiny amounts of story filler between events... There is obviously something fishy going on with the actual girlfriend... There is a growing relationship with the exchange student, which is befitting with the title... This VN/Game is still early in development, so the developers have time to tweak and improve things... But if it stays it's current pace and route, I don't see it getting any better, or moving outside just being another below average porn fest VN... Only time will tell, as it's still in it's early days...

Reviewing CH.2

Story: Different from other stories, not original but seems to work: A foreign student at home with you and a girlfriend already bored of dealing with you(with a good reason, MC acts like is sooo needy to have some love...i don't know if it's the girlfriend's fault for not going out with him or MC's for being soo eager to stay with her...)

Originality: Censor this review but the foreign girl looks like he came out from Shaping Her Future(it's a fact, same graphic/renders)

Renders: [Read Originality] + the UI is a punch in the eye

Sound: I play on mute, so i don't care about the sound

Playability: the game is still new/young so for now we have like 4-5 choices and i don't know if they have some importancy

Performance: It's a VN eat less RAM,CPU and GPU than my browser

Bugs: Does that UI's uglyness counts as a bug?

Animations: [Read Originality or my review about Shaping Her Future]

Voice Acting: There isn't

Grammar: Meh, i've seen worse...

Amount of content: Game still young, nothing to say

Pros:

* Story starts in media res so state of relationships (girlfriend, Katelyn) aren't so jarring and are understandable.
* Having said that, Katelyn being there a period of time and developing the crush is understandable
* Love the renders, especially Katelyn, but all of them are good.
* LOVE the fact that the writer/creator uses normally-proportioned young women ... bravo!

Cons:
* Everything else having been said, I think Katelyn being so comfortable with the MC walking in on her in underwear is a reach
* Same with him taking his clothes off in front of her
* Typos. 'Nuff said.

I enjoyed the previous @Ellaraia effort Shaping Her Future, but those who would avoid this because SHF was grindy will find this is a completely different ball of wax. I am looking forward to future episodes and hope development on this game goes well and a good audience builds for it.

WAAAAAAUGH!!! Abandoned for greener fields? I was really enjoying this because the main (female) character (i.e., Katelyn) reminded me of the main female character in SHF). However, @Ellaria said they were getting too much negative feedback. Whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy? I love her snarky replies!!! I hope that @Ellaria reconsiders and gives some love to Katelyn because I would be so sad if she went away forever.

My Rating of this Game (Ch. 1 ) is:

Pros:
+ Good Renders
+Nice Closeups
+Easy Playing

Cons:
-Some Typing errors

Conclusion:
Like the Renders,and the Good pace in the game,the girls look sweet and Innocent,and the animation is great.
all in all the game is going off at a good start,all it still needs is a little proof reading but you can still see what the Dev means.
Hope of seeing more.
check it out.....

Worth the download.