Others NekoNTR [v0.0.4b] [nekoaddict]

[nekoaddict]

It isn't a slog to read, so it has that going for it. The tension in the relationship isn't very well written, but the bond is nice for as simple and cutesy as it may be.
Shifts into not being as chatty too abruptly. Vanilla goes distant pretty much as soon as her friends suggest it and then it stays a bit flimsy on feeling like a relationship from there.
The ero text is a mixed bag.
Cartoonish at "You measure yourself... wait a minute, your dick is tiny!" and in a flurry you rush to confront Vanilla about if she bled when you had sex, and she didn't. Oh my god, she's still a virgin!
Like dude what
That's not
I mean
DUde
And then on top of that, when she uses the dildo, there's no blood, so the fact she didn't bleed meant absolutely nothing as a choice. It just comes off truly bizarre.
If she bled on the dildo then you're hitting a niche and rare kink and I'll forgive the silliness of "my dick is so small that she's still a virgin even though we fucked"
But without that, it just seems inexplicable. You should have just had a choice where the player has no had sex with her at all rather than this misunderstanding about what virginity is.

Yeah I added those options months ago as like.. fetish flag toggles? I've always thought they were just kind of out of place but just left them there because they do enable some extra flavor text - or at least the first option does.

Haven't done anything with the virgin option yet and nor was I thinking too hard about it (hence why the dildos don't deflower her despite being bigger or w/e). My thought was that the option would just eventually unlock an additional CG somewhere down the road when the game gets to that point.. at this point I'll probably just leave it as is and go with my original plan but I do agree it could've been done better

That whole spiel with Vanilla's friends putting a wedge between their relationship early on was just kind of to show the influence of them on her; they're slightly older, clearly well off - she looks up to and listens to them even though maybe she shouldn't. Again, probably could've been done better but I've never written a story this long with trying to gradually develop everything over a long period of time (and a lot of the game was written under the influence of many beverages) so looking back I think there is a lot to criticize

 

[nekoaddict]

Story and picture's 10/10. But on Android version overlay doesn't hide after choosing chat or saves, and everything looks glitchy, after some time in game something happens and picture's starts disappearing and replacing for code and after that game crashes like it have leak of memory or something

Haven't heard this one before.. I think the only explanation would be your device running out of RAM?

Chat history is limited to loading 200 messages when you open a chat, but while you're progressing that chat it doesn't remove any messages to keep under that 200 message limit (though it probably should) - so if you play all of Vanilla's chat without ever closing and re-opening it it could have thousands of messages loaded in memory and cause issues? That's my best theory but I've never run into the issue

 

[slexywexy]

Holy moly this has to be one of the biggest day 1 phone game releases. most other games would take months to get here lol. really liking it so far! alot of nice ideas laid out already really like where this could be going. the girl talking in 3rd person to her BF is a little odd but i can look past it with it being this quality.

also not the game yet done yet but wondering why some photos in the GF pov chat are blurred?

 

[nekoaddict]

Holy moly this has to be one of the biggest day 1 phone game releases. most other games would take months to get here lol. really liking it so far! alot of nice ideas laid out already really like where this could be going. the girl talking in 3rd person to her BF is a little odd but i can look past it with it being this quality.

also not the game yet done yet but wondering why some photos in the GF pov chat are blurred?

Those're photos I didn't want the player to see juuuust yet but soon:tm: so I blurred them for now

The 3rd person thing is a quirk of the character Vanilla is based on.. so felt odd not having it - but some texts are also quite difficult to write without "I".. so it's kind of half and half. I think it's kinda cute but just another thing that makes my game, uh.. a little niche?

 

[Xythurr]

Dev better watch out because the Japanese don't play around with copyright infringement and I doubt Sayori will be happy if she discovers this game.

 

[liljustntmbrlake]

This looks really promising. Will you release a Mac version?

 

[nekoaddict]

Dev better watch out because the Japanese don't play around with copyright infringement and I doubt Sayori will be happy if she discovers this game.

Vanilla is obviously somewhat based on, well.. Vanilla - but beyond some character names and reference of a bakery that's about it so should be good? - there are already tons of actual parody games of japanese media and I don't think anything has happened to those and those're worse offenders

 

[nekoaddict]

This looks really promising. Will you release a Mac version?

Not sure.. I don't have a Mac so I wouldn't be able to test it so if there are any Mac-specific issues or anything it would uhh really suck.

I believe there are Android emulators you can get on Mac which would let you use the .apk file which might be an option?

 

[tlx11]

cant wait for next update!

 

[slexywexy]

Those're photos I didn't want the player to see juuuust yet but soon:tm: so I blurred them for now

The 3rd person thing is a quirk of the character Vanilla is based on.. so felt odd not having it - but some texts are also quite difficult to write without "I".. so it's kind of half and half. I think it's kinda cute but just another thing that makes my game, uh.. a little niche?

just got to the end of (are their paths like when the choice to ask her about the site?) this is really good deff will have me waiting for the next update! like how its not just story coming from the main text but everything else too, writting is good too creates a lot of suspense specially at the end!

And I see okay was trying to think if they are blurred cause the bf hasn't seen them yet or something. and ya the Gf sure has her own novelty compared to many other games, ya start to like it after awhile too ad to her personality makes her more memorable. i like the super cute super innocent girl angle who goes bad too

 

[Febui]

Yeah I added those options months ago as like.. fetish flag toggles? I've always thought they were just kind of out of place but just left them there because they do enable some extra flavor text - or at least the first option does.

It can work, but as-is it should be rewritten. Rather than "was my pp 2 small to take her virgin??" just make an option where all the character had ever done with Vanilla was non-penetrative acts like oral and heavy petting. The flavor text brush it off with insecurity holding him back, too nervous to have gone all the way with her because he was afraid his dick is too small to satisfy even though, consciously, he knew Vanilla was 'too pure' to care nearly as much as he does about this 'problem.' It would take the same amount of words as the current weirdness but make much more sense.

Haven't done anything with the virgin option yet and nor was I thinking too hard about it .. at this point I'll probably just leave it as is and go with my original plan but I do agree it could've been done better

I don't imagine it's that hard to get image-gen AI to copy the dildo picture with light staining on the dildo. Plus, it would suit the anxiety the character has when they really push against Vanilla using the toy. Could have Vanilla make some off-hand remark that it's like practice for when the player is ready to do it for real. You can do a lot using a little here, potentially.

probably could've been done better but I've never written a story this long

With a bit of creativity, you can revise a lot of stuff in the middle of a story without compromising the overall structure of what you're going for. But the pacing is something that takes a bit deeper work doing, so I won't count on it.

 

[Duculescu]

Dev better watch out because the Japanese don't play around with copyright infringement and I doubt Sayori will be happy if she discovers this game.

Should be fine, Nekopara girls been used in many different games officially and unofficially: Custom Maid, Cat Fantasy, Vrchat, Koikatsu, Rabi-Ribi, Miku Miku Dance, Source games, and many others.

 

[Xythurr]

Vanilla is obviously somewhat based on, well.. Vanilla - but beyond some character names and reference of a bakery that's about it so should be good? - there are already tons of actual parody games of japanese media and I don't think anything has happened to those and those're worse offenders

Maybe but most parodies aren't making money which is where they draw the line but good luck.

 

[M201200]

Ntr haters will rejoice that there is a vanilla route!

The only available route here I may say. So Vanilla IS NOT AVOIDABLE.

 

[Vladilen]

Well, here's the first bug report

Day 17, right after getting through Day 17, i checked Vanilla's POV for that day and got a copy Elise's messages instead. Although i did end up getting Vanilla's POV for that day near the end of Day 18 instead.

 

[nekoaddict]

It can work, but as-is it should be rewritten. Rather than "was my pp 2 small to take her virgin??" just make an option where all the character had ever done with Vanilla was non-penetrative acts like oral and heavy petting. The flavor text brush it off with insecurity holding him back, too nervous to have gone all the way with her because he was afraid his dick is too small to satisfy even though, consciously, he knew Vanilla was 'too pure' to care nearly as much as he does about this 'problem.' It would take the same amount of words as the current weirdness but make much more sense.I don't imagine it's that hard to get image-gen AI to copy the dildo picture with light staining on the dildo. Plus, it would suit the anxiety the character has when they really push against Vanilla using the toy. Could have Vanilla make some off-hand remark that it's like practice for when the player is ready to do it for real. You can do a lot using a little here, potentially.With a bit of creativity, you can revise a lot of stuff in the middle of a story without compromising the overall structure of what you're going for. But the pacing is something that takes a bit deeper work doing, so I won't count on it.

The pacing particularly is pretty strange for me to deal with - I'm writing a story I've worked on for months, but the actual time players spend reading it is far, far less than that.. so in my head the story has been going on for a while now pretty slowly but from the player's perspective that's not the case

But yeah I do think you're onto something - that insecurity would also still nicely fit in with the character's ongoing dreams.. maybe even more so than the current story? His insecurity and inability to push things further with Vanilla.. and now she's gone to a faraway city without him. I wouldn't want her to lose her virginity to a dildo though, would rather have some hentai logic in place where she loses it instead to an actual partner. I don't like having to retcon the existing story but I think I do prefer your version... I'll probably look into it as part of the next update and see how I feel about it

 

[nekoaddict]

Well, here's the first bug report

Day 17, right after getting through Day 17, i checked Vanilla's POV for that day and got a copy Elise's messages instead.

Is that just the notification that says '1 new message from Elise' but it's something you've already read?

 

[bigballs429243]

Excellent game. Good art, great level of content for a first release, writing is good, pacing is good. And the game even works without shitting itself and breaking like 99% of the ones in this genre. Will be watching with anticipation. Congrats on the release!

 

[blubbervink]

Day 18 - New message from Elise. But no new conversation thread shows up. Bug? or am I missing something?

 

[Vladilen]

Is that just the notification that says '1 new message from Elise' but it's something you've already read?

No it's the whole series of message from Elise, the first series, where she explains to you that Vanilla now work for her.

Although, as i added to my previous post

i did end up getting Vanilla's POV for that day near the end of Day 18 instead