Soundtrack is good, render is good, the overall story idea is also interesting. It's clear, though, that the developer is inexperienced in writing. The dialogue feels a bit weird, quite robotic and "to the point", and it clashes with some characters on whether it desires to be more relaxed or not. Because of the inconsistent feeling of the writing, the score goes down a bit. I assume this will get better as time goes on because it is clear which tropes the characters are playing towards; it's simply the dialogue / writing that needs to be further polished, to better convey feelings/actions and to help set the pace of the "slice of life" feeling of some scenes. Not only that, but proper punctuation or grammar would go a long way to make this feel nicer to read, as well.
Some extra points deduced from several other small "polish" points that are mostly nitpicking, such as: the character portraits when talking, since it looks like they're under a red filter/light of some sort and naked, which clashes with the rest of the screen; slightly weird map movement/positioning of icons; icons such as text bubbles only being clickable on the black part and not being a button forcing you to actually click the correct point instead of just its general location; sandbox in general not feeling much like a necessity; sandbox actions being available as an option before you ever even knew they could be one (Sex Actions appears immediately upon meeting someone or visiting the girl at the café, for example); names being revealed to the reader through the textbox despite the protagonist never really listening to it; among other things.
This VN is on the edge between becoming patreon-bloated sparsed random events that you go to by clicking buttons just to see sex, and something that might actually give an interesting story instead of just being fap material, so I can't judge it too much as of now. Worth a try, though!
Some extra points deduced from several other small "polish" points that are mostly nitpicking, such as: the character portraits when talking, since it looks like they're under a red filter/light of some sort and naked, which clashes with the rest of the screen; slightly weird map movement/positioning of icons; icons such as text bubbles only being clickable on the black part and not being a button forcing you to actually click the correct point instead of just its general location; sandbox in general not feeling much like a necessity; sandbox actions being available as an option before you ever even knew they could be one (Sex Actions appears immediately upon meeting someone or visiting the girl at the café, for example); names being revealed to the reader through the textbox despite the protagonist never really listening to it; among other things.
This VN is on the edge between becoming patreon-bloated sparsed random events that you go to by clicking buttons just to see sex, and something that might actually give an interesting story instead of just being fap material, so I can't judge it too much as of now. Worth a try, though!