HTML Office Queen [v2.0] [Lady Developer]

[Lady Developer]

The dialogue in this is terrible, please put some amount of effort into it. if it's a text based erotic game, then that means the text needs to be good enough to enhance the erotic experience not take the reader out of it.

I am really sorry I promise I will work on it

 

[JohnnyRC88]

 

[keenkp]

I should say your taste is good

 

[Lednacek]

i would enjoy it more if the picture size did not change for every picture.

 

[poiman]

I would see more story and also, well, kinda more "freedom" with choices instead just "click to go forward and give ass"
And dialogue... well... ummm... hmmm... u can do better

 

[I-Love-Adventure]

nice game thank you

 

[lucifer092]

The game is nice, I would love to see its further updates.

 

[Candy1970]

Decent start as mentioned before the text and dialogue need to be polished and expanded also as mentioned the image sizes should be uniform try to pick a size and stick with it . good luck

 

[Lady Developer]

Decent start as mentioned before the text and dialogue need to be polished and expanded also as mentioned the image sizes should be uniform try to pick a size and stick with it . good luck

Ok I will try it

 

[Avaron1974]

Ahhh, the joy of real porn games where everyone looks different in every scene.

 

[possiblyanon]

I am really sorry I promise I will work on it

I do wish you the best, though. I get that it's an initial release, but there are tools to help. Try Grammarly, that should give some help. A dialogue pass with that tool should make it more readable and fix any typos.

 

[DOPAMlNE]

Subpar writing, no consistency in images used. Sorry but this is completely forgettable.

 

[Lady Developer]

Subpar writing, no consistency in images used. Sorry but this is completely forgettable.

really sorry will improve in further updates..I will not disappoint you

 

[Pagal Mad]

source on the gifs

 

[MidaHanna]

Looking forward to where this goes, good luck!

 

[JohnnyRC88]

Downloaded, played for 1 hour and then threw in the trash!
Looks good but I will wait for the next updates.

 

[blackravenoz]

Looks good so far, I will keep an eye on that...

 

[Ahree5sa]

Please be consistent about the names of files and folders. If you cannot remember whether you called your own folder "Images" or "images" I don't see this going far.

Most HTML games have this issue to some extent, and my observation is: the more broken image `src` attributes, the sooner the project will be abandoned.

Make a rule for yourself, like: small letters, numbers, and underscores, but no spaces, nor capital letters.
Or camelCase starting with small letters.

Good Luck!

 

[Trasher2018]

Dont know where the high rating is coming from.

No consistency in the images, no real choices, very short and you get corruption for everything.

Sorry - this is at best a test ... I still have my Twine testing somewhere. That has more content than this.

The writing is flat and bland.

As a testing ground it is a good start I guess, but way to early of a release.

 

[manticore124]