When I started with this VN, I felt that it was good. Character design is better than most. Visuals are relatively simple but they do the job. Sound is adequate. Story is unique and by far the biggest draw. Biggest downfall was a pet peeve of mine, the endless repeating of facts.
It turned out I misinterpreted this, probably because it is a peeve of mine.
I always tell new writers that editing is about ruthlessly chopping up your revered writing to get rid of everything that gets repeated for the audience. This can rip out entire scenes that are simply unneeded for telling the story and yes it can make you cry sometimes.
This visual novel, the repeating exists to manipulate the reader.
I genuinely dread the repeating motifs now because they all end in tragedy and Professor Amethyst knows this is a gut punch to us. Bravo for breaking the rules of writing for a specific and planned purpose. That is the mark of a really great writer.
On the offhand chance it wasn't planned and just a lucky coincidence; just keep doing what you are doing, and smile and nod when someone claims you are brilliant at something.
All the other stuff I brought up is fun to recall because it keeps getting better and oddly enough, that actually fits the story as well.
Spoiler:
The character models began as somewhat more original than most interpretations of the same models, but they become more defined with design choices as the story continues, and that actually strengthens what exactly the story is about, The production value is nowhere near cinematic, but it does get better as you continue and that also fits the story.
The story itself is by far the greatest draw right from the start. It captures emotional situations and masterfully projects them to the reader which is critical for this particular tale. It is unique and deeply philosophical and presents an unfathomable challenge that has no possible good outcome but offers a trail of hope that the reader can easily follow. It also rips away that hope piece by piece as you struggle to reach some resolution.
I always give high marks for good character design, and as you can tell my opinion on the writing. This is a fantastic novel and I eagerly await more.
It turned out I misinterpreted this, probably because it is a peeve of mine.
I always tell new writers that editing is about ruthlessly chopping up your revered writing to get rid of everything that gets repeated for the audience. This can rip out entire scenes that are simply unneeded for telling the story and yes it can make you cry sometimes.
This visual novel, the repeating exists to manipulate the reader.
I genuinely dread the repeating motifs now because they all end in tragedy and Professor Amethyst knows this is a gut punch to us. Bravo for breaking the rules of writing for a specific and planned purpose. That is the mark of a really great writer.
On the offhand chance it wasn't planned and just a lucky coincidence; just keep doing what you are doing, and smile and nod when someone claims you are brilliant at something.
All the other stuff I brought up is fun to recall because it keeps getting better and oddly enough, that actually fits the story as well.
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The character models began as somewhat more original than most interpretations of the same models, but they become more defined with design choices as the story continues, and that actually strengthens what exactly the story is about, The production value is nowhere near cinematic, but it does get better as you continue and that also fits the story.
The story itself is by far the greatest draw right from the start. It captures emotional situations and masterfully projects them to the reader which is critical for this particular tale. It is unique and deeply philosophical and presents an unfathomable challenge that has no possible good outcome but offers a trail of hope that the reader can easily follow. It also rips away that hope piece by piece as you struggle to reach some resolution.
I always give high marks for good character design, and as you can tell my opinion on the writing. This is a fantastic novel and I eagerly await more.