Are you ready for the slowburn?
There's lots of good in this - a straightforward VN, no choice, no mucking around. The plot is very tight, and shows the benefits of keeping the cast of characters and location small. This is like a Twilight Zone episode, no excess, no sprawl.
I like the scene pacing very much. There is a lot of dialogue, but the dev keeps the exchanges short and does the trick of changing the angle of the scene with each spoken line, so it feels very dynamic. A big problem with dialogue in VNs in general is that conversations go on waaaaaaay too long. But that problem doesn't happen here.
The posing is very skillful, natural and cinematic. The female model is nicely va-va-voom. I'm not a fan of animations in general, but I really like the way they're used here. They're subtle, and accent the still images. No jerky thrusting meat poles that remind you of an industrial hot-dog machine here.
Speaking of meat poles, as mentioned, this is super slow burn. Lots of titillation, but if you're looking for quick relief don't come here. I think the dev gets away with it because the suspense element is very well handled, in a kind of B-movie way. Obviously something does have to give, soon I think, and it will be interesting to see how the dev handles that.
Flaws? Well...
There are interior monologues... no no no...
Almost all of the images are at the same focal distance. I think the dev should try to mix things up a bit more with a few closeups and distance-shots.
The dialogue does seem to be straining the dev's writing skill. The female lead has twice cooked "new recipes", and in general there's a lot of talk about food. This is another thing I notice in VNs - when at a loss, make the dialogue about food. I wonder if it's because there are so many Daz assets of cups and hamburgers and pancakes etc. It does start to sound like a mosquito in your ear. But the dialogue is getting more stilted as the game goes on, which is a problem with stretching things out.
The one big thing I don't like, and this may be more a taste issue, is that I have a problem with how the two leads are characterized. The male lead is just a little too young. And the female lead is weirdly inconsistent. Like, she seems to love her fiance, but then she's also intent on teasing his younger brother. In fiction, character is motivation, and the characters in this VN are inexplicable in terms of what they do. Am I overthinking? Well, if you're gonna do a long, slow burn like this, you're gonna get your readers thinking about this kind of thing.
My usual taste in these things is forover-the-top, precious bodily fluids sort of thing, but I am thoroughly enjoying this so far. Hopefully the slow-burn will catch fire soon.
There's lots of good in this - a straightforward VN, no choice, no mucking around. The plot is very tight, and shows the benefits of keeping the cast of characters and location small. This is like a Twilight Zone episode, no excess, no sprawl.
I like the scene pacing very much. There is a lot of dialogue, but the dev keeps the exchanges short and does the trick of changing the angle of the scene with each spoken line, so it feels very dynamic. A big problem with dialogue in VNs in general is that conversations go on waaaaaaay too long. But that problem doesn't happen here.
The posing is very skillful, natural and cinematic. The female model is nicely va-va-voom. I'm not a fan of animations in general, but I really like the way they're used here. They're subtle, and accent the still images. No jerky thrusting meat poles that remind you of an industrial hot-dog machine here.
Speaking of meat poles, as mentioned, this is super slow burn. Lots of titillation, but if you're looking for quick relief don't come here. I think the dev gets away with it because the suspense element is very well handled, in a kind of B-movie way. Obviously something does have to give, soon I think, and it will be interesting to see how the dev handles that.
Flaws? Well...
There are interior monologues... no no no...
Almost all of the images are at the same focal distance. I think the dev should try to mix things up a bit more with a few closeups and distance-shots.
The dialogue does seem to be straining the dev's writing skill. The female lead has twice cooked "new recipes", and in general there's a lot of talk about food. This is another thing I notice in VNs - when at a loss, make the dialogue about food. I wonder if it's because there are so many Daz assets of cups and hamburgers and pancakes etc. It does start to sound like a mosquito in your ear. But the dialogue is getting more stilted as the game goes on, which is a problem with stretching things out.
The one big thing I don't like, and this may be more a taste issue, is that I have a problem with how the two leads are characterized. The male lead is just a little too young. And the female lead is weirdly inconsistent. Like, she seems to love her fiance, but then she's also intent on teasing his younger brother. In fiction, character is motivation, and the characters in this VN are inexplicable in terms of what they do. Am I overthinking? Well, if you're gonna do a long, slow burn like this, you're gonna get your readers thinking about this kind of thing.
My usual taste in these things is forover-the-top, precious bodily fluids sort of thing, but I am thoroughly enjoying this so far. Hopefully the slow-burn will catch fire soon.
I'm sure a lovly F95 member will fix that though