VN - Ren'Py - Ravenous [Arc 2 Ep. 8] [Lament Entertainment]

Good renders, basic story, but my God. As others have mentioned typos and grammar errors every other sentence. Completely takes me out of the experience. My IQ was already low, and this might have lowered it further.

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Character art style is good and renders are ok. But Main character design needs some change. And about the story, i have nothing to say. Because there is nothing . I still don't know what is going on or what it is about.

The character models are fine, the writing is littered with spelling errors, the writer doesn't even seem to know there is a difference between "your" and "you're."
I know it's petty, but when the mistakes go beyond a certain threshold, it really begins to take me out of the game, that was definitely the case here.
I liked the intro with the newspaper, that was a bit original, of course then the story devolved into the by now usual "family with dark secrets, boy returns to female family members who are already dying to sit on his cock and something mystical."

And it's not just the family, the first female he meets outside of them is also instantly making out with him.
And I got to say, that made me a bit sad, because Candace is a really unusual looking character, freckles, short hair, no humongous tits, but a nice pair, a hot ass etc.
Excuse me going off track a bit by describing a way for the plot to unfold with Candace, I would have hugely preferred:

Let me say something about the MC, because many other reviewers mention him both in a positive and negative way.
Some things are indeed normal, most people when confronted with incest would be shocked and disgusted as well. There is no problem with his initial reaction, it is indeed more realistic than anything else.
Now in regard to his look, the guy is supposed to be a young adult, but he looks like a little kid.
Basically a scrawny 15-year-old boy, no way has he finished school.
Now, this type of guy might look attractive to a lot of younger girls, it might also look attractive to some kid-chasing older women, but definitely not to the by no means small group of ladies, who still like masculine men.
You know, face like an adult, hair in the face and on the chest, a nice built, maybe. And mature enough to be taken serious as a possible love interest.
And again, the guy is supposed to be an adult, not a teenager, at least if he is a teenager, he is supposedly 18-19 y/o.
I don't mind an MC looking like that in a high school setting, but apart from that, we have more than enough of those scrawny kids running around as MCs in games, playing grown-ups. Is there a rule that MCs have to look like little shits in any porn VN with incest in it? Is this supposed to at least partially include the shota crowd? IDK, but for a game with this set-up, with this supposed story, I expected an adult MC, even if it was just one of the 2-3 adult male models you see in most of these games.


I don't mean to shit on this game, it has only very little content for now, this could become much better, just a few updates in, and it's not like it's completely horrible, but for now it is just such a complete pastiche of all the clichés you can think of in incest games, which has a long way to go to become good, in any way original and satisfying. It's just that so many characters in these games look cut and paste and when I stumble upon one who has a different look, I always hope the game does something great with her, not just make her another bitch, hypnotized by MC magic dick.
Again, I don't want to attack the dev, nor the game, it's just starting out, it CAN become something else, something better, but as new games go, this doesn't exactly set the world on fire.

Drawn by the appeal of an incest game that doesn't require a mod or changing landlady to mom, I gave this a shot.

Now few other people may point out the writing and grammar, when I first started playing it's instantly notable, I thought this would be one for the bin, but either it's just at the very beginning or I just didn't really notice later because it never really seems to be an issue after.

The game has a nice set up for a first update, interesting enough premise, attractive women, lots of taboo. Spoilers, I thought it was funny that the son had a normal reaction to the daughter going down on the mom, just goes "nope" and leaves, even if I do expect him to go to pound town on those asses later.

I came for the loli's and stayed for the story.

Up front, there are grammatical issues. I think the dev will work those out over time and I'm mentioning it but not hitting them on it since it's early.

Great story, renders are solid. The mood is set will with lighting and creativity. The story is refreshing and engaging. Not all models are super star bombshells but attractive enough. I like the mix of MILFs and Lolis. Honestly there isn't much to complain about. It's light on content but it's early in the dev cycle so that's forgivable since what is there is really good.

Look forward to this one. Great job Dev and keep up the great work.

Not often do I leave a review but here I had to. There isn't much to the story yet but it has potential, and the renders look quite good. However, as a non native English speaker, I have to say that the grammar is abysmal. The dev can't tell the difference between "your" and "you're", drops an occasional "u" here and there, omits apostophes almost entirely unless trying to write in eye dialect ("ma' " for "my"). Capitalisation is completely random and passes like "i'm wore out" instead of "I'm worn out" are the sugar on top. The entire thing reads like comments on dumbest subreddits and it spoils the entire experience. It really needs a competent proofreader.

This game was really well put together. Good dialog, good renders, interesting plot, sexy character models and even some appropriate music. I'm really interested in seeing more of this game. The only drawback was that there were some typos here and there but that stuff is easily fixed. 10 out of 10 for me.