HTML Abandoned Restart: A Bad Childhood Story [Prologue] [Adult Lazy Game]

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Adult Lazy Game

Adult Lazy Game

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You are Tamara Washington, an 18-years-old girl, who moves to live in New Skytree. Her childhood wasn't perfect, but your task denotes to give the best life she deserved.​

Thread Updated: 2020-09-18
Release Date: 2020-09-18
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Version: Prologue
OS: Windows, Linux, Mac, Android
Language: English
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looks not bad on the first view, wait for further content :cool:
 
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Yeah, tried it because I like the premise, but... It's really short and what's there isn't that amazing so far.

I mean, html is not the greatest way to make a great porn game. Real porn images is also not the best way. So you start already at a disadvantage compared to Renpy / Daz VN's, of which there are plenty around at the moment. I'm not saying you can't make up for it, either by a great story or by having content that's hard to find elsewhere, but so far this game doesn't have neither...

Sorry to be blunt, but this did feel like a waste of time.

My advise would be to wait releasing anything further until there is at least a good amount of content.

And yes, I know it says "prologue" in the title so maybe I was just a fool for trying it out but at this point I just can't recommend this game and I think you are doing yourself a disservice by putting it out there already.
 
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Yeah, tried it because I like the premise, but... It's really short and what's there isn't that amazing so far.

I mean, html is not the greatest way to make a great porn game. Real porn images is also not the best way. So you start already at a disadvantage compared to Renpy / Daz VN's, of which there are plenty around at the moment. I'm not saying you can't make up for it, either by a great story or by having content that's hard to find elsewhere, but so far this game doesn't have neither...

Sorry to be blunt, but this did feel like a waste of time.

My advise would be to wait releasing anything further until there is at least a good amount of content.

And yes, I know it says "prologue" in the title so maybe I was just a fool for trying it out but at this point I just can't recommend this game and I think you are doing yourself a disservice by putting it out there already.
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HTML/Real porn are a matter of preference, some people think the same of renders. Just avoid the tags if you're not a fan, it's like bitching about ntr in ntr threads
 
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The decision to make it HTML/Real Porn was actually a good one. It may be a little less sheer effort but there is still a lot of work going into selecting the images for the scenes you're writing. You have to make sure that the actress/actors you've selected has done scenes with every other character's actor/actress now AND in the future versions. Also, the HTML platform is a lot better and presents less bugs/annoying things to deal with than that garbage that is called RenPy ....I've got a lot of problems with it, but the one that takes the cake for me was the ability to forbid you to switch via Alt + Tab to another app that's not in fullscreen.

The one thing that I can't stand is broken English as I'm an English language maniac. So please fix the writing. Ask someone native or at least at a very advanced level to check the text for you.
 
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The concept is nice, I've always been a fan of grittier games that aren't afraid to play on darker themes. The execution here? Not so nice. I'm not going to say much about the English here since it's obviously not your native language, but if you're going to use American names, then make sure you spell them correctly consistently. Washington and Washigthon are two different names. If you insist on writing in English for an English-speaking audience, then maybe look into teaching yourself some more of it. It'll be beneficial for this game, and for the future. Or maybe look for someone willing to help out with/edit/rephrase your content. I really do like the consistency in the gifs/images so far, though. The girls used look close enough to be the same on a lot of them.

I use colored dialogue myself, and it's a good tool as long as you don't start picking up too many characters. That's fine, the issue is the dialogue format. There's nothing wrong with it outside of a severe lack of punctuation, it's just annoying to read (for me at least).

Instead of doing this:

- Mrs. Washigthon, we are calling from Saint Mary Virgin Hospital! - the voice said.
- What is wrong? It's unusual to call me? - mom answered.

Do this:

"Mrs. Washington, we are calling from Saint Mary Virgin Hospital," the voice said, his/her voice charged with urgency.

"What's wrong? It's unusual to call me." your mom answered. (not exactly sure what you were trying to say here, tbh. No normal household should be getting calls from hospital that often. It's obvious, and thus verbose.)

The other major issue is context and lack of progression, all topped off with vague detail, little description, and practically no content outside of pictures. How did your mother meet Alfred? Why is she being gangbanged? Why doesn't Tamara forcefully put her mother into rehab? Why doesn't Tamara call the cops on Alfred? Why is Tamara looking at colleges when her mother is working at a cafe and she appears to be unemployed herself? Why is the sister with their grandparents and not Tamara? How does Tamara go from not having a signal to picking one up as soon as a trucker arrives? Why does Derek go after Tamara despite not doing anything to her? Why does he kill her after raping her? She only knows his first name and a nondescript appearance. All he has to do is rape her, knock her out, and then leave. What's his motive to murder her?

I'd say get some help or put this on hold and brush up on your English/grammar. It's very surface, with no depth. Everything is being told and not drawn. 'You look at the note', 'you look at the building stunningly', 'He takes off his pants', etc. These are basics. The who, what, when, where, and why. All that being said, keep at it and keep improving. That's the best form of practice, imo. :)
 
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HTML/Real porn are a matter of preference, some people think the same of renders. Just avoid the tags if you're not a fan, it's like bitching about ntr in ntr threads
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Not saying I avoid it like the plague, but in my opinion it is something of a drawback that needs to be overcome by something else.
 
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well with the patreon and then 0 updates i would say the game is dead or this was an attempt at a money grab that failed , sad cause it started well except for the typo''s .....
 
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