VN - Ren'Py - Completed - SandStorm (EraStorm Saga #1) [v2.01] [GleenX Studio]

I have been playing for 30 minutes and so far there is 1 negative thing, and 2 positives:

The two positives are the renders, which are of a very decent quality but since the Egypt thing is kind of new and fresh, im inclined to rate it higher than average. So far i have only seen a couple of attempts at sex scenes, im guessing those dont represent the actual quality of sexscenes in the game. It would be bad.
And the other positive thing is the dialogue, its fluid and imaginative, not over the top funny of the drama club type. A Really interesting and enjoyable reading.

The bad thing are the Lewd scenes:
So far i have seen one scene, performed by 3rd parties, another scenes performed during a dream, or a trance that wont affect the plot or the relationships, and a third scene which is a dream. Im not liking this 100% dream related scenes. I REALLY dislike it. And those scene are not good, are kind of bad actually, this may end in disaster, I hope not.

Another bad thing:
Unavoidable sex scene, in a game that is about choices. If you try to pursue a romance, im sure a girl that you just met and had 0 interaction with is the girl to have sex with. This is a narrative killer and also substracts points. Well i dont like Zaya, why do have to to have sex with her TWICE?
All the game making choices to have some attempt at lewd with the other girls and i get to have sex with another girl twice?

And this leads to another thing, the sex scene is bad, and it is already the 4th one, its definetly a pattern. This is gonna end badly.

Well i noticed the music sometimes is kind of squizo, is nice that it is there but most of the times it creates a mood that doesnt fit the scene all that well. Sex scenes are still bad, i finished the Rionrnrner route and they are definetly below average, i can not tell if they are the focus of the game, it doesnt seem so.

After the scene where Nora is introduced, with that cinematic thing...The game kind of died for me. I cant tell why dev decided to lose production time in that when his sex scenes are so lacking. The effort should better be put in improving those, which are the foundation of a porn game.

Well the game went down from 4 to 2 stars, and its saved cause renders are pleasant to watch.

I am not native when it comes to english, but whenever i see grammatical mistakes it breaks my immersion times 100. Do the developers burn their eyes out after writing their texts? Alone for that i need to deduct 2 of 5.

The story itself seems fresh but badly executed. The NPCs and the MC are beyond retarded when it comes to risk managemant and just seem to jump into their misery like those movie-mentally-held-back-people. The blonde girl has somewhat of a brain but still follows the group and that also makes her dumb like her friends.

The male FrIeNd is another nutcase. He is with his girlfriend on this trip and makes himself out as a giga coomer to the point i want to just shoot him and let the MC bang his girlfriend (a former crush).

Edit: the fuck is a promess dude, its called promise even my deranged sister knows that. After a little research i found out its the french version but im playing in english so why.
Edit2: the little cinematic in the second town is interesting but the immersion gets destroyed the moment the woman doesnt touch the floor anymore when she belly dances. OMFG the moment the dancer wobbled her head to both sides i died.
Edit3: trying to get out of any NTR is hardcore you literally need to min/max your stats and need to plan everything

Really great game with multiple paths and multiple choices. Due to the divergent number of paths, you cannot see everything in one playthrough and need to have multiple walkthroughs to see all scenes, which is great, as each path feels unique. You can be a lover or an asshole, you can cheat around or establish relationships, all is up to the player.

I disliked 75% of this game, but it's the 25% that caused me to give the game 5 stars. There are four scenes that were highly erotic, triggering great eroticism. Explanation of those four scenes, 2 NTR, 2 Harem (I hope the dev reads this too):


Music was fantastic and top notch.

I wasn't into the rest of the game because the MC has the kind of face you just want to punch really hard. It would've been better to never see the MC's face, so you could self insert more.

Often times the scene & clothing assets don't match. A lot of assets like cars and structures don't mesh well. But, hey that's not an easy task. Creating a believable fantastical world is insanely difficult. This hurt immersion for me. But, at times, he did nail the scenes right, and the assets all meshed well. Yet most scenes didn't really produce a good erotic impact for me.

The extra dude at the start of the game who sits with the girls isn't necessary, just cut him out. He complicates the dialogue in a needless way.

Maddie wears all black, which is a SAFE color. But if her outfit was given more color, it would bring out her beauty even more. Lara croft colors are always a safe bet, brown, cyan, any color that represents rustic, with low saturation of course.

Nightshow didn't produce any eroticism, but that's subjective I guess. I don't find belly dance to be erotic, it looks kind of stupid to be honest. Modern stripper dances are far more erotic IMO.

I find Nora & Rion to be extremely annoying and immature. The maturity of Maddie is far more attractive, but that's subjective also. It feels like the game was supposed to be centered around Maddie, and that Nora & Rion were tacked on. IMO, it should just be the MC & Maddie. Rion & Nora complicate the plot, and unless you're quenten tarantino, it's too hard to bring all these characters together in a story; imo.

Initial Impression: So I started and from the two intro girls, I picked Rion cause she is just more my type, but man, I can tell you I almost switch to Nora when she appeared because dayum son, she fine. I will say the three options to meet her all being the same, just worded differently, made me laugh. I think it works in some situations, doesn't in others, this one it worked. I will say, thank you, so much developer, if you are reading this, for not making me play the mini-game. Dear god, do I hate most mini-games especially in adult games. Hopefully, when/if that mini game is completed, you don't make it mandatory.

The Hotel/Desert sequence wasn't bad, for those reading, was purposely doing the solo Rion route even thought it seems a Rion/MC/Nora route may be possible [I imagine you could get cut out if you don't have enough relations with them]. So if you want some Harem, I think that may be your shot but that wasn't what I was looking for. Telling her you only love her [Rion] does seem to cut that route off completely, which is good. I like when developers make it very clear what a decision means and if you don't want something, you can just say so rather then them keep trying to shoe horn it in. That is where this version ended for me.

Music: I play all sex games with sound turned off. Can't say much in regards here.

Story: Its solid. Few errors here and there, some sentences were a bit clumsy in construction and didn't flow well. But I think it got better as the game went out, story seems interesting and I am curious to see where it goes.

Models/Animation: I think the sex animations are good, I prefer being able to manually toggle through it rather then being an animation you have to watch as it slowly plays out least skip it, but they were good. If you click too fast and skip it by accident, its okay, rollback is a thing. Also, Nora and Rion? Good taste. Also love to see middle eastern people in an adult game. Its not something you normally see and I enjoyed it. Really love the models, great job [Not a Maddie guy, but I respect that she is an option for others!]

Overall: This is just my opinion, but its a very solid game. Worth playing. If you like it, and have the means, support them. As I played and the days moved, the game got better, less errors I saw and more.. cohesive, I chalk that up to getting more comfortable and experienced. I give it 4/5 stars on my 'My opinion actually doesn't matter' meter and am curious to see where this goes.

On Harems: I don't mind the decision to not include it. I do not buy into the 'believable' or 'realistic' stuff when you have a magical penis enlarging gallon bucket cum inducing priestess, [That is kinda like saying you want to make Mulan realistic so not bring in Mushu but also give Mulan the Force] but I do believe in atmosphere and immersion. Harems are difficult to make immersive and not 'jump the shark' as it were. Usually, I feel, stories that want to have immersion with Harems have to really plan around it, not just tack it on, if they wanna avoid jumping the shark or keeping it immersive outside of something to get off to. The developer of this game wanting to make an immersive game where you either stick to one, or pursue many and possibly end up failing hard core [I have yet to try this path and, honestly, probably won't] is immersive for the game world they built. I see no reason for them to change this just to suit some power fantasy [I do not, in any way, dog on people for wanting power fantasy. We are playing a adult game to get off, lets not pretend we are high brow who beat their souls off to Oscar bait] because its their work and vision, so okay, more power to them in wanting to shape a world around their belief, and vision, of how the world is.

Due to actually, you know, reading what the developer had to say on his game, [Especially if I see the dreaded NTR tag] I approached it as less 'me in a game to get laid with every woman,' and more 'Make a fictional character and see them fall in love with a single person and explore that relationship'. Because I went in with the latter mindset, I came out of the game content with the gameplay available. If it helps, give your MC a different name then normal to help set them up as a separate entity or a more joking name [I often use BigDickJohn when I do this because I am a manchild at heart.]

On NTR: I can't speak for every path, but the one I did was Rion, specifically Romance, because, well, she was great and I am a sucker for a good love story. The first 'NTR' I saw was an optional scene where you can either watch a DREAM SEQUENCE threesome [which I did not pick, but through later events, I now assume is watching said girl with the priestess and priest] now keep in mind they put a giant NTR right next to it to let you know what will happen if you click on it so its not like they hid it or a duo scene with MC and Rion. Now, Rion did see the threesome scene, however it was:

1. A Dream and, come on, dreams are dreams. Few people are Hal from Malcolm in the Middle who love and think of only one person forever and ever, wish I was like Hal because such dedication is, frankly, amazing [but he is also a fictional character], someone having a dream [or a magically induced hallucinations] isn't what I'd consider NTR especially if they don't really talk about it [Also, you do the same thing to her later that night, only, you know, physically and so not a dream, so don't throw rocks in a glass house, that said, you also can't reject that scene which does make it not a glass house and more like... a fiberglass house]. Seriously, wish you could turn her down for the hottub but still have her rape you for the story. More choices, and power, to the player in these kinds of games, the better, imo. But I get maybe being afraid that you could mess up the story or, make players feel powerless for denying her but being raped anyways thus making the choice pointless in the long run [But, also, come on, choices rarely make a difference in games, its all a grand illusion]. That is just my personal preference however.

2. The two characters are not even together yet. [Seriously, this is like having a crush on someone and considering it betrayal and NTR if they sleep with their partner. That isn't NTR, that is you being a stalker. Avoid that, if you would, consider that friendly neighborhood porn guy advice.]

3. Her path, if you are going for the solo romance path, the one I picked, you are cucking your friend and stealing her away. You cuck, you don't get cucked.

4. Entirely possible this scene would have been different if I had a higher relationship with Rion, ended the chapter with 90/100 [But I kinda doubt it, although, I do think it would be cool if Rion saw the Them and your MC scene if you had max relation possible by that point. But I also get it seems to be more magic caused and the MC is more... resistant to it then others so had more control. Still, would be neat if its not a thing.]

On my route, I saw two [or was it three?] other possible NTR for those who have a very broad view on what counts as NTR. One [or two, I can't remember] was a dream sequence with a threesome between Nora, Rion and Yourself. Mind you, again, its a dream [I didn't actually see the truck one because that one is locked to supports] and the last being Rion being interested in having a relationship with Nora and you. Mind, that was likely only because of the route I was on, Rion, while still having a high favor with Nora. Entirely possible that Rion's path, if you don't go for her, is to end up with Nora.

So the NTR is just dreams [most people, I find, don't count threesomes, especially, if they are the only one of their gender or are in a position of control/dominace to be cheating], mind you, this is all purely on the path I picked. Your mileage may vary, but the developer seems decent at dodging forced NTR.

This is a very original game. The renders are very good, the main Love Interests are very different for appearance and personality (and very likeable), but what makes special the game is the "Indiana Jones atmosphere". The storyline, infact, is very thrilling, that is unusual for this kind of games. And the humour is funny. Can't wait for next updates.

Really great game so far, that gets better with every update.
Good visuals, all three girls are great looking, interesting and very likeable, scenes are pretty hot, choices actually matter, and there is a good sense of "adventure" with developing story. Mc starts as kind of immature teenager early on, but there is clear some character development as story moves forward.
Some ( minor) cons: humor can be a bit of hit/miss early on, and environment visuals could be improved.

I like where this is going, it is early in the game, but great renders, beautiful girls and a - potentially - great story.

love the unique arabic setting, and novel story. some grammatical mistakes and the dialogues would rather fit to teens than to mid-twenty year olds, but overall not a bad start.

I played until before visiting the second temple.
Game goes too fast. Things just happening too fast. Story should advance slower with more explanations. The mystic stuff is ok, but everything is just going too fast. That is why I stopped playing. Acting of the main characters is just wrong. Visiting Egypt and old historic stuff, while dressing like hookers, keep talking naughty stuff. There is some strangeness that is not taken really seriously. Sorry, but the things just do not match here.

Renders and graphics are well above average and safe to say what will be the things that draw you to the game and keep you hooked for the foreseeable future. There are however a couple things though that has been mentioned that prevent me from giving a full rating.

The dialogue between the MC and Julian is just obnoxious, and I mean OBNOXIOUS all caps. It's more so with Julian but they have the rhetoric of some elementary/middle schoolers that just found out what porn was and now plan on banging whatever hot chick they see. There's being rough around the edges and then there's being a complete douche nozzle....but I stray too far

The dialogue itself needs quite a bit of proofreading but I still understand the gist of it and understand that beginning scripts are usually rough so I don't give it as much weight. The animations that are there are okay but a little janky with the fluidity, especially when it came to the sit-com introductions of each character

It's all in all a pretty visually appealing VN that promises to give us quite a few twists and turns down the road. It just needs a little polishing

This game seem to become a great one. The story is really exotic. The relationship between the MC and the non-player characters develop slowly and natural. Many choices allow the player to make an unique story. The graphic is top and all ladies are hot. The game is more an adventure story with erotic elements, then a simple fap game. Do not await many sex scenes in the beginning. I do like this game so far a lot. 5 of 5 stars. Looking forward to play many more updates...

There's the start of something that can be good:
- The models are good looking, not too exaggerated
- The story is interesting and original, with the backing of Egypt's history and mythology
So why 3 stars?
Well, it's just that the dialogue it's very bad. MC and his friend, although being around 25-28 year old talk and act like 13 year old boys ("Bruh, those titties, huh..." "Yeah, look at that double masturbation pose"). It's very cringe-worthy and it takes a LOT of the novel. This bothered me so much that I was originally intending to give only 1 star. But I thought that it's unfair, since there are positive points. It's just that the bad ones are really really bad.
So the characters either don't act their age or like they should be. Other examples of this would be MC's friend and her boyfriend should be in a relationship for 5 years. Anyone that has been in a relationship that long knows that although there's problems it's nothing as juvenile as it happens in the novel.
And then there's Maddie, which should be recovering of a bad breakup that happened just last week. And... Nothing. She shows nothing AT ALL and just act like the secret-agent-encyclopedia to explain things to the oblivious player.
It was brought to my attention that this had a reason to be and it was intentional. But I do stand by the criticism of juvenile behavior of most characters and I hope the developer can address this with time later on, since it could be something really great because of the original premise and background (not to mention beautiful renders).

So, TL;DR -> Renders - Good / Story - Good / Characters/Dialogue - Very very bad

Really great game so far! Looking forward what the futre brings. Gotta say though: I wish a little bit more of NTR and corruption would go on. But thats a very personal preference renders are very nice, character design is as well, but I am not a fan of too much mystery and magic in porn games sooo... dont like that aspect too much.

This game is excellent

This game has real potential. Has a rich story-line which gave me a wonderful experience. The game is written well. The dialogue is filled with humorous and funny lines and every character has a unique personality. The game's background is ancient Egypt-based which makes me more excited to see where the story goes. Those perfect BGM's also make the game more enjoyable and more impactful. Render quality is awesome & has a very good collection of models. Really hope this game will be a success.
Thank you so much for presenting this game.

Suprisingly good humor if a bit too much at times.
Options are all throughout and they really do feel like a choose your own adventure.
Even though the majority is simple stuff the sheer amount makes you feel more engaged than someone clicking a or B.
Rion was best girl until Zaya came into the picture and now there are serious doubts about this game.
I dont want to lose my egyptian queen to the darkside unless there is a Legend of Opala type deal with some replacements for the crazy ones.
Can't wait for the next update.

A game about ancient egypt ? Count me in!

Pros :

• I'm a sucker for this kind of story and i am not disappointed from what i have seen in episode 1. A game about ancient history and a love squirrel ? a great game in the making for sure!
• I like the character, their models are unique especially the MC. it is great to see a new fresh model of the MC. The girls ? pretty and lovable especially Rion, i will definitely try to get her The dev teases us that there will be a new LI in v0.3, can't wait for that.
• There are scenes available already, but i have to say the quality is subpar at least for me, not that good but not that bad either. I hope they will improve it
• Loving the system here, it is somewhat NTR because if we focused on one LI, the other LIs will have fun with someone else, really realistic just like in real life. Personally i don't mind seeing the scene where other LIs having fun with other people, I love NTR when it is a good one
• YOUR CHOICE DOES MATTER!! BE CAUTIOUS

I am hooked, the story has so much potential and i'd like to see where story take us.

Hoping they improve the steamy scene quality in the future. Sucks to see a VN like this have a subpar steamy scenes quality.

100% HAVE TO GIVE THIS ONE A RIDE!

A very decent game with a griping Egypt-mythology themed plot. Perfect for those who want a straightforward choice dependent game with a good story and different parts depending on your choices.

Game-play: 4/5
So far the gameplay is rather good. Here we have a Game that actually is choice driven, where you have to analyse which options will lead to which outcome. It's all very well arranged and at the end you see how much you scored with each girl. I did stumble upon one non-fatal error where
A required picture couldn't be found, however everything continued smoothly afterwards.

Renders: 3.5/5
The renders in their current state are slightly above average in my opinion. The models are rather standard DAZ models and the background in some cases seems to be based on pictures rather then modeling. Sometimes this works really well, here it all clashes a bit, the pictures bring out the artificiality of the DAZ models. However as this seems to be a first release i think the quality here will improve over time.

Story: 5/5
Great Story, very adventurous and exciting

Writing: 4/5
Good English, Characters speak like normal humans though they don't always seem like they are the brightest candles on the cake, so to speak.
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Overall: B+ | 4.1/5
I really do hope the Dev will continue with this project, so I'll upgrade this to 5 as I know there is definitely potential for that here.