This is a harsh grade I know, but my god did the writing and pacing sucked hard in this one. If there's like 10 steps to tell a good NTR story, this thing skipped 9. The fall happens incredibly fast and the fallout is completely unrealistic and exaggerated, even by ntr standards which says a lot. I felt so bad for the boy, but not because of the brutality of the ntr but because he's the main character of a horrible senseless mess that doesnt make a lick of hentai sense, its just a shame. I enjoyed all his others games, and adelaide is one of the best hentai games ever made, but churning out this games conveyer belt style really dramatically affects the quality of the story specially, and this is a downgrade. This is a work in progress and will be expanded upon, I know, but I would just draw the mc hanging himself in this store and put this thing to rest, cause the foundation is almost unsalvageable. This is my first negative review on this site, but I stand by it. And two stars only because the art is great as always and the animations have been getting progressivly better since he started, so fapping to those in a vacuum is totally doable. If I could provide some advice (who cares, I know, but hear me out), slow it down a lot, dont use the "guy steals girl then puts on the internet for all to see" pattern making the whole thing pointless since the mom becomes just another ahegao dumbo that you cant even get mad at, dont make stolen characters instantly bottles of hatred that want their son (son!) to be homeless and disappear in a matter of weeks, thats so stupid and mind boggling that makes me forget the porn part and go watch some adam sandler brain dead movie. I'm ranting by this point so I'll stop; still love NTRman, gave me too many faps to hate him just for this, but complete misfire.
