HTML - Sluttown USA: Hometown Corruption [v0.42] [AmusingOddity]

As with most of the real-porn Twine games on this site, it's a huge improvement if you just cheat through the actual game part and treat it as CYOA-style erotic fiction. Use the included guide and edit variables in the developer console. The actual game part is bad -- there's no way to make an engaging game in Twine! Stop trying!!

The game is also suffering from a regular early dev issue, which is spreading too thin too quickly. There are too many incomplete paths here. Dev needs to really focus on what he thinks this should be. The dev seems to be tying in even more branching paths to cater to people who just aren't into the fundamental concept of the game. As someone who is into the fundamental concept, that's a shame and is going to lead to super long development times. Alas.

that said: what I like here, I really like. my buttons have been hit. worth a shot.

This is a promising game held back largely by a cluttered and slow UI, and grind.

First the clutter; SUSA:HC has a lot of unnecessary screens and options. There are a huge number of unused locations that serve only to distract the player and make it difficult to navigate. I'm glad that the dev wants to create a believable world, but when only one out fifteen classrooms is used then it's time to draw back a bit. If the dev were to just cut out all uncesseary screens, like the screen in the minigame that simply says 'point gained' the game would flow better.

This game suffers from the general grind that a lot of similar games do. It takes a long time to progress with any given character, and the vast majority of that time is spent clicking back and forth between a handful of screens.

There are a few of mechanics and design choices I really like though. I like the puzzle element of the app charging. If you want to avoid it you can, but you earn more points by playing manually. I hope that more types of puzzles are added in the future to keep you on your toes. I really like how any points you spend on someone above the necessary amount are automatically refunded.

I really hope this games sees more content and a streamlining in future updates, as the setting, premise, and writing are all iteresting and well done. I would also like to say that it's better for a few characters to have a lot of content than for a lot of characters to have a little bit of content.

so im going to give this a five star even though as of writing this id say its a 3 star. my reason for doing this is because i can definently see this being a five star game if certain easy to fix issues are fixed in the future and dont want a permanent 3 star review to bog down the game. the main issue i have with the game right now is the grind. like the ammount of times you need to hypnotize people to get anywhere at all is ridiculous. i get that it is realistic as you are breaking down their mental barriers and rewriting their common sense but seriously it takes like 5 sessions to make a girl willing to give you a kiss. also on what should be the no ntr path theirs ntr. i personally dont mind it but i know alot of people do and those people tend to be very very picky about it so you might want to make sure that theirs no ntr on the ntr paths. again these are relatively easy to fix issues since at most they involve removing content rather than adding it but regardless they are issues that need to be adressed if the game is to reach that oh so sweet five star rating. keep in mind a longer game is not always a better game and more content does not always equal a better game either. if 95 percent of the game is waiting to get to the good part then you have a bad game even if the last 15 percent is really really good. nevertheless the game looks really good and if you adress these issues i can see it being one of the all time best html mind control games out there.

Actually a promising game, writing is good. But it currently is too broken and "grindy":
* Going into sis room, you are told that you should try again at breakfast. But there you have no possibility.
* Used app on Mom, but now i can't "go further" with her"
* feels like 500 locations arranged in a tree for maxmimal confusion. You do not know where you are or where to go in college. 95% of the locations are just empty.
* I put "grindy" into quotes. There is grindy, where you have to repeat boring tasks to get somewhere. And there is "grindy", where you just do not really know what to do, and try to advance by trial and error. Some grinding is ok, but just not giving the player any clue is just bad.

Advice:
- Introduce some sort of "quest log"
- College does not need 100 rooms. Reduce, and show them all at once, so the player does not keep to click through everything every time.
- Highlight the locations where something can be done.

Writing: 7/10
Imagery: 6/10
Gameplay: 5/10
Kinks: 8/10
Overall: 6/10

I believe sandbox should be added to the tags, because it sure feels like one.

The beginning is good, really good, I read it all and it got mr invested. But then came the drop, I was on my own with very little direction. Where was everyone, did I miss something? Was I suppose to grind out days trying to figure out who is where and when? So far, the answer is yes.

Avoiding the bugs people seem to be complaining about is easy enough, just don't change any of the girl's names. So I didn't experience any of them, which is great, as many are pretty game breaking.

Sadly this didn't matter much since this is new enough that there is very little content yet. The main character talks like he's gonna be having all these girls gargling his shaft and bending over to take a pounding, but boy is he going about it damn slow. You work on getting enough charge to "mind alter" a girl, but there's little to no reward. Maybe the next time you see them they have changed their picture to something a little sexier, but you can forget the blowjobs and butt fucking, they exist only as dreams in the game's current state.

My suggestion is to either make the travel a whole lot easier if sticking to this sandbox theme, or ditch the sandbox and go for a more direct route. Give player's choices that matter, don't just offer them dead ends. So what if you can go to the beach, what does it matter if nothing is ever there right now? Maybe make a tracker that shows where the girls are at any given time, and clicking on their location makes the character travel directly to them.

Really good for a first attempt. Good PS selection, decent run of fetish material and amazing room for expansion. Dev seems to have a good grasp on what to write and how to communicate with people so there's certainly hope for the future. 10/10, would recommend.

Incredibly grindy, with minigames for the grind that don't function properly and character routes which end at dead ends without a "continue". Would just be another Real Porn game with the same handful of familiar actresses if the developer didn't have John Carmack's ego.