I first played this game as RPGM.
I seen it has since been switched to renpy. I thought maybe they might have made some improvements on it surely it getting worse couldn't be possible.
I was wrong.
This game story has giant plot hole on top of giant plot hole.
*The MC is blackmailed to change jobs. The premise being she wouldn't want her spouse or others to find out what she had done. Yet, instead they expect her to go along with stuff far more compromising and likely to be found out.
*They present the MC as being smart best in the business. But she hasn't the intelligence to use the smart phone or any other device to catch these people blackmailing her.
*She doesn't check the brief case. Doesn't make sure the car door is locked or anything else we supposedly transporting money. She was at a level in a business that anyone would know the basic SOP for such movements of currency or anything important.
The shear volume of issues of this type and level would make this a complete failure for any international writing exam for 5th grade or above.
Art quality.
Most the credit for this goes to the individual who developed the render software, models and assets used.
That said selecting the posses and creating the scene would be to this developers credit.
I wanted to see if maybe it was just me when it came to my review of the plot. So I talked to a number of friends I share books with. One in particular stood out. The lady lives fairly near me and is what I call a humanitarian. She can't have kids so she spends her time helping others. Adopting and sheltering animals training some of them to be help animals and taking them around to places like cancer centers and places were children and elderly are so they can interact and telling stories and helping in other means.
Her first instincts were go to the police. I explained that is one option she doesn't have at least locally. She then said state and or federal authorities. Lawyer, record stuff herself, use the internet. I asked her to expand on what she meant by internet. She said make it publicly visible were they couldn't hide from it, then seek others to help, or look up how to get back and or hurt or even get rid of these people if they were willing to do this to her life why would doing anything to resolve the issue not be on the table.
So I asked would you go so far as to kill them. Her reply was, "Painfully"
If a much more ordinary but passive person is willing to take such steps how the hell is this story even reasonable. It isn't.
If this story was drawn with cartoonish characters you might be able to say well it isn't supposed to be realistic its just for fun. But that's lost when you create more realistic images of people. You can't disconnect the story from the visual realism and expect readers to be ok with it. The only people who are going to be ok with it are those individuals who simply skip from scene to scene to wack off. In short they aren't interested in the story. At that point you may as well just make this a slide show.
It doesn't end there though. See the lines and dialog also aren't written in a non serious manor. So you have further more a suggestion this is supposed to be a work on a serious or realistic level.
If it was based on the art alone I'd give 1 star. That's to cover the work the developer did himself.
The writing gets ZERO stars on its own.
Combining the art with the writing I would give negative 3 stars on a scale of 0 to 4. It literally demands stars be taken away.
The only value this story holds is as an example of how not to write a story. That's why it is negative 3 and not negative 5.
I was hoping they would take the time to fix the plot holes when moving from rpgm to renpy that didn't happen.
I wouldn't recommend this game to anyone. Reading the plot can only make you loose intelligence. Use rpatool unzip the archive and just use an image viewer. You'll be better off just doing that and you won't have to click through the dialog.
-1 point for all the continue story boxes at home each day.
So final total score -4 stars.
I seen it has since been switched to renpy. I thought maybe they might have made some improvements on it surely it getting worse couldn't be possible.
I was wrong.
This game story has giant plot hole on top of giant plot hole.
*The MC is blackmailed to change jobs. The premise being she wouldn't want her spouse or others to find out what she had done. Yet, instead they expect her to go along with stuff far more compromising and likely to be found out.
*They present the MC as being smart best in the business. But she hasn't the intelligence to use the smart phone or any other device to catch these people blackmailing her.
*She doesn't check the brief case. Doesn't make sure the car door is locked or anything else we supposedly transporting money. She was at a level in a business that anyone would know the basic SOP for such movements of currency or anything important.
The shear volume of issues of this type and level would make this a complete failure for any international writing exam for 5th grade or above.
Art quality.
Most the credit for this goes to the individual who developed the render software, models and assets used.
That said selecting the posses and creating the scene would be to this developers credit.
I wanted to see if maybe it was just me when it came to my review of the plot. So I talked to a number of friends I share books with. One in particular stood out. The lady lives fairly near me and is what I call a humanitarian. She can't have kids so she spends her time helping others. Adopting and sheltering animals training some of them to be help animals and taking them around to places like cancer centers and places were children and elderly are so they can interact and telling stories and helping in other means.
Her first instincts were go to the police. I explained that is one option she doesn't have at least locally. She then said state and or federal authorities. Lawyer, record stuff herself, use the internet. I asked her to expand on what she meant by internet. She said make it publicly visible were they couldn't hide from it, then seek others to help, or look up how to get back and or hurt or even get rid of these people if they were willing to do this to her life why would doing anything to resolve the issue not be on the table.
So I asked would you go so far as to kill them. Her reply was, "Painfully"
If a much more ordinary but passive person is willing to take such steps how the hell is this story even reasonable. It isn't.
If this story was drawn with cartoonish characters you might be able to say well it isn't supposed to be realistic its just for fun. But that's lost when you create more realistic images of people. You can't disconnect the story from the visual realism and expect readers to be ok with it. The only people who are going to be ok with it are those individuals who simply skip from scene to scene to wack off. In short they aren't interested in the story. At that point you may as well just make this a slide show.
It doesn't end there though. See the lines and dialog also aren't written in a non serious manor. So you have further more a suggestion this is supposed to be a work on a serious or realistic level.
If it was based on the art alone I'd give 1 star. That's to cover the work the developer did himself.
The writing gets ZERO stars on its own.
Combining the art with the writing I would give negative 3 stars on a scale of 0 to 4. It literally demands stars be taken away.
The only value this story holds is as an example of how not to write a story. That's why it is negative 3 and not negative 5.
I was hoping they would take the time to fix the plot holes when moving from rpgm to renpy that didn't happen.
I wouldn't recommend this game to anyone. Reading the plot can only make you loose intelligence. Use rpatool unzip the archive and just use an image viewer. You'll be better off just doing that and you won't have to click through the dialog.
-1 point for all the continue story boxes at home each day.
So final total score -4 stars.
