So, first and foremost I have largely enjoyed Summer Scent. It is, in some respects, well written. The main characters are engaging and, up to point believable. In a literary sense, I ‘d say they are fairly well drawn. As a reader I find I want the best for them. They are all flawed, but likeable and appear to have an unexpected level of emotional depth, at least as far as the genre goes. The story is, again, up to a point, not without merit and serves as a suitable background for the vicissitudes of the characters. Overall, however I can’t help but see this game as a missed opportunity. It’s as if there are two, somewhat conflicted writers behind it…
One of whom seems to display a nuanced and relatively sophisticated understanding of human relationships and the other of whom simply wants to throw a spanner in the works or, very un-subtly to try to ‘spice things up’. The whole conversation between the PC, Cassie, Eve and Kelly could have been a relatively moving and even, dare I say it, profound scene (Dual Love Path) instead there is the horribly jarring and narrative breaking moment when Steve and Jane call up and have risky sex over the phone. Not really a problem in and of itself, but the fact that the somewhat intimate and vulnerable moment between the characters is highjacked by it utterly nukes all the trust and suspension of disbelief that the reader might have built up in the preceding exchange. Not to mention the fragility of the MC’c acceptance of a polyamorous relationship. The fact that both C (Cassie) and E (Eve) instantly ditch the, as advertised, difficult conversation with Kelly and the PC in favour of some utterly random conversation about sex with a total stranger, not to mention E’s sudden shift from wanting punch Kelly in the pussy to her acceptance of her as a friend is not only narrative breaking but it also renders their characters less believable in terms of the overall story ark. Are they a couple of naughty girls of no more than depth than the average porn game fucktoy only interested in salaciousness and the manipulation of the rightfully confused and overwhelmed PC, or are they two young women struggling with there burgeoning sexuality and love for the same individual? As it a reader it is very confusing. Which generally means that the writer is also confused. There is nothing wrong with introducing confusion, doubt and misdirection into a story, it is often a good thing when handled correctly. Sadly, I have to say that none of these techniques are handled well here.
I’d like to go on as, ultimately, I feel that Summer Scent is one of the few stories/games on this site that deserve proper attention. But it is late and I am tired so let me finish with the observation that if there are two or more writers behind this game then either get on the same page or do your own thing. If there is only one writer then have the courage of your convictions. It is ok to explore ‘real’ stuff in this genre. If it is a team, then focus the fuck up and decide who is in charge.
One of whom seems to display a nuanced and relatively sophisticated understanding of human relationships and the other of whom simply wants to throw a spanner in the works or, very un-subtly to try to ‘spice things up’. The whole conversation between the PC, Cassie, Eve and Kelly could have been a relatively moving and even, dare I say it, profound scene (Dual Love Path) instead there is the horribly jarring and narrative breaking moment when Steve and Jane call up and have risky sex over the phone. Not really a problem in and of itself, but the fact that the somewhat intimate and vulnerable moment between the characters is highjacked by it utterly nukes all the trust and suspension of disbelief that the reader might have built up in the preceding exchange. Not to mention the fragility of the MC’c acceptance of a polyamorous relationship. The fact that both C (Cassie) and E (Eve) instantly ditch the, as advertised, difficult conversation with Kelly and the PC in favour of some utterly random conversation about sex with a total stranger, not to mention E’s sudden shift from wanting punch Kelly in the pussy to her acceptance of her as a friend is not only narrative breaking but it also renders their characters less believable in terms of the overall story ark. Are they a couple of naughty girls of no more than depth than the average porn game fucktoy only interested in salaciousness and the manipulation of the rightfully confused and overwhelmed PC, or are they two young women struggling with there burgeoning sexuality and love for the same individual? As it a reader it is very confusing. Which generally means that the writer is also confused. There is nothing wrong with introducing confusion, doubt and misdirection into a story, it is often a good thing when handled correctly. Sadly, I have to say that none of these techniques are handled well here.
I’d like to go on as, ultimately, I feel that Summer Scent is one of the few stories/games on this site that deserve proper attention. But it is late and I am tired so let me finish with the observation that if there are two or more writers behind this game then either get on the same page or do your own thing. If there is only one writer then have the courage of your convictions. It is ok to explore ‘real’ stuff in this genre. If it is a team, then focus the fuck up and decide who is in charge.