There are a handful of spelling errors and one or two grammatical errors, but overall the writing is pretty solid.
There's one mistake that takes place the first time you go to the Salon, where Cyn introduces you as "cousin Ro" instead of "cousin Vanessa."
The status change symbols that appear from making choices flash by a bit too fast and are a little too transparent. The only symbol that I can easily make out is the pink heart symbol. The other symbols I can't see clearly, and they disappear too fast to let me know what happened to the MC. Make the symbols hang around longer and make them a bit more opaque.
There's one mistake that takes place the first time you go to the Salon, where Cyn introduces you as "cousin Ro" instead of "cousin Vanessa."
The status change symbols that appear from making choices flash by a bit too fast and are a little too transparent. The only symbol that I can easily make out is the pink heart symbol. The other symbols I can't see clearly, and they disappear too fast to let me know what happened to the MC. Make the symbols hang around longer and make them a bit more opaque.
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