English: 6
User Interface: 8
User Experience: 4
Art: 6
Dialogue: 4
Story: 7
Opinion: 3
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Avg: 5.43/10
Before I start my playthrough, all I remember about this story is my comments getting attacked in the forums. This story puts the ugliest MC in an isolated bubble, being the only man with a working penis in a 40 mile radius. His ego inflates immediately, and acts like a spoiled child when told no or asked to marry a princess he's already attracted to. He was rescued as a child, you'd think he'd be humbled and patient, but no. As soon as he's told, and I'm not making this up, that he can't cum inside all the maids because a waning lord's home can't afford to hire new help due to mass maternity leave, he actively whines about it. And not only does no one say anything to him, they backpeddle and coddle him. This is absurd, and screams incel. This weird "I'm an alpha male, but only by default, now give me chicken tendies" type person and I just do not like any of the dialogue. At least anything pertaining to sex or intimacy. In an AVN... That's unfotunate. It has this feeling of screaming "I have to be dominant at all times and if I'm not you're undermining my masculinity and I'm going to cry about it." I really could go on for a long time about the inferiority complex the MC has, but I do have to point out good things too. Like the world building. I think the world and lore is written very well. It does have an air of believability about it. I honestly think that if the MC was written better, and the English was written by someone that speaks English, this would be one of my favorites on this site.
On to the plot establishment. MC was locked in a tower to control his powers for 13 years. He, being an orphan, wants to start a family with his fiance and daughter. (But also has a serious impregnation fetish that actually negatively impacts the dialogue and story)There was a curse that made it so men are scarce and and it will be easy for him to have any woman he wants. Even though his face looks like overcooked bacon dragged across sandpaper. Bro says he's 25 but doesn't look a day younger than 60. Yikes. And his character flaws manifest immediately. In the intro, he asks about Karla, the fiance, and Athagan says "Once we get back, we'll contact her." And MC, in his usual fashion, says "NO LETS DO IT NOW." And, get used to this as well, Athagan rolls over and gives him what he wants. So much of the intro is just MC getting reward after reward for just existing, and it goes on forever. Everyone tells MC his brick wall of a face is attractive, it's a little laughable. It gets to the point I want to believe MC is having a fever dream the whole game about a better life outside of the tower. But let's be real, having a joke ending like that is wishful thinking. I'm not exactly sure about what the size of each update is, but the early game cements my distaste of MC's personality when he learns about the orphanage's money trouble. His face contorts in pure rage as something that isn't to his liking happens. He storms off to yell at daddy dearest. When he gets there, Athagan asks if his issue is urgent, MC admits it's not but he'll throw a fit if he's not heard immediately. I want to say, the idealism isn't lost on me, but the way MC handles everything is in poor taste and he always comes across as a man-baby. And the problem is solved by coincidence so it feels a little cheap.
The next bit of story is a little boring, MC forming his party. Avila's shopping spree, meeting Kes, Erika, and Monica is a lot of idle pleasantries. While I hope it's just to rush it out of the way for better story later, as per usual, it all just falls into MC's lap so easily. Hell, even a god intervenes to give MC a party member. That is instantly in love with him, mind you. I shouldn't have to tell anyone how tired of "instantly in love with MC" I am. I will say, the only almost funny part in the story is in the tavern when MC scares everyone with fire. Then the first of many bath scenes... Liliana reprimands her daughter for being self conscious and not show her body? It becomes an active argument, it's ridiculous. I understand the situation, there aren't many men so have lots of sex. But actively punishing someone for being reserved is stupid. Leading up to "awarding" Avila to MC because he exists? Never mind the fact this EXACT SITUATION happens again with the princess later only for MC to throw a hissy fit. Anyway, this section leads up to the party's first mission. They perfectly know where the bad guy is and catch him trying to assault another slave to add to MC's numbers after they beat the guy in three hits. Could have been interesting, could have been a tough battle, could have not also had them rewarded with the stuff the bad guy was gonna steal. But no. As per usual, MC can't work for anything. And then rewarded with more sex. I don't understand the MC either, he hates when women are sexually forward but that's all Karla is, and anyone but him making a sexual comment turns him off, but somehow he also loves it when they do? There's no consistency and it's frankly annoying. Do you see how I mean the MC is written poorly?
Eventually, you move onto Karla showing up. You get a semi-emotional reunion with Karla and Maria, I'll give it that. But Karla is the horny brain insert, never mind almost every other character doing it as well. Anyway, this point in the story is boring "Everything we said we were gonna do, we're doing now. So walk set piece to set piece, establishing what? That Karla is here? That was already said. All this leads to the second mission and the queen's visit. Second mission? MC knocked out and problem solved with him blacked out. And he brought a slave to get pandered with sex. Because god forbid there's more than 10 minutes without nudity. Then Aoife, the poorly named servant, threatens her best friend with actual death because she said "Stop hamming it up" as they had sex in front of everyone. It's honestly ridiculous. And even this far into the game it still zooms into MC's dick, I just don't get it. And Monica's entire "arc" is MC is the only decent man for miles and MC thinks she's hot. Cool. Leading to the queen scene... "I don't like being told what to do" and "JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO HAVE SEX AND ALWAYS WANT TO HAVE SEX DOESN'T MEAN I'LL HAVE SEX AT THE DROP OF A HAT." He's a spoiled brat with the face of 60 year old, give me a break. He has certain responsibilities now being the son of a lord, and its absolutely stupid after him talking about the declining birthrates not two nights prior. Marry the damn princess you stupid man-child. Men would be a commodity so fuck his temper tantrum. Both of them. As he yells at Sarah too just out of association. And the brain dead take that "She was mind controlled and his reaction was justified" is just that. Brain dead.
Its also around that point the English completely falls apart. The early bits of the story, I almost thought that there wasn't English issues. But my god, it becomes almost taxing to read. And eventually a woman tells MC no, something he said he'd never disrespect, and does the typical rapey "Oh.. A challenge." Just absolute slop. And its from here on out I just mentally check out. Nothing feels important, repeating information over an over everyone's naked most of the time, and anything serious is overshadowed by MC's horny brain or just plain putting it off until they can actually come up with details. And through the games MC, a person in power, shows favoritism to contestants. He literally does everything you shouldn't. And they watch the fights... But only see Cinthia at the end? That's not how tournaments work. Then another mission and MC is naked the whole fucking time. My god. I can't take it, there is no logical reason for them to have gotten naked, had sex, or stayed naked. Is it supposed to be funny? Because the one joke of this VN already happened, it fell flat. Virus outbreak, more nudity, MC uses his position to coerce Estrid just like he said he wouldn't. I'm not surprised or interested at this point, so all I'm gonna do is summarize and be done with this for my own sanity.
The English struggles. I think it sort of gets better closer to end of content, but I was honestly checked out and just noticed less. The UI is almost great. Names desperately need a black outline. The entire world and all the clothes are light brown. And the name of MC and all either no name characters are light beige and you can't see who's talking half the time. Otherwise, thank you for making a custom UI. The UX is fine, standard renpy bunch of non choices though. The art is fine, not the best honey select and looking at MC's neanderthal face is a lot to take in. The dialogue is almost great. WHEN IT'S NOT ABOUT SEX. But there's a lot of that in this. Listening to MC ogle the women and the skin crawling sex talk is not fun. The story is good, I like it, I wish the story took more precedence in this. But I think I made it clear why I don't like this. sue me.