VN - Ren'Py - The Outong [v0.1.8] [Gon D. Eser]

Surprised by the lack of reviews given the amount of content so far (v0.1.0).

Love the game so far. The renders are alright and the plot is whimsical. The MC's powers are growing too quickly imo, but can't complain about the number of cute girls to interact with. The power dynamic scene with Cil is really hot, Lucy's my fav, and so excited for more scenes with that maid Erina!

Really hoping for regular updates once the dev gets settled in with a new job.

Review for v0.1

The positives in this game - renders are good , average at the start of the game and it improves as the game progresses and the girls look amazing and nice fantasy story and the animations are great . Game has music and lots of interesting female characters . No sandbox which is good , no error or virus or bugs while I was playing . The only negative is the English in this game could use some help at least for gender mistakes and some minor typos but it's okay I don't mind it much as it is not my first language either .
Overall a fun game to play with a nice fantasy story , loved the ending for V0.1 , looking forward to next update .

i never really like games like this .. but i have to say ... the story is amazing .. the renders are cool as well i like how you've done them ... i hope this game doesn't not suffer any problems .. i would love to see it till the end ... with all that being said .. overall i say this is one amazingly great game .. i would suggest people try out

[ as of version 0.0.7 ]

as an off-roader, i learnt the more you prepare your rig to face the mud, the less reliable it behaves on asphalt. it's quite hard to get both universes in the same vehicle.
when playing (or reading) “The Outong,” i had the impression the developer tried somehow to turn a novel into a game, and has so far (unfortunately) failed on both.

don’t get me wrong: “The Outong” has the right elements to become a good novel; nonetheless, it needs a deep overhauling — as for example:

• rewrite the entire text eliminating the overbearing redundancies (too many unnecessary explanations);
• in that sense, rewrite all dialogues in order to make them more natural;
• since it’s a visual novel, improve the graphics’ quality;
• give it a more cinematic timing by eliminating the overuse of the ellipsis and fade to black;
• [a bit of a spoiler] Alice seems to suffer from Impostor Syndrome; even so, her guilt is a tad too exaggerated;
• and so forth.

the story itself is quite solid, though, hence it would be really nice to see “The Outong” turn into a great novel or game. or both.

good luck with your project, Gon D. Eser; i wish you the best.

yeah im definitly agree with the first rating, need grammar to be fix or maybe make story not so rush, its like u make this game with a deadline, if this really ur game take ur time make every thing is comfort dont be a rush,
and yet thought i love the story of fantasy but in this game like again its rush/speed?(my bad english)i dont like it, keep it up dont ever give up pal
i really like the model of art n yes its low quality but in future can be more better

hope not abandon this game, if yes give the reason on a posts

The Only thing I would like to suggest is getting an editor for the english script. The English is Horrible.

If I am not mistaken, this VN is heavily taken from Naruto Concept. However, that iss not a bad thing rather I enjoyed it thoroughly. Let's see where you take us in the Journey. Best of Luck.