Amazing prose. The story is incredibly well thought out and paced. Decisions made along the way have real consequence without forcing you into weird dead-ends. Aside from a few grammatical errors, the story reads incredibly well.
One big point in this story's favor is that the MC's transformation (at least up to this point) doesn't involve sissification or submission in terms of the way the MC thinks. Well, unless you choose it explicitly. Another plus is that there isn't any of the cyclical grind that's usually associated with these types of games. How many of these types of games have you played that involved cycling through day after day to increase stats before you can do something meaningful? And where you see the exact same passages and images over and over again?
If I have one complaint, it's that the story would be greatly enhanced by the inclusion of some more supporting art. If for no other reason, some of the passages are multiple pages in length with fairly long paragraphs--images would help break up the blocks of text and give your eyes some respite while you're reading.
There are also precious few fap-worthy points in the story, so if that's why you want to play it, you might want to look elsewhere for the time being.
One big point in this story's favor is that the MC's transformation (at least up to this point) doesn't involve sissification or submission in terms of the way the MC thinks. Well, unless you choose it explicitly. Another plus is that there isn't any of the cyclical grind that's usually associated with these types of games. How many of these types of games have you played that involved cycling through day after day to increase stats before you can do something meaningful? And where you see the exact same passages and images over and over again?
If I have one complaint, it's that the story would be greatly enhanced by the inclusion of some more supporting art. If for no other reason, some of the passages are multiple pages in length with fairly long paragraphs--images would help break up the blocks of text and give your eyes some respite while you're reading.
There are also precious few fap-worthy points in the story, so if that's why you want to play it, you might want to look elsewhere for the time being.