I've been playing this for a while and through many updates. I love the game but I can not figure out how to go to the Inn at night. I have worked cleaning the bar and being her floor enough times that I'd think I would have unlocked Bonnie further if that was how it was done so I'm at a loss. Can someone please clue me in here? Thanks.
Do you only look at books for the pretty pictures? It's a game with writing and pictures, and the writing is literally some of the most mangled I've ever seen in porn short of actual MTL, so I wanted to know if anyone who played further noticed it suddenly get better or something.
Sorry, you're probably joking, but you're also kinda implying I'm a square who doesn't want to get off to the porn in front of me... when the whole reason I asked was that I was frustrated from the bad writing keeping me from getting off. Also, who reads playboy in 2022 lol
It's a free game, being made by a person who doesn't speak English as her first language. I'm not implying that you are a square or anything about what gets you going. I am implying that you are ignoring the vast amount of work she put into this and a great deal of it has been to get the words right. You're not a square, you are just greedy and unappreciative. At least that's how it's sounding. Words are tricky like that, and maybe the way you meant them to be read was kinder than I read them.
Okay... why don't you offer to proofread for her, then, since you seem to know her personally on some level? I was tempted to myself, but she could have asked literally anyone in this thread if they'd be willing to read over her stuff if she's worried about the wording. Like, I would be glad to help, honestly, but I feel like I'm pointing out the emperor's clothes atm. Yes, there's an elephant in the room, and the writing is bad, and I'm not going to condescend to her as a developer by saying 'oh, but everything else is soooo good, don't you worry sweetheart, I know you tried very hard'.
If I was writing a game that depends on written text for a Japanese audience, i.e. not my native language... you bet my first step would be to try to get a native speaker on board to check if my work looks okay. Because that would help me get better at writing in the language, right? And having people pat me on the head over my bad grammar would make me feel more awful than if they were honest and told me 'no, here's how you order these words'. That would make me feel like a child, and I would resent the people patting me on the head for allowing me to embarrass myself rather than, you know, helping me.
Look, I know that making an RPGmaker game can be a lot of work, but I'd make the same level of critique regarding literally any other game on this site, whose devs are all putting in similar amounts of effort. I play plenty of RPGmaker games, and am translating a couple as we speak, so I have to know my way around the engine somewhat. Yes, it's a lot of work. Like, I appreciate what you're saying but I disagree with your conclusions.
You haven't read the 3 pages here and seen that other people are doing those things with her. If you want to help improve the game then go for it. I'm happy with it and I know it's getting better every month. It's why I support her and her work now (with money) instead of just complaining in a vaguely insulting way.
Fine, I'll do that then.
This is the opening text of Trampling Town. Sorry, AeryTT , I'm not trying to drag you here, I just want to illustrate what I'm talking about. Like... this is one of the first things a new player might see. It's very earnest, yes, but y'all are leaving her high and dry on the spelling and grammar.
'Welcome to Trampling Town! I hope you enjoy your experience as a lonely boy living in a small town with his mother and his two sadistic sisters. All characters presented are over 18 years of age.'
This is what I was saying about the writing in my review, though. Like, first words out of her mouth, and there's like... a seed of something that could be hot here, but the way she speaks is so stiff and stilted, and that carries over into the scene following. I would honestly have her use more contractions, like 'you're' instead of 'you are', and not have her directly address the MC as 'brother', because that's reads as really stiff and formal in English. You might say 'hello, brother' to a man you haven't seen in ten years at your mother's funeral, for example, but depending on their relationship you'd more likely call them their name, or 'bro' if you want it to be a bit of an incest cliche. Also, 'u' and 'i' need to go, and 'you' and 'I' need to make a reappearance. I'd suggest maybe something like:
'Hey <Name>, what have I told you about snooping in my room? Well... now you're here, you'd better help me study or I might tell big sis I caught you creeping through our stuff again, and you won't like that.'
but it's honestly up to you?
The following scene where she uses you as a footrest desperately needs a spelling/grammar pass as well, and just a sprinkling of descriptive lines between dialogue. Maybe a description of the texture of her shoes against the MC's face, for example, or how it makes him feel, or... something. Show us the sensations he's feeling, y'know? It's far from the worst scene in the game, actually, in that it features some basic interaction between the MC and the women domming him, and that's great. It's just really rough around the edges. I think big sis says 'en' instead of 'in' at one point, which was a bit strange. Oh, and the word 'Palpitating' referring to a penis is technically correct, but it's more of a clinical word a doctor might use. 'Pulsing' or 'twitching' would probably make more sense to say if you're aiming for dirty talk.
Basically, it's this kind of thing. I should probably stop before I turn this into a text-based let's play, though I easily could. It's not that I think the game hasn't been hard work to make, but that the dialogue and description are really hurting the game's atmosphere at the moment
This is the opening text of Trampling Town. Sorry, AeryTT , I'm not trying to drag you here, I just want to illustrate what I'm talking about. Like... this is one of the first things a new player might see. It's very earnest, yes, but y'all are leaving her high and dry on the spelling and grammar.
'Welcome to Trampling Town! I hope you enjoy your experience as a lonely boy living in a small town with his mother and his two sadistic sisters. All characters presented are over 18 years of age.'
This is what I was saying about the writing in my review, though. Like, first words out of her mouth, and there's like... a seed of something that could be hot here, but the way she speaks is so stiff and stilted, and that carries over into the scene following. I would honestly have her use more contractions, like 'you're' instead of 'you are', and not have her directly address the MC as 'brother', because that's reads as really stiff and formal in English. You might say 'hello, brother' to a man you haven't seen in ten years at your mother's funeral, for example, but depending on their relationship you'd more likely call them their name, or 'bro' if you want it to be a bit of an incest cliche. Also, 'u' and 'i' need to go, and 'you' and 'I' need to make a reappearance. I'd suggest maybe something like:'Hey <Name>, what have I told you about snooping in my room? Well... now you're here, you'd better help me study or I might tell big sis I caught you creeping through our stuff again, and you won't like that.'
but it's honestly up to you?
The following scene where she uses you as a footrest desperately needs a spelling/grammar pass as well, and just a sprinkling of descriptive lines between dialogue. Maybe a description of the texture of her shoes against the MC's face, for example, or how it makes him feel, or... something. Show us the sensations he's feeling, y'know? It's far from the worst scene in the game, actually, in that it features some basic interaction between the MC and the women domming him, and that's great. It's just really rough around the edges. I think big sis says 'en' instead of 'in' at one point, which was a bit strange. Oh, and the word 'Palpitating' referring to a penis is technically correct, but it's more of a clinical word a doctor might use. 'Pulsing' or 'twitching' would probably make more sense to say if you're aiming for dirty talk.
Basically, it's this kind of thing. I should probably stop before I turn this into a text-based let's play, though I easily could. It's not that I think the game hasn't been hard work to make, but that the dialogue and description are really hurting the game's atmosphere at the moment
It's literally in this thread where people are nicely explaining English to her. So again....read!
Second, I'm not saying you are wrong. The wording still needs more work. But when you say things like, " So, um, does this dev ever get a proofreader at any point? I just dropped a pretty negative review on this thing, but I've only played like half an hour, and I have to know... does the dialogue ever get any better? " then you are not here to help. You haven't read all of this thread or played the game long enough to have an opinion that I should care about and insulting someone who is giving you something they've worked hard on for free, while ignoring everything said and done to get to this point makes me think you are not even worth talking to. All that will get me is insulted, likely in an uninformed manor.
Good day
Second, I'm not saying you are wrong. The wording still needs more work. But when you say things like, " So, um, does this dev ever get a proofreader at any point? I just dropped a pretty negative review on this thing, but I've only played like half an hour, and I have to know... does the dialogue ever get any better? " then you are not here to help. You haven't read all of this thread or played the game long enough to have an opinion that I should care about and insulting someone who is giving you something they've worked hard on for free, while ignoring everything said and done to get to this point makes me think you are not even worth talking to. All that will get me is insulted, likely in an uninformed manor.
Good day
If you think the writing in this game is fine, back at you, go read more books and learn, you absolute sycophant. If you hadn't noticed, I've moved entirely to reporting typos, and am quite willing to spend valuable time doing so if it actually helps with development. I wouldn't bother asking about a game if I wasn't interested in it, is the thing, I was just frustrated from trying to play it at the time. The tone of my review is intense disappointment, something I wouldn't have if I wasn't anticipating playing this game, and not an active will to attack the developer. Like, you're continuing this argument just to tell me I'm a stinky doodoohead at this point, and it's pretty juvenile.
Look... I'm kind of past arguing with you over whether the writing is bad or not, because as you say, English isn't her first language. I might message an apology to Aery, because I honestly had no idea that was the case at the time of writing. A lot of porn developers are native speakers and just write shockingly bad dialogue, so I just assumed this was another case of that to be honest, which was wrong of me. Regarding you, though, if you actually don't think I'm worth talking to, please act on that in the future rather than paying lip service to it.
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You can just use the cheats. add gold or levels to yourself and the girls. Honestly though, it's not hard to get most of the stuff as many training options can be repeated endlessly, like the sock stuff for the maid and the boot licking for her enslavement training without needing to sleep.
The new update is to be released by the end of this week so I can assume next week for the free players
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Well, there isn't version 0.19 in her Patreon, so we'll have to wait longer. Though, what bugs me is that her side project's version 0.01 is already out, and the teaser isn't public yet.
I agree. She did promise the new trampling town in the first week but I think trying to do two at the same time was a bit more than she realized. It's not the first time someone has not reached their set goal times and I have little doubt that she will have a new version as soon as possible. Unless you pay for a membership at her Patreon then you can't really complain very much and if you do pay for it, like I do then you have a choice to make. You can wait it out and forgive her tardiness or stop paying her.
New ETA for Trampling Town 19 is Sunday. Fingers crossed it will be followed by an update
here soon after.
here soon after.
Aery forgot to put Trampling town v0.18 public to everyone. Can someone upload it here?
It has barely even been a day since she released it on her patreon and she started this thread so I'm not about to upset her by jumping the gun. If you really can't wait then scrape up the $6 to support her. There are so few games like this one so let's not ruin it for everyone, okay?
Do you accept requests or suggestion ideas for your trampling town game?