Decent intro that introduces every harem character and what the plot basically is: Maid wants MC for herself, she'll stop and likely steal everyone else away to do that.
PROS
-- Character visual design is mostly good, Maid's probably the best with the Dark Elf taking second.
-- Dialogue isn't mind-numbing and has some humor in it to keep a reader engaged.
-- Music is at 10% from the start so our ears don't get blasted by non-copyrighted music, so that's already a good first impression
NEUTRAL
-- There's one bath/NTR kiss-practice scene and one titjob at the end. It's a preview so I don't expect a whole lot, but a bit more with the maid could be nicer. Perhaps the titjob can be at the beginning to wake the MC up or start the game off strong, and a deepthroat at the end to reward an earlier dialogue option.
-- MC is about a fifth as horny as the maid. He talks about a harem and having a bigger dick, but he's not really eager to flirt or test boundaries, or even show initial interest in the girls until they offer something first. The maid seems more interesting as a main character already, which is fine, but it might not make sense calling him an MC then.
CONS
-- The harem characters are a bit one-dimensional, especially with their motivations. I want to know a bit about why they want something, since it's basically this:
- Maid wants the MC for herself. Okay, but why? He's basically an isekai Joffrey that wants a power fantasy in a harem, so what does he have to offer to justify that to the harem and her? Is it just because he summoned her?
- Elf fiancée is shy, naïve, sheltered, and.. she cares about the MC and is engaged. Why? How did they meet? Was it arranged? Was she just disillusioned by some accidental heroic act he did long ago which is why she's so hyped over getting a letter from him?
- Redhead anime rival shortstack student with anger issues is probably the worst out of the three that are into the MC. I get that she's a parody, but she doesn't stand out at all(Forgot her name) and she honestly could be cuter physically in comparison to the rest of the cast.
Most of the backing behind their motivations can be solved by adding a couple lines in the prologue, and playing off of those traits for the rest of the game might result in a story at least twice as interesting if the dev can work it in. Or maybe it'll be expanded in another chapter for a bit, dunno. I'd rather it be the first option.
-- MC is an isekai Joffrey. Yes, he's a parody character, but he's a bit insufferable at times which might be intentional. He's a mixture of greedy, selfish, and a bit naïve especially with his Maid, but it's a bit too easy to have him be the NTR victim when he doesn't have a whole lot anything going for him compared to the everything else of the Maid. At least make him a 2, 1, or a 0.5 in some way. He's the one that's at risk of not getting that harem he "desperately" wants.
-- The black colors and contrast are turned up too high most of the time and make me feel like I have an OLED monitor.
If the next update has some more content and runs a bit longer, it'd be worth supporting especially if the dev addresses some of these things.
