I mean it's your game you can do whatever you want but damn shame and wasted potential
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uuf this game has so much potential you knowI mean it's your game you can do whatever you want but damn shame and wasted potential
Is this the game for us who just love endless (as in 24h late) Indian train journeys?
He really needs a big Pakistani cock in his ass.
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Let's say this... there's NOTHING in the OP that creates any interest in the story. If this was a book blurb in a book on discount at the bookstore, I wouldn't pick it.
I'm sorry, I have been burned enough times in this site with "hidden" stories that turned out to be awful, or simply too basic. This one promises "something" but is too vague, too "hidden", too mysterious. The tags, or should I say, the tags that aren't there, don't help. The ones that are, help even less.
Don't get me wrong, this could be the next love of my life, but I wouldn't know, because it's under so many layers of vagueness that I can't feel anything towards it. If it is a passion project, maybe let some of that passion shine through? All I get is vague references of "something" happening...
Peace
I'm sorry, I have been burned enough times in this site with "hidden" stories that turned out to be awful, or simply too basic. This one promises "something" but is too vague, too "hidden", too mysterious. The tags, or should I say, the tags that aren't there, don't help. The ones that are, help even less.
Don't get me wrong, this could be the next love of my life, but I wouldn't know, because it's under so many layers of vagueness that I can't feel anything towards it. If it is a passion project, maybe let some of that passion shine through? All I get is vague references of "something" happening...
Peace
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Thanks for the feedback.Let's say this... there's NOTHING in the OP that creates any interest in the story. If this was a book blurb in a book on discount at the bookstore, I wouldn't pick it.
I'm sorry, I have been burned enough times in this site with "hidden" stories that turned out to be awful, or simply too basic. This one promises "something" but is too vague, too "hidden", too mysterious. The tags, or should I say, the tags that aren't there, don't help. The ones that are, help even less.
Don't get me wrong, this could be the next love of my life, but I wouldn't know, because it's under so many layers of vagueness that I can't feel anything towards it. If it is a passion project, maybe let some of that passion shine through? All I get is vague references of "something" happening...
Peace
Yeah, I understand I shot myself in the foot with that description.
I really wanted the players to experience the same shock/surprise one of the lead character feels during the first big reveal of the story. So, I purposely left the op vague.
I'll see if I can think of a way I can make the description without compromising on that experience.
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For those who don't know, since it's been decided that I'll be taking over the drawing duties for Twin Eclipse, I've started this short Comic project as way to both improve my drawing skills and simultaneously continue the story of the two sisters.
"Kiss and Forget" is set during Chandra's early years as a professional seer and tells a story about an interesting client experience she had back then.
Also, as a part of special promotions, I'll be releasing some extra NSFW sketches, exclusively here in this thread!!
I hope you like both the comic and the sketches
Looking forward to hear your feedback.
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I'm not sure if it was intentional, but I really like that you subverted my expectations between page 1 and 2. In the fourth image in page 1, I interpreted Chandra's expression as saying, "That's not how my magic works." But then it turned out that she immediately knew, and was sad because it was a sad reason. Well done!
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I'm glad you liked that she knew the answer instantly.
The subversion was probably unintentional though.
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I was trying to go for a more "mildly annoyed" or "disinterested" feel with her expression, rather than a sad one. (Clearly, I need to improve my drawing skills much more
Sorry about that.)Kinda like -- "I'm telling you I can answer/give ANYTHING you want.. and you ask about a useless necklace?"
And then, she goes on to casually break the woman's belief of living a perfectly happy life.
(If it was Surya in her place, she'd have been a lot more sympathetic about the woman's wants, but...)
The whole sequence is just to show Chandra operates on a bit of a weird scale when it comes to people.
Hopefully, I'll be able to do a better job with the upcoming pages communicating the core of this chapter.
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Thanks for sharing your feedback
It helps a lot. I really appreciate it.
