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turar

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Overview:
The story follow the life of 5 girls who accept missions from anyone, as long as the price is met with the risk​

Thread Updated: 2025-01-01
Release Date: 2025-01-01
Developer: Turar
Censored: No
Version: 1.1
OS: Windows, Linux
Language: English
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turar Congratulations on your first release! Good luck!
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justarandomuser123

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I know that you stated in the developer notes that you are not a native english speaker, but the text is painfully riddled with typos and poorly writen sentences. I suggest that you try to proof-read what you write, either with a text aplication (Such as microsoft Word) or ask someone else to do it for you if you can. You say that this is a project you were working on in your free time, so there's no rush to release it before it is in it's best possible state. It may be a bit entitled for me to be posting this, but you asked for constructive criticism and I think this is one of the most important things to focus on, as it is a big part of the presentation, and presentation is what makes people stay and enjoy the product or run for the mountains at a first sight.
Best of luck with the project, and other future ones you start.
 

turar

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Nov 25, 2023
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I know that you stated in the developer notes that you are not a native english speaker, but the text is painfully riddled with typos and poorly writen sentences. I suggest that you try to proof-read what you write, either with a text aplication (Such as microsoft Word) or ask someone else to do it for you if you can. You say that this is a project you were working on in your free time, so there's no rush to release it before it is in it's best possible state. It may be a bit entitled for me to be posting this, but you asked for constructive criticism and I think this is one of the most important things to focus on, as it is a big part of the presentation, and presentation is what makes people stay and enjoy the product or run for the mountains at a first sight.
Best of luck with the project, and other future ones you start.
I did have somoene proof read it, but I did some changes in my text and I forgot to send it to them ^^"
 

turar

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Nov 25, 2023
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heya, I dunno if peeps still follow my shitty game, but I'll give an update anyway. Like I said, I do this game in my free time and free time I was laking and since I saw that some peeps were complaining about the shortness of my game, I did my best to add as much content as possible without killing myself in the process (joking ;3). SO, I'm currently working on 396 renders and I've finished 65, so I still have 331 renders to go ^^. Tis was all, cya ya'll!
 

turar

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Nov 25, 2023
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I'm kinda bored so I'll answer the 2 revues I have.

1.I don't put sound in my game because I don't like it, I prefer my game silent, first because I feel a better immersion, second because i don't know what sound or music to put in my game.

2.Yes the game is short, but it's because it was a test to see if it would get at least a shred of intention...well I would have done it anyway

3.I know that there is a lot of typos and grammatical errors, but like I said in a comment above, I have a proofreader, but I did some changes in the text and I forgot to give it back to them. Also, they are still human so they can make mistakes ;)

4. Maybe I'll add some choices once I'm better with ren'Py

5.Yes I waist my time making this game chmo45645 ;)

that's all, cya <3
 

turar

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Nov 25, 2023
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finally done with the update, hope you'll like it , the next one will take a lot of time, I think I've done 30% of the script right now^^
 
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TMA987

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You should put a little more effort into the overview, there's nothing to convince somebody on the fence to try it. Even just a little more detail about the type of content in the game would help.
 

turar

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Nov 25, 2023
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You should put a little more effort into the overview, there's nothing to convince somebody on the fence to try it. Even just a little more detail about the type of content in the game would help.
You're right, I'll try to do my best, for the next update
 
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