Now sure the MC is ugly but he doesn't have the uncanny valley ugly and my poor rating has nothing to do with that, the big issue is the dev put this out into the world and there is barely anything to it, and unlike some reviewers, I don't see tits or a fetish I like and go "potential, 5 stars".
A first update is extremely important, its to show the world what I can do, and so you want the audience to find things they'll like, want them coming back for more.
The dialogue flows well but it's your standard put upon nerd intro and then it just suddenly ends at a fairly mundane scene of some character we barely know thinking that maybe they where too mean to the nerd. A first update either needs to have some nice sexy content, or interesting development (perfect start has both), this has neither because other than knowing that one guy bullies the lead, no one else has any real characterization.
Now I'm not saying this is a lost cause, who knows, maybe a year from now it'll be amazing, but you need to show that first.
A first update is extremely important, its to show the world what I can do, and so you want the audience to find things they'll like, want them coming back for more.
The dialogue flows well but it's your standard put upon nerd intro and then it just suddenly ends at a fairly mundane scene of some character we barely know thinking that maybe they where too mean to the nerd. A first update either needs to have some nice sexy content, or interesting development (perfect start has both), this has neither because other than knowing that one guy bullies the lead, no one else has any real characterization.
Now I'm not saying this is a lost cause, who knows, maybe a year from now it'll be amazing, but you need to show that first.