Midzayaki

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Overview:
A kinetic novel, for those who take their time. Gulliver (the hero of Swift's work) finds himself on an island in modern times. How he survives and how he will live is the story.
Thread Updated: 2022-10-07
Release Date: 2022-10-07
Developer: Midzayaki
Censored: No
Version: Ch. 1
OS: Windows, Linux, Mac, Android
Language: English
Length: Very Short (~10 minutes)
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Midzayaki I have edited your thread to follow the template. If you would like the developer badge please open a ticket here, put in your information and link the thread. If you have any questions feel free to ask.
 
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super_tramp

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This looks like a person that may have some artistic talents but doesn't have the computer hardware to create his/her true vision.

..and look, no crowd funding link (ie patreon), to try and milk people of their money on 1st release.

Anyways. Good luck to you, Midzayaki.
 
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Midzayaki

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Annie thinks the salt crystals are cutting into her skin. She thinks it would be good if someone made a cream that would protect her skin from these cuts. She can't invent this cream herself, because she has decided that she's going to have to deal with using skin blemishes from uneven tanning. It's absurd, but that's what Annie thinks.

Original text for Deepl translator: "— "I wish someone had invented a cream that would protect the delicate skin of children, women, feminine gays and transvestites from cuts, especially in the crotch. Too bad I'm already busy collecting and recycling spots of uneven tanning."
 

Oliz82

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Hello.

The samples made me come. And the result is surprising.

The worldbuilding is limited.
The characters are few and different.
The plot seems interesting but wasn't reflected in the first chapter.
The artistic side is well done.

This game is similar to a book with images. And it's fine like that. The overall story was interesting, though the main protagonist has no role. Some explainations were welcomed (satellite obsession, property of the trees, the bet, the populations...). The couple is really lovely and their feelings are shown through. The sex scene was correct, outside Juan's face when he released (it's more suitable to an horror theme), even though it's not animated.

The length of the text is different on every page which is understandable but some are too short like this one : 1679112190687.png
If it's this short, it's useless and gives one more click for the player.

The dialogues are sometime stranges : you've chosen to write the name of the one talking with his own color and the sentences just below with some necessary description, without punctuation. However, you did it differently sometime :
Forgetting the name or adding " ", making it redundant or keeping the same presentation for thoughts and other variants
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Those were just the more representative examples.
Solution : keep the same display for the same category from the beginning to the end.

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Also, what is the correct name : Hoover, Gulliver, Gouver, Guver?

The english seems fine but, since you're using a style similar to a book, you should be careful.

Good continuation.