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Heyo, I'm assuming English isn't your first language? I don't mean that it's particularly bad, but one very common mistake non-native speakers make is using contractions at the end of sentences. It's not 100% universally forbidden, but if you play it safe and make sure your sentences don't end in contractions, you'll avoid the biggest thing that sounds unnatural in your writing at the moment.
("Will you be there tomorrow?" "Yes, I'll." -> "Yes, I will." OR "Yes, I'll be there." etc.)
("Will you be there tomorrow?" "Yes, I'll." -> "Yes, I will." OR "Yes, I'll be there." etc.)
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Thanks for the feedback.
I'll put that on my spellcheck/grammar check list.
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It's one of those weird rules we don't even get taught, unless you're in like collegiate level English or linguistics classes, but that we all just kinda pickup subconsciously growing up using the language. Like the order of adjectives, or order force as it's called.
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Yeah, I get it. There is something like that for the order you use adjectives.
I lived in an English-speaking country for some time to get my degree, but it wasn't in linguistics (obviously). Even then, there are things I didn't pick up living there.
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I'd never dream of trying to write a story in my second language, so you're much braver than I am.
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first off i enjoy this game, so i'm just offering some feedback not complaining .. but the first sex scene with mc and laura in the storage room, she says "yes. i'm sensible but you can keep doing it" sensible should be replaced with sensitive. and the narration in the same scene as well uses sensible instead of sensitive
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Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it.
Doesn't matter how many checks we do, these things always escape. No problem, fixed.
so for the update just a tiny thing i noticed when
also intrestng update nice bit of bonding for everyone
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Hey, thanks for reporting that. I'll fix it. Well spotted.
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my english suck, but those two lines really don't sound right, first line probably need some rephrasing and second missing some words
mc "It has a minimum output. So, we shouldn't be able to use it just between us."
mc "I plan to let this thing with the casino gang, in exchange they will let it power the whole city."
mc "It has a minimum output. So, we shouldn't be able to use it just between us."
mc "I plan to let this thing with the casino gang, in exchange they will let it power the whole city."
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Secret Island [v0.6.8] [NocturnalDev] - Compressed
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0.6.8 was a nice update, nice story progression, and some nice sexy times with some girls.
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Played the latest updates (usually I skip one update and wait for the other)...
So, two things to comment:
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2) I'm gonna impregnate her
So, two things to comment:
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2) I'm gonna impregnate her
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The good thing is that she is very impregnable.
- Dec 30, 2021
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Hopefully we will have a school full of pregnant women in the future especially Iris for me I don't know why.