Hey there! Just learned of this game, and it does seem to be shaping into a really nice one.
My comments about it pretty much mirror the ones in
this post.
I just advise against excessive linearity: even simple "flavor" choices like the order you talk to characters with minor tweaks to the dialogues depending on it
example:
- if you speak first to "A", you learn that it's "B"'s birthday, then you greet "B" with a "Happy Birthday" with "B" having her initial lines happier
- if you first talk to "B" her initial lines will be more grumpy with the character revealing about the birthday
in both case, there would not be any other change(though I guess you could keep a mc_recall_b_birthday flag for future content)
Another point, but here it's frankly more about personal taste, is Olivia's dick: I think it would be more proportioned if it was just a little smaller, about 10% or so.
(and yes, I'm the same guy on /aco/ )
Other than that, the game looks interesting, the underlining ideas in plot AND mechanics are good and thus I'm waiting for the first release