It's good, but overrated. How this can get 5 stars is personally beyond me, but it's undoubtedly a quality product.
In the beginning, I enjoyed the fact that the MC was written as almost clinically logical. It made him distinct from the usual losers or Mary Stus often shown on the site. However, as time goes on, you get a sense that the writer just enjoys waffle. There's a lot of times in the story where there is just an intense level of needless dialogue. While initially it was done well, showing the MC's thought processes, by Friday or Saturday in-game it gets to the point where he's essentially just repeating himself, stating the same thing 3 different ways as if it makes him more intelligent the more he says it. Not only that, but sometimes his explanations just make zero sense. Perhaps it was due to the strength of the first couple days, the fact literally every other character says he's right, or a combination of the two, but I just cannot see how people just glide past some of his ridiculous comments.
If it was only that one issue in the writing then I'd probably give this 4 stars, but for some inexplicable reason, this issue then bleeds out into the OTHER characters. Amber, Tracy, even Cecilia and Esther on occassion, begin to adopt his robotic mannerisms, and even bring around the nonsensical explanations from newer updates. I'll provide an example (mild spoiler):
Amber, a hyper-intelligent woman, sits Sue down in front of a computer, and begins explaining to her pornography. When explaining a new concept to someone, generally speaking, you provide a rough description of what it is.
For some inexplicable reason, this genius defines it as "some people on this Earth apparently film themself doing naughty things and upload it onto the internet." This extremely simple (and grammatically incorrect) explanation should set the groundwork for the rest of the conversation, insinuating she is easing Sue in. She then says that the women in the videos aren't usually dating the men they're with. Sue asks if it's because they're undesirable. Amber then immediately takes a 180, and starts spouting some absolute nonsense about how it may be because men share their wives because there are so many women? Not only was it hard to read because of the nonsensical use of words like "phenomena" (which was also used improperly), but also for a woman who is meant to be hyper-intelligent, she doesn't seem to understand the concept of women being single. Despite having access to the internet.
Suddenly, Sue inexplicably asks "is this television?", at which point Amber says that television is "a website where you can watch videos". Not only does she not know what a website or television is, but she's now poorly explaining what a video is to a person who clearly doesn't understand it (but apparently had no questions when they were first mentioned), and then we see that Sue doesn't understand how a screen can show things. So Amber decided instead of explaining how Sue can use a computer, she should know about video pornography first. Then they just watch some porn and the scene ends
There are so SO many examples like this where scenes end up not only being effectively pointless, but also entirely nonsensical. They are further stretched out by theses needless attempts to sound intelligent, because apparently intellect is just rambling now. Any REAL intellect can tell you that intelligence is not just knowing something, it's being able to explain something SIMPLY, which happens less and less the longer the AVN goes on. Having characters not only be needlessly technical, but also INCORRECT, is so intensely annoying to read.
However, the developer certainly deserves praise for the visuals. While I find the sexual scenes lacking, every woman looks great. Each model is distinct and identifiable, the visuals are well done, lighting is good, and most errors you only see if you're actively looking for them (e.g. minor clipping of clothes, objects being in different positions when shots change).
Honestly, there are really only a few things that need to change to make the AVN worthy of 5-stars:
- removing the need to try and force technical language and jargon, and improving dialogue as the AVN goes on to make it more fluid and logical.
- by reducing the need to write so much dialogue, more time can be spent improving the sex scenes, so the space between them is not only shortened, but the pay off is greater.
TL;DR 6/10, great models and engaging story, but lacklustre sex scenes and bloated and unneccessary dialogue hold it back
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