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I think that this game should be called A Game Called Limp instead of A Town Called Tool because my dick was so limp. In fact, I was so grossed out by most of the characters, male and female, especially Jimmy the 45 year old biker friend. One female was somewhat attractive but none of the sex scenes with her were arousing or interesting. The writing style leaves a lot to be desired. It's like some 12 year old with a short attention span and a F- in English class suddenly decided to write stories.

I think that the game developer is a good guy though. From the interactions on this thread, this is probably his first game. He seems to be spending a lot of time learning as he goes, taking feedback into consideration, redoing a lot and making a lot of changes, etc. And I think that English might not be his native language. But this game just plain sucks. I know that the experience of working on this game might make him a good developer later on, but this game is definitely not worth downloading or playing. Maybe wait a year and then check his works to see if he has improved any. I read all the negative feedback on this thread and it was like nonstop roasting of the game developer, but I wanted to give it a fair chance and try it anyway. And I regret that I did. Some games might have one or more weak elements, and a few strengths. As far as I can tell, this game doesn't have any pros. It's all bad. Completely. This game will be like the Bad Rats: the Rats' Revenge game of adult games. Mark my words.

EDIT: The game has very little content. So maybe things will get a little better once more sex scenes are added with Brenda and some of the other girls. The sex scenes with Brenda that are already in the game are too short and not very arousing. Jimmy is a real erection killer. The sex scenes that take place while Jimmy is present also suck. None of the other sex scenes like lesbian carpet munching are erotic. It all feels very robotic. As if someone with penile dysfunction tried to make a sex game. The game lacks charisma.
 
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For those here for incest, skip this. Is false incest tag. cause people like to use it for marriage bs.
 

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For those here for incest, skip this. Is false incest tag. cause people like to use it for marriage bs.
agreed, if you go back through the thread, you will see I didn't actually assign incest tag to this myself. I don't consider this VN of mine as incest but some others might do, which is why I assume it was added.
 

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I think that this game should be called A Game Called Limp instead of A Town Called Tool because my dick was so limp. In fact, I was so grossed out by most of the characters, male and female, especially Jimmy the 45 year old biker friend. One female was somewhat attractive but none of the sex scenes with her were arousing or interesting. The writing style leaves a lot to be desired. It's like some 12 year old with a short attention span and a F- in English class suddenly decided to write stories. I think that the game developer is a good guy though. From the interactions on this thread, this is probably his first game. He seems to be spending a lot of time learning as he goes, taking feedback into consideration, redoing a lot and making a lot of changes, etc. And I think that English might not be his native language. But this game just plain sucks. I know that the experience of working on this game might make him a good developer later on, but this game is definitely not worth downloading or playing. Maybe wait a year and then check his works to see if he has improved any. I read all the negative feedback on this thread and it was like nonstop roasting of the game developer, but I wanted to give it a fair chance and try it anyway. And I regret that I did. Some games might have one or more weak elements, and a few strengths. As far as I can tell, this game doesn't have any pros. It's all bad. Completely. This game will be like the Bad Rats: the Rats' Revenge game of adult games. Mark my words.

EDIT: The game has very little content. So maybe things will get a little better once more sex scenes are added with Brenda and some of the other girls. The sex scenes with Brenda that are already in the game are too short and not very arousing. Jimmy is a real erection killer. The sex scenes that take place while Jimmy is present also suck. None of the other sex scenes like lesbian carpet munching are erotic. It all feels very robotic. As if someone with penile dysfunction tried to make a sex game. The game lacks charisma.
1) sorry my VN made your dick limp, I hear viagra can help with that
2) Actually am Scottish, so English is my first and only language and Grammarly approved of my dialogue after running it through it.
3) You clearly didn't view this with the expectation of it being an English class.
4) My game is more story and it's not for fappers, I hear there is this thing called porn that helps with that


As for non-stop roasting, correct but only people who generally post are the ones with something negative to say, the ones who are happy have moved on to something else.

sorry my VN doesn't meet your standards but thankfully for you, there plenty of options around here, just remember to look into that viagra thing because there is much worse than my VN around :)
 
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1) sorry my VN made your dick limp, I hear viagra can help with that
2) Actually am Scottish, so English is my first and only language and Grammarly approved of my dialogue after running it through it.
3) You clearly didn't view this with the expectation of it being an English class.
4) My game is more story and it's not for fappers, I hear there is this thing called porn that helps with that


As for non-stop roasting, correct but only people who generally post are the ones with something negative to say, the ones who are happy have moved on to something else.

sorry my VN doesn't meet your standards but thankfully for you, there plenty of options around here, just remember to look into that viagra thing because there is much worse than my VN around :)
1.) Just because your game causes limp dicks doesn't mean the players have a problem getting hardons. Nice try.
2.) Okay, so you are Scottish. That is even worse. So we can't blame the bad writing style and bad grammar on you being a non English speaker. Oh well.
3.) Writing style and grammar does make a difference though. I mean I have played games made by developers with really poor English because they were Portuguese or Russian, and their writing style was so much better. They didn't write like a 12 year old English class flunky.
4.) Your game is more for story? Ha ha. Don't make me laugh. Immediately on starting the game the MC finds a magic book that hypnotizes people and immediately used it make Becca stick a finger up her butt. Nice try.

You are right. There are plenty of other options out there. I've played hundreds of adult games. But when something is this bad, I felt inclined to warn other people. I even tried to compliment you and listed half a dozen things about you that I thought were good. I only attacked your work, not you. But you couldn't keep your temper in check and came up with some weak lies to attack me as a person. Sad. I would say good luck with your project, but I know it will remain a failure with that attitude. Plus your imagination stinks. Your writing style stinks. Your idea of sexy stinks. The game is 100% ugly just like your brain and soul. Dozens of other people roasted your game. I don't see you attacking them. I guess you could only handle so much truth, huh?

tl;dr - Bad Rats: the Rats' Revenge
 

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1.) Just because your game causes limp dicks doesn't mean the players have a problem getting hardons. Nice try.
2.) Okay, so you are Scottish. That is even worse. So we can't blame the bad writing style and bad grammar on you being a non English speaker. Oh well.
3.) Writing style and grammar does make a difference though. I mean I have played games made by developers with really poor English because they were Portuguese or Russian, and their writing style was so much better. They didn't write like a 12 year old English class flunky.
4.) Your game is more for story? Ha ha. Don't make me laugh. Immediately on starting the game the MC finds a magic book that hypnotizes people and immediately used it make Becca stick a finger up her butt. Nice try.

You are right. There are plenty of other options out there. I've played hundreds of adult games. But when something is this bad, I felt inclined to warn other people. I even tried to compliment you and listed half a dozen things about you that I thought were good. I only attacked your work, not you. But you couldn't keep your temper in check and came up with some weak lies to attack me as a person. Sad. I would say good luck with your project, but I know it will remain a failure with that attitude. Plus your imagination stinks. Your writing style stinks. Your idea of sexy stinks. The game is 100% ugly just like your brain and soul. Dozens of other people roasted your game. I don't see you attacking them. I guess you could only handle so much truth, huh?

tl;dr - Bad Rats: the Rats' Revenge
at some point, everyone is going defend there work, especially when someone complains that they are limp after reading a VN, its a "weak complaint", so you got a very direct reply. At least others here have been constructive with there complaints. Also, check through the thread again, you not the only one who got a direct reply.

it's always funny to me when people post negative comments about grammar on this forum, especially in something they apparently wanted to fap to which you did complain about. that is just embarrassing but hell, you do you.......literally :)
 
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I was constructive. Just both you and the developer chose to ignore the positive and only focus on the negative.
 
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it doesnt matter if the story could be a good one, you don´t want to play so ugly people like here....sorry but the MC is a real nogo lookwise....and where did you find the long haired rock´n roller in underpants!? sorry but i only saw the pics and they are really ugly...the most VN´s have a problem with ugly hair MC´s but this one is extra ,short ,fat.....whatever good luck with the vn....
Having Jimmy be the MC's best friend was a bad choice. I mean we see Jimmy as much and as often as the MC. He might as well be the MC. But that pairing just doesn't go right. I don't want to see Jimmy's ugly mug and body anytime sex and hypnotism is involved. It doesn't really matter to me how ugly or weird the MC looks. I could take all the same assets (models and backgrounds) that this game developer used and if all the tools I needed to make this game were free, I could make this game much more interesting and arousing. The only thing that can save this game is if the developer makes longer and better sex scenes with the blonde chick (I forgot her name) and adds good sex scenes with the orange haired and purple haired girls. The brunette chick in the banner looks like a tranny, but maybe it is just a bad picture. But judging from all the sex scenes so far, it looks like someone who is completely impotent and can't get a hardon tried to make a sex game. It's really weird. If the developer actually got turned on by his own game, that would be even weirder. Who would get turned on any of the content that is in this Chapter 2 version? It's so bad. I could not masturbate for three months, have a raging hardon, be on viagra, and immediately go limp as soon as I started playing this game. It's that bad.
 

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#rememberthiseveryone

The characters are meant to look the way they do and all the complaints just confirm a job well done on my part.

If you looking to fap to this, then delete and move on, this is a story with erotic images, deal with it.

It's not like there are no clues to both things above within and outwith my visual novel.
 

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Chapter 3 Release

Windows, Linux and Mac versions available for free via

Change Log
  • 143 new images
  • 16 new scenes
  • 25 pages from screenplay added
  • 2 new sex scenes
Chapter 3 description
Simon fully believes the magic book is the best thing to ever happen to him, but he must be sure the spells are working first. While Simon does this, Emma seeks help from her friend on coming up with a plan as she worries about what Brenda has planned. As paths entwine in a Town called Tool, our characters introduce new characters, and one gets a shocking surprise.

my Patreon account was deleted, so please remove that link.

if anyone does want to support me. when you go to itch and click the download link there, there an option to make a donation there.

P.S there a flaw I noticed in chapter 3 but will fix it in the next update, curious if anyone notices.
 

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which is embarrassing considering Simon is passed the age of being grounded, but Brenda controls his weekly allowance, which Simon can´t access his trust fund till he is 25.
Sees pic of MC.
Sees "kinetic novel"
Well sign me the f**k up!
Back to reality, i wish ignore thread would mean the game thread would never ever appear on my latest updates tab!
 

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oh look at the new review, I annoyed someone with my story background, I wondered if right-wingers would show up with there hate. I'm not surprised to see a new member posting a negative review due to the political background of this VN and get feeling it not be the last.

Sees pic of MC.
Sees "kinetic novel"
Well sign me the f**k up!
Back to reality, i wish ignore thread would mean the game thread would never ever appear on my latest updates tab!
That was actually a funny post but it also funny that you complaining about something that already been covered in the thread, MC is meant to look the way he is. deal with it

Also, you say you don't want to ever see this appear in your latest updates tab but still took the time to post a comment, which shows this in the latest comments, so thanks for that and each to there own.
 
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