First of all - thank you for your constructive criticism. I wrote the story in 1/12 hours, the idea came to me earlier. I wrote it in German and then had it translated paragraph by paragraph using DeepL. My English is nowhere near good enough for that.
The story is too "dark" for them. This is exactly the reaction I was hoping for. Not necessarily from you, but that was the goal. Just sex and a power play. No eroticism. There are three reasons for this. A blackmail like this is not a pony court but a game of life and death (figuratively speaking). And I have a diabolic pleasure in showing some here in this forum again and again the consequences of this power game. This has nothing to do with eroticism. On the contrary, I have deleted some passages that seemed too erotic to me. I also wanted to avoid the impression that I am a fan of such fantasies. There are some here in F95zone who know no sense of shame what concerns their preferences.
Now, as for your opinion on how the blackmail story should go, I agree - Sophia needs to be able to defend herself and trick Aiden a little bit at a time.
I will make a couple of corrections to the story. But it's my first story ever and I don't think this is going to be a passion of mine.
