My default setting is to side with a creator. They are putting in effort and work to try to produce something and that’s a fairly cool thing – even in this environment of degenerates! (I kid!! Sorta). Some writers phone it in… others put in some work. This is one of the latter kind. There’s a lot of work here but the ENTIRE thing is flawed because basic human thought processes aren’t considered.
The good:
Note to the author:
You have a good game… if the MC and Wife were believable. They don’t ever talk about shit … he could show her the texts from the guy at camp and that entire shit would come to an end. He could tell her he overheard the boss. That would fix issues. Why doesn’t he?? Also – is she the kind of person who cheats? It doesn’t seem like it.
The good:
- Lots of work and its well written.
- Content and layout are freakin beautiful.
- Wide diverse characters (if flawed)
- Huge potential (a bit undermined)
- The MC and his wife somehow met and got married and skipped communication. They just straight up don’t ever talk to each other and when they do they forget to mention all the actual issues that might come up. Its very off-putting because that’s now the kind of couple that would even last two seconds through hardship – much less the insanity of this kind of mess. WRITE BELIEVABLE CHARACTERS!!
- I almost think the interface would be better if it just flowed by random clicks. The buttons only exist to make you click them to forward progress. Just have the button light up and then move on to the next part of the story. Having to click click click isn’t beneficial unless I have options. I do not. Its notwhere near as bad as Wifes Phone but it could be better.
Note to the author:
You have a good game… if the MC and Wife were believable. They don’t ever talk about shit … he could show her the texts from the guy at camp and that entire shit would come to an end. He could tell her he overheard the boss. That would fix issues. Why doesn’t he?? Also – is she the kind of person who cheats? It doesn’t seem like it.