I can give you a sneak peak.
This is the summary of the remaster I gave Kerosene. It lays out the entire premise
of changes and fixed plot holes and broken paths. As well as fixing the rape scene and
it's aftermath. As well as potential ideas to move forward with. And NO SISSIFICATION
OF THE MC. I had talked to Kerosene at length about what their plans were and what you
guys are currently getting wasn't it. He had planned on splitting the story between the
MC and FMC's point of view and offer more choices. As in you would be playing as either the
MC OR FMC. So the adjustments I was making to the first half of the story was meant to fit in
with this plan by giving you more Wife POV moments and fixing some of the bad story elements.
Like the Chris blackmail, Rick's behavior toward the MC and FMC, the two faces of broken Autumn,
the two Henry's, Katherine, Jenaveve and Samuil and the camp. And address WHY no one went to
the police or hospital after the camp rape, as well as bring the mind control front and center as it seemed
to get lost in the mess.
So here's the summary:
The MC begins to succumb to the mind control and can’t
fight the urge to masturbate to his mother’s situation. When
The FMC comes home drunk and he’s angry and sees her cum
filled vagina it triggers him. He loses control and fucks her harder
than he ever has, and no matter how much he cums he can’t stop
fucking her. I switch to the FMC’s POV and she realizes what’s
happening and is confused at first because she thinks it’s still Samuil
But realizes it’s the MC and that he is fucking her like he never has before.
And she has many explosive orgasms until they both pass out.
This is why she’s not immediately taken to the police or hospital as
the evidence is ruined. And they only have her word for it.
There are two paths of play up until this point. One where the MC
has gained romance points with Katherine and/or Jenaveve and one where
he has been completely faithful. The aftermath path results are partially
determined by this. But the event still happens this way no matter what.
You also have two separate versions of Autumn at this point. One that
deliberately gets the FMC raped and another that is assaulted along with her.
The “bad friend” Autumn (who also gets gangbanged and wants to work there)
has no remorse for what she did and the FMC hates her for it.
This does not stop the “bad friend” Autumn story though, as she continues to
be an antagonist to both the MC and FMC.
The “good friend” Autumn is sympathetic to the FMC and plays out much
the way those conversations go originally. Only without Autumn trying to get the
FMC to cheat. She wants to help figure out the MC's issues after the FMC
confides in her in person so there are no texts for the MC to read revealing
what the FMC is thinking. He just sees suspicious texts like usual.
Because Autumn loves sex so much, she herself isn’t happy with what Samuil does
to her, but she accepts it since she got them in that situation to begin with.
She does, however, resent Samuil for what he did to the FMC.
As the story goes on, when the MC gets overly paranoid he loses it and fucks his wife
pretty much brutally until they both pass out. He doesn't remember the next day though.
The club scene.
The FMC is home the whole time being fucked by the MC who picks her up when she gets too drunk.
But we see it from his POV and he has no idea where she is because he doesn’t remember picking
her up or fucking her due to the mind control.
So the reader sees what they normally would read. She’s not home, he can’t find her, she’s in bed
passed out. HE is paranoid and thinks she had sex with someone else. Autumn insists that he picked
her up and the MC accuses her of lying. She tells him to fuck off basically like she does originally.
Which explains her lack of concern for the FMC. Something that made no sense before.
It also shows the MC is starting to lose it.
The FMC however DOES remember what happened and suspects that the MC gets this way when he gets
overly jealous, not knowing about the mind control they are both under. So she deliberately changes
her mind and smokes with Samuil.
And the story continues from there with the MC not realizing what the FMC is doing. She needs him to
get super jealous and angry to test her theory. She wants things better with the MC and will do anything
to make it happen. Which has been established over and over.
Plus she can now get off where she couldn’t before, even with Samuil, in a way that she truly longs for.
With her husband. So she needs the MC to stay this way to give her what she needs. True satisfaction.
On his side of things, he starts to realize that he's becoming satisfied but doesn't understand why.
And it's what's driving his subconscious to want to stay with his wife. A part of him knows she's
the reason. He simply can't leave her.
When and how she tells him comes later.
But this is why the events continue to unfold the way they do and police and doctors don’t get involved.