- Jun 11, 2017
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Just began playing your game. Great thing in it, it's music and sound effects, I can honestly say that in that department your game is one of the best here. But Engrish... I cannot say it's really strong, I saw worse. But absence of "it" in sentences ("it is" not just "is") where "it" must be is quite annoying. I don't know your native language (and why you can't make multi-language game), English is not my native too, I'm Russian, but I was taught even in school at my first year of English language (when I was 11) that there's no sentence in English without subject and no verb can be used without subject. Just like you write "I know is bad" and "Is a shame", both sentences lack of subject, "I know it is bad" and "It is a shame". Please remember that for those of us who do not speak English as their native read English with such errors... believe me, it's real torture, literally.Thank you, I was looking for something like this. I'm going to look again to everything you wrote down.
And about the English, I know is bad and maybe the "I'm trying my best" sometimes is not enough. Is a shame I can't publish the game with my native language, it would be a lot better, or maybe not lol.
Nonetheless, I'll try to improve it overtime since is already bad. It can't be worse, right?
But beside subject problem and occasional mix of meanings of words (native speakers can give you examples I'm sure) your language is quite good and it's interesting to read.
Just a suggestion, maybe it's worth to have a native English speaker as a proofreader. AFAIK, some people here can do it.
I noticed the same thing. Jess' eyes has vertical pupils, just like cat's eyes. I don't know if it's intentional but maybe it's part of the plot.Is sophies mom Jess a vampire? Her eyes are like Lynes. Couple other girls with off color eyes but otherwise normal so im chalking it up to regular honey select anime style color pallets. But jess has those cat eyes that lyne has. I know near the end she was talking to Kim about searching for other vamps in the area.
Neo_Nimaru, I found an error in chapter 2 after MC shooed away Vito with a kiss:
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