Ren'Py Academy34 [v0.30.2.2 Public] [Young & Naughty]
We welcome all suggestion on how we should improve the writing. Except the "oriental" thing, anything else that stood out to you in particular? I'm a not a native speaker, so these things are not as obvious to me.
And yea, Tracer... Tl;dr: we've added her all the way back in Demo, when we didn't actually know how our game should look, read and all that. So we made mistakes, many. Her route gonna be completely reworked at some point.
Last edited:
The_fallen_dragon
Engaged Member
- Jun 15, 2017
- 2,147
- 2,224
- 488
keff
Member
- Jan 21, 2018
- 154
- 120
- 183
there are a lot of small things, mainly awkward phrasing and typos. it's really hard to point out specific things when its just a lot of small things here and there. i'd recommend having a native speaker look over the dialogue and reword some of it to sound more natural. the weirdest typo to me was in a scene with mercy where mc said "God sleep" instead of "good sleep" and the G was even capitalized.
edit: also, MC mentioned pharah's crush on mercy and was able to do the homework job before either of those got seen/mentioned.
We already have a native speaker checking dialogues... Guess we have to figure something out, thanks for the response!
Last edited:
This is a really good game. In terms of routes I have enjoyed them all except the brig route (though not because of any inherent flaws just cause Im not into that) and since the devs seem to be really involved with the thread and the community, figured I throw this comment out to support them and thank them for listening to what people are saying and making a good game. Keep it up!
She's getting a rework of her route.
Last edited:
asgir546
Member
- Oct 15, 2019
- 189
- 202
- 207
I love your game, there is a feel-good vibe in it just like in most Akabur's game. You can feel the mix of humour and lack of serious which makes it very enjoyable. Overall, a whopping 5/5. You masterfully dealed with the hero being a nice guy and perv things, and avoiding the shaming that could have been used in other games. I particularly enjoyed the Audrey route, it was so cute !
So I've been playing for a while and I haven't seen widowmaker yet. Can someone let me know where and when to meet her?
asgir546
Member
- Oct 15, 2019
- 189
- 202
- 207
I've gone through the last update before the one that was published today, and until now you don't meet her, she just appear in two events you witness.
Hope one day we get the full Mei H Scenes. Fingers crossed for a POV titjob scene
Hey there! What do you need help with?
You could just unlock the archive.rpa file using RPAExtract and get the photos.