HTML Altered Vision [v0.18.8] [Caretaker Publishing]

[Caretaker17]

Does the story just not progress if I refuse to sniff the therapist's feet?

It doesn't! But that isn't intentional. I went and took a look at the progression and there is no way forward. This was probably a hold over from when that scene was new, and there was nothing else to see so it didn't matter if you didn't progress. I'll fix it in the next update!

 

[ffive]

Considering the MC's girlfriend inevitably meets a new "male friend" like, 2 events in her storyline, and the only choice the player gets in this regard is whether she's going to talk at length with MC about her sexual activities with said friend, or engage in them behind MC's back, probably prudent to give this one netorare/netorase tag(s)? Not like it's any real surprise in this genre, but you know.

edit: unrelated, but

I have limited time and energy to work on my projects. When I sit down to write I want to toss this little idiot into the fire and torture him. And I hope to make people happy by letting them live out their submissive desires vicariously through his torment.

Something to keep on mind: while, as a dev, you can get your rocks off effectively being a sadist towards a pathetic sad sack, the player doesn't have this option. They are forced to inhabit the shoes of that sad sack, and to be placed on receiving end of such hostility and contempt (something which bleeds through the writing) can be too much for many and limit your audience. There's difference between submissive desires and being plain hated and abused with no respite. The latter just gets tiresome (and dare i say, boring, because it's just mashing the same few notes over and over) quickly, like bad goth poetry.

 

[Temporarius]

This is great, although it doesn't seem to have changed much since I played it a year or so ago.

If I am not fooled by the timestamps, this seems to be a new release. What has changed?

 

[doomspud]

There is a scene where the player can suck a guy's dick! That's pretty gay. Then again it's kind of out of the way, so maybe that tag isn't too appropriate?

I know I'm late to this by a good two years, but yeah. No. The tag isn't even remotely appropriate. It's showing up in the "gay" tag list, like a lot of these CLEARLY straight-oriented femdom games do, and it's frankly really infuriating to actually gay men like myself and others who would really love to not have straight porn show up in our feed, the same as how straight men would doubtless love to not have our porn show up in theirs.

 

[DigitalMan]

I am not going to say much by way of reply but it's not because I didn't read and digest your post, there just isn't much for me to say.

The clarity was helpful! I have a firmer grasp on what you mean. Not defending it per se but early stuff was written just as I was getting a handle on how to use Twine so it is kind of limited. Reading what you had to say has given me a bit of inspiration to go back and consider where I can inject some more choice and option.

Maybe the player could have a chance to more proactively try to cover themselves in the bathroom, but doesn't fully succeed. Leading to some awkwardness but far more understanding. That sort of thing.

Like you said, it's very delicious watching them fail but it makes it tastier if you can try hard to succeed. Either way that might be a long ways off. But thank you for elaborating!

Nah, it's all cool. I get how it is writing something at first. You write and write, thinking it's super sick, but then you look back and realize how much you can improve on it, seeing themes and ideas that you could implement that simply didn't reveal themselves to you the first time through. Drafts are important for this very reason.

I'm glad you get what I mean, that's all I really needed to get across to you. It's fun watching the mc fail, but it's just a bit unfortunate that I have to click on the obvious fail option. It's more fun to click on the button I think is going to be an obvious win, but then the mc fucks it all up like the dork he is. I think you got that, and that's all that matters.

 

[Milovana]

When I sit down to write I want to toss this little idiot into the fire and torture him. And I hope to make people happy by letting them live out their submissive desires vicariously through his torment.

You made me happy

This is often how I play games and I think this one is well suited for it. I disagree with a lot of the criticism of this game, it seems to me it is mainly against the contents of the game. You don't want humiliation from your girl or bully? Maybe not play a game labeled humiliation. If you look at the tags and description of this game you should know what you are getting in to.

Hope to see more content coming soon with hopefully more censored pictures and video.

 

[artofvore]

Now, this....this is quality stuff.

 

[DOODBJ]

Looks like a game designed specifically for me looking forward to seeing it develop!

 

[brosephius]

This game is great so far. Asking for more choices/paths is like a mantra on this site, but i would rather see a game that does 1 thing well than try to spread itself thin (like so many games that try to have separate dom and sub paths, basically resulting in 2 different but compromised games).

I also like that there is some variety in the characters. Only the bully GF is truly disdainful, while the GF and mom are nicer, and the therapist is not-so-lowkey turned on by the MC's transformation. I would personally like to see the Mom and gf continue to be supportive of the MC's transformation in a more loving way, like i can already foresee the MC's changes revitalizing the underwhelming ERP sessions between the MC and GF. So contrary to that other poster, I don't feel like this game is just blasting hate at the MC, I think it's already varied.

Also I saw some criticism about the writing, but I personally really liked it, to the point where I wasn't missing the visuals as much is I thought I would. I like that this game elaborates on the sexy stuff while all but cutting out the rest, like even just not having to click a bunch of times just to sleep & proceed to the next day is so refreshing for this sort of game. If this game just coninues at its current pace storywise with the same mechanics, I think it will easily be one of my favorites on this site.

 

[princessdavina]

How do you get a Bra, or is it not possible

 

[anderson77z]

Looking forward to mom ntr

 

[vidyaa]

I felt like my choices didn't matter at all in this game. A lot of it seems to be a case of "Watch the scene or skip the scene" just worded differently.

1. Didn't peek on the girls changing room. When I got caught by the teacher, 2 random girls show up and give their statements. WTF?
2. Didn't jerk off with the therapist. She still tells me she has evidence of me jerking off to blackmail me with? Did you create it out of nowhere with AI?
3. After a few weeks, the therapist tells you to wear women's underwear. I just carried on as usual and the next session the character is automatically wearing it. Where the heck did he even get it?

 

[belzewolf22]

ai cg tag needed

 

[chrisdraconis]

do you actually have to access the therapists pictures to progress(and install the spyware) in order to progess the game?

 

[Beran]

There's nothing gay here...

Thats typically the case when "Female Domination", "Gay" and "Male Protagonist" are all together. Shockingly it doesn't have the sissy tag, which usually comes hand in hand with Fem Dom "gay" games.

 

[dav121]

How many weeks in game before shit happens?

 

[SimReaper18]

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When I play games like these, I pick the options that lead to trouble. I am looking for the content, not to avoid it. It's cute to be able to avoid it, but I always find myself hitting back <- and going for it anyway. So when making one, I made the assumption others would be like me.
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Even then, there are chances to avoid some things. Most of the therapist's tasks can be ignored and failed, and you get a penalty.
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I love that happening. I like seeing people get duped, give into their whims, be unable to muster any willpower. Why can't you run to the men's lockerroom? Because you are horny, pent up, and have a chance at something you've never seen or been close to before. One of my favorite scenes in another game features player choice being removed due to your lust.

Player choice is nice, I agree, but I approached this project from the same mindset I consume these projects: gimmie the action. All killer no filler.
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Most of the time, player choice allows the player to choose what content they wish to see or not. A player not being able to choose a safe option due to lust? They had the option to lower their lust beforehand, but didn't choose to do so. Allowing the player to choose what content they see is vital to most porn games. Some players don't like feet stuff. Some don't like armpit stuff. Some don't like panty stuff. But if that's the only option going forward, some players will be turned away, because they didn't have the option to say no. You may be a lust-filled pervert, and you may imagine the main character as a lust-filled pervert, but the player has to inhabit the MC and control them, and they might not be as lust-filled as the MC.

Along that same line of thought, someone else said:

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while, as a dev, you can get your rocks off effectively being a sadist towards a pathetic sad sack, the player doesn't have this option. They are forced to inhabit the shoes of that sad sack, and to be placed on receiving end of such hostility and contempt (something which bleeds through the writing) can be too much for many and limit your audience.
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This follows a similar idea, just with sadistic people rather than player choice. The comment the nurse makes about the player, where it's just rude comment after rude comment, is very sadistic and turns me away from the game. I don't personally want every single person to just hate me with such vitriol, because at that point it feels like it's directed at me, the player, rather than the character. It's not funny, fun, or enjoyable. It goes past the point of a humiliation/masochism fetish, into pure hatred. It turns me away from playing this game, or really any other game you make in the future.

But that's just my thoughts on the matter. Hope this helps somehow lol

 

[Shelscott50]

How do you get a Bra, or is it not possible

Ha-Ha!!
The DEV Screwed up apparently!!
- The therapist 'ordered' MC to arrive "next session" wearing a Bra & panties.
But neglected to give player the ability to get Bra, via doing laundry I would imagine, as we are unable to humiliate our MC by going shopping for a Bra,...
So, The DEV Totally skips that session and goes straight to chastity cage.

What is the point of the 'Closet'? We/MC does not have the option/ability to use it (buying clothes)
- managing to collect Socks from Mom & Kelly. Panties from Mom. but does not show in closet
nor the ability to remove panties, IF MC is already wearing them, for his boxers.

Maybe the DEV will fix his blunder by the next update; if he is not too busy 'fondling' his toy.

 

[Laki IH]

The main criticism I have is that the "nice" characters should ease into humiliating the MC rather than even the Mom and GF belittling him at nearly every opportunity right out the gate. I understand that the dev wants to humiliate MC as much as possible at every waking moment of his life, but consider this: What could be more humiliating than seeing your genuinely kind and supportive mom and GF who were both actually good in their roles (currently they aren't, even at the start) be corrupted by the MC's corruption and his own personal failure to properly communicate the situation he's in? Delayed gratification, my friend.

Even better if the player controlling MC actually has options that can maintain these relationships, this way the player is in on MC's humiliation by having the option not to humiliate him but choosing to do so anyway. As-is, MC has no option but to be a creep at least once in the prologue, thereby "justifying" the set-up he's placed in. If there is an option for him to be actually innocent that both adds weight to the routes where he isn't and opens a new avenue of humiliation: Him being innocent and pure, and professing as much, but being forced into the situation with fabricated evidence (not much unlike what's already there) that his mother unfortunately falls for.

Given the rather compartmentalized nature of the game thus far (character routes don't really interact much), I don't think adding these kinds of things would be the exponential increase in writing workload that it would in other more interconnected works.

A secondary criticism is that the sandbox loop is tedious, especially on weeks where you don't actually have a task. Most content appears to be Weekend events and Therapist sessions, leaving over half the week with nothing interesting once you've seen the limited variations on the weekday content.

One last little thing: Unless you're planning on having loads of stats, what's there currently could easily fit in the sidebar along with money and would be much more convenient for the player, especially since entering and leaving the stats page can break scenes.

 

[Caretaker17]

A secondary criticism is that the sandbox loop is tedious, especially on weeks where you don't actually have a task. Most content appears to be Weekend events and Therapist sessions, leaving over half the week with nothing interesting once you've seen the limited variations on the weekday content.

One last little thing: Unless you're planning on having loads of stats, what's there currently could easily fit in the sidebar along with money and would be much more convenient for the player, especially since entering and leaving the stats page can break scenes.

The rest of your post, of course, was worth reading but I only quoted these two as I feel they're the most immediately actionable for me. Regardless, thank you (and the people above you too!) for taking the time to write out your thoughts/reply. The stats thing in particular is definitely worth giving someconsideration. Same with the weekdays being a bit limited - especially if not engaging with the school bully. Either way I just wanted to say I appreciate the time taken by you and everyone else to write a reply with your thoughts. ♥