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Mark37

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Sep 2, 2020
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Its your aunt, not mother.
The MC's mother died or something.
MC's mom is not dead. Actually mom of the mc is a real estate agent named Maggie ( I think ) and if you notice, a real estate agent named Maggie told MC at the beginning of the story that he have to leave his apartment. So thats most probably his mom if I remember correctly.
 
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Content_Consumer

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Dec 24, 2019
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I don't understand why the MC would go anywhere with that cop, certainly not a 20 minute drive to secluded area for a 2 minute conversation about something she shouldn't even know about and then the MC willingly just tells her. At that point it makes no sense for the MC to indulge that cop in any way.

I would have just been like "nah, I'm good thanks." and then just left.


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Who cares? I'm Johnny Horse-Cock, I've already got more women than I know what to do with, I have zero use for club sluts.
 

Canto Forte

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Jul 10, 2017
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Oh, but there is something the dirty cop point blank tells MC right off the bat:
she is looking to have him locked up long time on trumped up charges
MC knows it and calls her bluff, his babe knows it and callls her bluff.

All of that in mind, going to the station where he might not get out,
after he was threatened with a prison cell,
as it has been obvious for months she is trying to do him dirty,
is the stupidest thing to do, precisely after he just told his babe
his whole ordeal and his babe is siding with him.
All of a sudden, having this urge to go to the station, out of the blue,
opposing his own babe, maks it seem like like he has something to hide from his babe,
but would tell the cop at the station, where he would get arrested and never heard of again.

Everybody knows there are no grounds for any a that. The cop is bullying him hard and he is caving in.

Not to mention throwing his whole life away to indulge a cop who is openly
gunning for him on what we all know and his babe knows and he knows are
trumped up charges.

This feels like just another suspension of diebelief moment straight outta nowhere,
as MC keeps resisting her harrassment about a shut down case, his babe is agreeing he is being harrassed,
then outta the sudden, contrary to everything before, no explanation, no nothing,
MC agrees to be baited into what he knows already and his babe knoews already to be a trap.
I don't understand why the MC would go anywhere with that cop, certainly not a 20 minute drive to secluded area for a 2 minute conversation about something she shouldn't even know about and then the MC willingly just tells her. At that point it makes no sense for the MC to indulge that cop in any way.

I would have just been like "nah, I'm good thanks." and then just left.


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Who cares? I'm Johnny Horse-Cock, I've already got more women than I know what to do with, I have zero use for club sluts.
There is no upside, there is no plot or tension not in any wayinticing
when MC is dumber than a door knob .. oh wait!

Could be a forced exposition dump and a deliberate intrigue starter,
it just feels outta place and counter plot to become basically a dormat to a cop.

Precisely as he is supposed to bodyguard a beautyful honey already sexually assaulted by assholes.

MC was supposed to have a plan, a vision, just playing into some antagonizing
enemy hads feels counter intuitive to everything MC had done and stands for right until now.

Then there is this reveal that is also strange, where the huge scar he supposedly got
from one alley brawl where he was mugged for his wallet
turns out to be a stab wound from a lot of years ago that is still not healed.


It is jarring, offputting, also for being already there contrarry to MC healing powers is another
strange counter plot, counter narrative visual aspect of dragging the plot by forgetting
what was pertty clearly laid out in the life of MC as a dish washer having to put up with his boss shagging
the server all over the workplace, which is sexual harassment and sex for job whichever way you look at it.
Whatever sugar coat that diner babe is putting on MC, her being so down on her luck to the point of exasperation,
whre she starts to make up stories to cover for her molesting boss,
it is what it is: the asshole boss keeps abusing her everywhere.

Good on MC to have escaped that constant assault on his common sense, his pride, his humanity.
 
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Old Man Al

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Jan 18, 2022
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Well thats a porngame alright.
In the beginning I thought this was a storyheavy VN (which I personally prefer), but later you just run from fuck scene to fuck scene (or at least naked skin scene) and the more you fuck the more the story slows down.
The renders are nice, even if sometimes the people look like they have plastic skin.
The dialogues are... ok for the most part. I had way worse on this page, but they are still not really good.
And dev, IMO, you should really stop wasting time on renders that are just women walking asswiggling over the screen. It is kind of wasted time AND animations are better used elsewhere - as I said imo of course. Maybe other people feel different about this.

I really hope this gets somewhere storywise, before just being one porn scene after another or given up at all.
 

Canto Forte

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Jul 10, 2017
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The shrinkage is in the works ... till then, bask in the unrestrained throbbing pleasure of
alley walking with the hottie.
 
3.50 star(s) 92 Votes