- Feb 10, 2018
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I think the tone of this VN needs to change a little bit I feel there's a recurring theme of naiveness in anna's character even though with or without Jeremy path she acts like she is under incredible pressure without any association with Sergey, Fritzgerald, Ashley, or any other character that was forcing her to do stuff in this chapter but still after the fiasco in the first chapter she is still kinda same with a better look which bothers me. I think the second chapter is a great opportunity to show the progression of character like anna starts the corruption instead of participates in other characters events and leaves the character hanging rather than full-on corruption from the other characters. I would have loved to see Anna becoming the manipulator for a change and holding all the cards and chooses to indulge with characters based on trust points or Anna is not easy to approach as she was in the first chapter would be great or she is learning some kind self-defense after what some characters did to her in the first chapter. I think DeepSleep can pull this idea off with the storyline of the detective and I hopefully think this chapter can separately itself exploring different stuff than the first one.