- May 9, 2019
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Well.. that was a very interesting first chapter. While I do have a few plot questions*, I have to admit that I enjoyed it very much. I tend to avoid first releases as many projects later fail to keep up. It was the name that led me trying it, for reasons too long to explain now. But I'm glad I did. The amount of work is evident in the overall quality shown in the first chapter.
While it is too son to speak about story, the characters are very well done I love when romance/sexyness is not the main selling point of the novel as it is in pure love stories. I care about their interactions and motives beyond the "where I will end up putting my dick", which allows for a potential great story, with chaos, conflict, drama, comedy and emotion in general.
So, as almost everybody did, I would say first chapter is a profound success. I hope developer can keep that level of quality beyond. I am confident setting the story right will be the key and from what I read the story is not written (although given what is there seems to suggest there is an idea of where it will go), so if there is anything I would wish is that dev focus on that.
*First, is that MC seems to much of a great guy to go having no friends as he claims, while he still has June.
Second, and more important, from the relationship he seemed to have had with Kin when they were in high school, it seems very weird given the rest of the personality and he shows he would simply stop seeing and caring about her. Their relationship was clearly way more than simply project team. He seemed to have been crucial in her surviving high school. So they clearly cared about each other. But even from a point of view of self interest he would have wanted to keep in touch, when she has his dog, which is a miraculous invention he wants to keep pushing forward. No matter what your girlfriend tells you, you would not simply discard such a successful proof of concept. You would want to keep it in your head. Again, I am not saying this is simply wrong, as we have too little information about it. But a simply "pity we lost contact" and "ohh so it worked" seems not simply out of character but very naive. For example, had Kin lied to MC and told him he Coco "died" or she broke her just to avoid seeing him after having her obviously in love heart broken when she confessed or some usual crap, would explained MC no longer getting in touched and going back to Coco as a proof of concept.
BUT AGAIN, not trying to stir the story anyway. We have no information so everything goes and I want to see what Dev has in his head. I would, however, like to see answer to some of these questions.
While it is too son to speak about story, the characters are very well done I love when romance/sexyness is not the main selling point of the novel as it is in pure love stories. I care about their interactions and motives beyond the "where I will end up putting my dick", which allows for a potential great story, with chaos, conflict, drama, comedy and emotion in general.
So, as almost everybody did, I would say first chapter is a profound success. I hope developer can keep that level of quality beyond. I am confident setting the story right will be the key and from what I read the story is not written (although given what is there seems to suggest there is an idea of where it will go), so if there is anything I would wish is that dev focus on that.
*First, is that MC seems to much of a great guy to go having no friends as he claims, while he still has June.
Second, and more important, from the relationship he seemed to have had with Kin when they were in high school, it seems very weird given the rest of the personality and he shows he would simply stop seeing and caring about her. Their relationship was clearly way more than simply project team. He seemed to have been crucial in her surviving high school. So they clearly cared about each other. But even from a point of view of self interest he would have wanted to keep in touch, when she has his dog, which is a miraculous invention he wants to keep pushing forward. No matter what your girlfriend tells you, you would not simply discard such a successful proof of concept. You would want to keep it in your head. Again, I am not saying this is simply wrong, as we have too little information about it. But a simply "pity we lost contact" and "ohh so it worked" seems not simply out of character but very naive. For example, had Kin lied to MC and told him he Coco "died" or she broke her just to avoid seeing him after having her obviously in love heart broken when she confessed or some usual crap, would explained MC no longer getting in touched and going back to Coco as a proof of concept.
BUT AGAIN, not trying to stir the story anyway. We have no information so everything goes and I want to see what Dev has in his head. I would, however, like to see answer to some of these questions.
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