I haven't finished enough to leave a review but I've seen enough to make a comment or two.
1. Biggest issue up front is the colored text. With all dudes being green and all women being red. It gets confusing when there's several people in a conversation. The intro has a moment where there are 7 possible speakers and I could only tell when the protagonist was speaking is because he's blue.
A solution to this is simply add more colors... or just drop them entirely.
2. I'll spoil this for those that care about that sort of thing. I think the whole Julia diversion is just a waste of time? You get one sex scene lacking a great deal of writing and only one gif with her and then we slingshot two years and then jump a few more to what is essentially Japanese hentai plot. I thought this was gonna be a whole route and then it just ends making me feel like my time was being wasted.
I don't think there's a solution to this to be honest. Just a heads up would be nice.
Side comment. What's the point in giving us the option to creampie Julia? With time skips I assumed that choosing that option might lead to you having a kid or something.
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If the intro's gonna remain this way, a friendlier "restart button" would be nice so it doesn't boot people back to write your name. Though that is admittedly a minor QoL nitpick.
4. Gotta back up the comment against copyrighted material. Not only is it tacky, it can get you in trouble. Technically you can get in trouble for using porn gifs without the actresses' consent. Though most really don't give a shit. Using James Bond however would if you intend to make a lot of money off of this.
4.5 Didn't know about Banshee before reading the comments in this thread. Looks like a good show. Might check it out. Though I would highly suggest making a note that this is a loose interpretation/parody since it seems enough people know about it to get confused/surprised. It'd also have your ass covered under parody protection.
5. Lastly, this is just advice I give to every HTML game maker, sex scenes should be consistent. If you're not gonna use a dedicated actress for each character, at least use the same scene as a source for your gifs. Switching actors randomly is just jarring.
I will say that I'm still interested in what more there is to see but there are some obvious edges that could use some smoothing over.
I will praise the shooting mini-game. I've genuinely never seen an HTML game attempt a quick time event and it was quite fun.
1. Biggest issue up front is the colored text. With all dudes being green and all women being red. It gets confusing when there's several people in a conversation. The intro has a moment where there are 7 possible speakers and I could only tell when the protagonist was speaking is because he's blue.
A solution to this is simply add more colors... or just drop them entirely.
2. I'll spoil this for those that care about that sort of thing. I think the whole Julia diversion is just a waste of time? You get one sex scene lacking a great deal of writing and only one gif with her and then we slingshot two years and then jump a few more to what is essentially Japanese hentai plot. I thought this was gonna be a whole route and then it just ends making me feel like my time was being wasted.
I don't think there's a solution to this to be honest. Just a heads up would be nice.
Side comment. What's the point in giving us the option to creampie Julia? With time skips I assumed that choosing that option might lead to you having a kid or something.
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Honestly I don't see the point of this. It's just an odd trick that can confuse people more than offer an engaging gameplay. The intro has so many road blocks and early ends that I'm confused as to what it's trying to achieve. There are options that are listed as "Ending" which don't take you to an end and there are options that are vague like "Go back to prison" which yeah could mean rob a grocery mart and then get caught by the cops like a dingus but honestly it more seemed like an opportunity to go get the phone number.
If the intro's gonna remain this way, a friendlier "restart button" would be nice so it doesn't boot people back to write your name. Though that is admittedly a minor QoL nitpick.
4. Gotta back up the comment against copyrighted material. Not only is it tacky, it can get you in trouble. Technically you can get in trouble for using porn gifs without the actresses' consent. Though most really don't give a shit. Using James Bond however would if you intend to make a lot of money off of this.
4.5 Didn't know about Banshee before reading the comments in this thread. Looks like a good show. Might check it out. Though I would highly suggest making a note that this is a loose interpretation/parody since it seems enough people know about it to get confused/surprised. It'd also have your ass covered under parody protection.
5. Lastly, this is just advice I give to every HTML game maker, sex scenes should be consistent. If you're not gonna use a dedicated actress for each character, at least use the same scene as a source for your gifs. Switching actors randomly is just jarring.
I will say that I'm still interested in what more there is to see but there are some obvious edges that could use some smoothing over.
I will praise the shooting mini-game. I've genuinely never seen an HTML game attempt a quick time event and it was quite fun.
Okay I just left a comment but this made me bark out laughing and I'm not sure if that was the intent.
In the same scene, on the same page without any progression we get introduced to one of our male colleagues with this.
Which is directly followed up with by this.
I'm not sure if jovial laughter was the intended reaction you wanted. One suggestion I might add, I'll preface that I'm not a fan of AI, but you could use AI for the female characters to be dressed and located in settings that the scene is actually taking place in. That way when you do use porn gifs, having a dedicated actress won't be a requirement as long as the girl resembles the AI profile pic.
I also thought up another solution to my first listed issue is possibly add character portraits next to dialogue. Which is rather common in HTML games.
In the same scene, on the same page without any progression we get introduced to one of our male colleagues with this.
Which is directly followed up with by this.
I'm not sure if jovial laughter was the intended reaction you wanted. One suggestion I might add, I'll preface that I'm not a fan of AI, but you could use AI for the female characters to be dressed and located in settings that the scene is actually taking place in. That way when you do use porn gifs, having a dedicated actress won't be a requirement as long as the girl resembles the AI profile pic.
I also thought up another solution to my first listed issue is possibly add character portraits next to dialogue. Which is rather common in HTML games.
This will show up if you click on PBD even if you're at another location.
I'd suggest possibly having each location removed as you click on them or just give us the usual "next" button.
Damn, if that’s the case, I think I’m gonna change the GIF entirely just to be sure. Thanks for the heads-up!
Thank you so much for these thorough replies. There’s a lot to unpack, so I’ll go through each issue one by one.
1. About the colored text, my intention was to use it to separate dialogue from narration, as I thought it would make the story easier to follow. All the male characters are indeed green, but I actually used two different colors for the female characters. That makes four colors total, and honestly, it’s already a pain to add them to every line of dialogue. So I think I’ll remove the colored text in the next hotfix.
2. About Julia, she will make a comeback in future updates. For now though, I don’t have any specific plans for her. The decision to creampie her is consequence-free choice.
3. Yeah, back when I first started working on the game, I tried to put as many things in as possible, so removing the silly box button and unnecessary endings/plot points is a great advice.
4. I have to admit, I don’t know much about copyright issues. I’ll remove the James Bond GIF and replace it with something else. Oh, and what about the Blondie GIF from The Good, the Bad and the Ugly, does that have the same issue?
4.5. Yes, Banshee is a great show, you should totally watch it. And thanks, I’ll add a parody note in the game description in the hotfix too.
5. That’s exactly what I’m trying to achieve, a dedicated actress for each character. I only switch actresses when there’s no other choice, or when I can’t find a GIF that fits the scenario.
Thanks for liking the shooting mini-game! I was really close to removing it since laptop users were having a tough time with it, lol.
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This is also a big issue for me, finding actresses with corn in a cop/police theme is like finding a needle in a haystack. I do have a plan to replace that image with something more suitable, and AI is my last solution.
I'll keep this in mind.
I’ll fix the rest of the errors, thanks for pointing this out, I really appreciate it.
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you need to do something with time leak. I mean switch from cell 1 to cell 2 takes 15 minutes??? Same thing with elevator in hotel, transitions between office and squad room and many others. Yes, workaround exists, but anyway. All in all interesting start, good luck dev
If you ever make a discord, you could set up a channel dedicated specifically to catching these hiccups.
There were a few spelling and grammar issues I came across but at the pace I was posting I didn't want to get a strike from the admins for spam.
Sadly yes. Though something more of personal taste, I just suggest not using media like this.
I feel like I was a tad negative in my responses so I'll say straight up that I see a lot of promise in this game. There is genuine care which I can only say I've seen for very few gif based HTML games. Stock footage of other media makes it less of your work and more of someone else's.
Honestly? I'd say crop the images to a facial profile.
Or better yet. Specifically look up cop porn, see the actresses, use what cop porn of them there is, and then you can use all the other stuff they've been in across town or in homes.
I don't think anyone would complain if only one scene had the actual uniform in it.
Also this. This is really good advice. It's a small town. 15 minutes is a good time if you're going down to the end of a street. I don't see enough HTML developers do this, but a WAIT option can and should be in consideration.
Before I leave you. I would give the advice that you should perhaps put more meat in your sex scenes. A single gif with a paragraph or two of text... is kind of lame?
If you have access to a gif of part of a scene, you might as well use more of that scene for more gifs. And what writing there is shows that you have enough talent in writing to make them more engaging.
As I've told other creators. Give us a reason to experience your sex scenes instead of going to the source material.
Edit: The random blowjob with one gif and little build up at the party is a perfect example of this. My response was "Well okay that just happened." It was in the middle of a scene and felt really out of place due to the lack of build up.
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I’m reworking the prologue, so for now please skip it and try out the main game instead. But if you still want to play the prologue, here’s what to do:
- At the beginning, click on the box button in the image above to get the phone number.
- In the bar, when you’re on the phone, refuse the offer.
- Don’t stay with the bartender.
- Go for your girlfriend.
- Save before the gunfight mini-game just to be safe—or you can simply skip it.
From there, you can continue straight into the main game.
Where and how do you get the next interaction after talking with Marina and Rissa about Jack? I waited 1 week after the conversation and not sure where to go at midnight to find the 2 trucks?
