- Jan 1, 2019
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So instead of " By a surprise twist of fate, you actually landed an enormous dick! Unfortunately, with the whole beta vibe you have, the prospects of using it are pretty damn slim."As for your edit - it's ok, but I don't like the dot after "enormous dick". I mean, it should be two parter sentence in my opinion - like - there's that dick, BUT there's also the beta thing. Otherwise this would disconnect from the begining - we were saying bad things about Harry, and then there's this enormous dick out of nowhere But I'll implement the rest when i have a moment, thanks!
Maybe "By a surprise twist of fate, you actually landed an enormous dick, but the whole beta vibe you have means you have limited prospects of using it." might suit you better then.